Silver Dragon Player

Well, it's outrageous to just buy this book without reading it when I bought Black Dragon 😂 I was chasing the Black Dragon Codex in ancient times, and with the support of ancient welfare, I bought most of the Black Dragon for nothing. Now this book has become a direct fan of Black Dragon, and I am speechless. However, since I have been bound to this book by my own mistakes, I will try my best to correct them in the comment area later, and give some bad points to the book review circle... From now on, I will live in this building to complain

After reading a little bit, let me comment The daily series starts at the beginning, and it is well written Then the transition in the middle is a little abrupt (referring to the mystery of grabbing Jackie Chan's gift, although it is described, but the explanation is really not good), and then the Novice Village boss link From the (ridiculously short) protagonist group plot, and then to Old-fashioned alien beast lord That is to say, if you don't like the daily series/protagonist group, you can continue watching. Don't worry about these two points, it's just a buffer at the beginning As for the natives, don't worry (I personally don't like time travel Then, the poisonous points are typos, grammatical errors and confusing names (I complained about this in several chapters😂). This is the biggest problem. If you can accept your own corrections, you can read it. At least the plot before the trio did not collapse. If the plot collapses after that, I will not say anything about it.

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The Aboriginal protagonist is not very likable…

Seeing the end of Ten Thousand Bodies, I will make a brief comment on this dragon article. First, let's talk about the advantages. Personally, I feel that the biggest advantage of this book is that it has a real dragon protagonist. Nowadays, too many protagonists of dragon novels either overcome their lack of love for treasures, overcome their laziness, etc. The author can choose to accept these bad habits, which feels more real to me, which is a plus. 2. The protagonist has a cute personality and is quite likable. Then let's talk about the shortcomings. The biggest shortcoming of this book is that the author obviously has no outline, the plot is confusing, and there are a lot of logic bugs. I saw Chapter 75, and I couldn't think of anything to summarize the plot of Chapter 75. It's not water, it's just a hammer in the east or a hammer in the west. It doesn't matter at all. 2. The author wrote the plot randomly and had too many bugs. I'll just say a few. 1. The author said that the Dragon Mother asked the Dragon King to fight in order to prevent the protagonist from being exiled, and then took the initiative to ask the Dragon King to imprison her. Why? Why fight with the Dragon King so that the Dragon King can violate the ancestral precepts and not banish your child? 2. In order to save the Dragon Mother, the protagonist goes to participate in the Dragon Art Festival. In the end, cheating won, but didn't you participate in the Dragon Art Festival just to make other dragons owe you a favor for saving the dragon mother? Why did your protagonist never mention Dragon Mother after he woke up? 3. The protagonist attacks Noah mysteriously. Anyone who has seen this plot knows that it is the author who forcibly suppresses his intelligence. 4. The protagonist is about to be exiled. The old dragon said that for the sake of the protagonist's grandfather, he would save the protagonist and disobey the Dragon King's order, and the Dragon King agreed. Then the next moment the protagonist is in the cage of thousands of bodies. Author, can you tell me how this plot developed? Is this the rescue that Lao Long said? 5. The author said that Wan Chu was ridiculously strong, with more than 300 baby dragons in the cage, and Wan Chu never left any trouble behind, and would kill each other's parents before catching the baby dragons. Then the Silver Dragon clan where the protagonist belongs has only a total of more than 20 dragons (including young dragons). Not to mention that even though Wanzu had killed hundreds of dragons, no big boss from the dragon clan came to trouble him. Let's just say that such a boss who was so awesome that he had killed hundreds of dragons would be beaten unconscious by the two young dragons of the protagonist. What were you thinking about when you wrote this plot? 3. The poisonous point of Goldfinger is that it was said at first that Goldfinger is a VR game (mentioned in the previous chapters), and then the money in the VR game can be withdrawn from reality, so I will treat it as plot development. But then why did the dragons in VR games start to become real dragons? Why can dragons in VR games also come to the real world? Your VR game is really awesome. 4. The disgusting pet system. I don't know what others think, but I felt a little uncomfortable when I saw the author setting the protagonist's best friend as a pet. Later, in the VR game, an ancient dragon-level baby dragon with S+ potential became your pet willingly because of his grandfather's good friend. Author, don't you think this is as disgusting as a mindless harem? To sum up, the writing style is good, and the character design is also very good in the early stage. But writing a book requires using your brain. When writing a plot, you should first think about what the plot is going to do and make an outline, okay? There really is a reason for your poor grades. But what I want to say is that if you write well and plan all the plot developments, with your character + writing style, this book can become a good book, do you understand?

This post is aimed at a strange Shen Nong, to serve as a warning to those who come after me. Thank you for mentioning me. A warning to latecomers, what you said is not completely right: bug1 obviously has another hidden agenda. Whether the Dragon Mother went to [fight the Dragon King] because [the protagonist is not exiled] is open to question. The following original text: "I don't understand the mission, and I have no sense of belonging to the group. But you are different. You have always done this, haven't you? Where is Beihua Naqi (Dragon King's daughter)? Yes, Sisidona is there too." The old dragon said with a sigh in his tone, "All the dragons think that you (Dragon King) imprisoned Sisidona (Dragon Mother) because of an attack on you (Dragon King), but not many dragons know that it was Sisidona's request." And it was said later that it was actually the Dragon Mother and the Dragon King who made a play to drive the protagonist out, just to trick the stupid protagonist. bug3 can be seen as a foreshadowing. The protagonist was obviously mentally abnormal when he attacked Noah. Original text: That was the bite from Joel (the protagonist). The silver dragon eyes were burning with hot black flames, and the scales on the body also glowed with dark characters. It was a pattern that was not recorded in the inheritance. Noah (the dragon being attacked) notices something strange about Joel. It's different from what you said. As for bug 4 you mentioned, is there any conflict between saving the protagonist and sending him to the Cage of Ten Thousand Bodies? From the perspective of Lao Long, the protagonist can survive from the hand of Wan Zu who has not really grown up. There is also bug 5. If you look carefully, you will know that those young dragons are not at the same level as the dragons in the protagonist's Dragon Valley. What are the dragons in the protagonist's Dragon Valley? Being able to cross planes and stand at the top of the food chain in all the worlds, how about the dragon species captured by Wanshu? A Wanshu that has not fully grown up can kill a bunch of adult dragons. Later, a race from a high-level plane described Dacob (a young dragon captured by Wanshu) as [an indigenous dragon from a low-level plane]. This is a bloodline issue, and the two dragons are completely incomparable. As well as Goldfinger, the author has described that the game has grown in secret, and the NPCs have changed from rigidity to flexibility, as well as the skills in the game. I remember describing a shield at that time, saying that the essence of the shield was actually composed of special 0101. It is reasonable to infer that the essence of the dragon brought out is actually composed of 0101. Maybe it is still evolving? (I haven't finished reading it, so it's hard to make an inference) In the last pet system, does the protagonist treat Igna (pet) as a pet? No? In fact, I think the indigenous protagonist has not really realized the deeper meaning behind the word pet. He does not think that he is superior because of it. What really thinks so is the reader, who has a deserved sense of superiority when faced with this word. But some readers are aware of this, and some readers are not. About pets, original text: "Well... It turned out to be a pet contract..." Sola Ge (pet uncle) said with anger in his voice, "You guy... Actually regarded Igna (pet) as a pet! For this, I want to give you... A reward, just reward you with one hour of rest time every ten hours." Angry tone... Joel (the protagonist) thought of what Igna (the pet) had just said, and his tone and attitude showed the opposite result. Especially what happened just now... "Igna, why was there anger in his voice when he said you were being bullied? I remember you said..." "Well... He is very happy with this result." Igna said sadly, "The male dragon is raised in poverty and the female dragon is raised in wealth. This has always been the principle that Uncle Sorage has implemented." Is this derogatory? The pet uncle doesn't think it's a shame. People call it [a male dragon raised in poverty], and he's quite happy about it. But the sudden change of the map is correct. When the protagonist entered Barbara's academy, I was completely confused... Should I have a conclusion? Well, now I have realized that some of what Shennong said may not be correct, and I am ready to pick up and read the books I discarded because of Shennong.

Recommended by the tokusatsu dramatist...

Doesn't Igus have a grandson? Why are you still pursuing someone else😂

This is an old topic, but you have written some good chapters with your writing, and I can tolerate bugs, I can tolerate illogical logic, I can still tolerate you not having an outline, and I can tolerate writing about human bullshit (by the way, I don't believe anyone would read a novel with a dragon as the main character just to read about humans. Everyone comes to see a fantasy world, not to see human bullshit. No one cares about that!) But I can't tolerate it! The thing is that since being exiled, the protagonist has been a tool and nothing. He can stay in one place for dozens of times without moving, and he has been writing about humans (and the writing is extremely boring). I really don't know why you want to write about dragons. You may think that you are good at writing, but after seeing your results, you should understand something (I look forward to your next new book, your writing is very good, but I hope you can have an outline instead of just writing randomly)

Chapter 353 is extremely poisonous, with a disgusting female character and a disgusting plot. Those who fall into the trap must have a strong endurance. I gave up the trap for a long time and I still feel sick and unforgettable disgust. (I must declare in advance that I do feel that I have been fed shit by the author, but if you like it, it is up to you. Don't bother me)

In the past, many time-travel protagonists had very high IQs and crushed others. Suddenly, it was fun to find a cute protagonist. Come on, author🤭🤭, hurry up and drag Iselin over to pester him every day. It will be fun.

The title of the book is "About the Dragon God who was too lazy and outsourced me to a certain Teng game for inheritance"

Time Dragon Palace? The eternal dragon? This setting makes people miss Sin City (￣∇￣)

To be honest, I think the writing style and everything are acceptable. This is the protagonist. May not be to taste. After all, you can't expect us humans to understand dragons. Therefore, this theme is easier to understand and relate to. Writing about indigenous dragons is really a bit reluctant to read further. I hope the author will change the setting in the next book. There are too few people writing this type of book.

Actually, I'm thinking about a question. When the author finishes writing, doesn't he read it as a reader? I think the author will write better if he can be both the author and the reader.

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The story of an indigenous little dragon who was born weak and became stronger little by little through the player system.

The subject matter is good but the plot is messy. You suddenly go crazy and then banish to the Ten Thousand Bodies. I know you want to bury yourself in the trap but at least don't be so abrupt. It's a bit baffling. Then it keeps emphasizing the dragon clan as the master of all races. As a result, from the current point of view, Woli Heng is the strongest. Then he can only bully the young dragons. When he encounters the adult dragons of the Ten Thousand Bodies tribe, all the young dragons will die and be captured. And all races? I didn't see other races. The world setting is quite grand but you don't have a good grasp of it at all. The early transition is too long and makes it very boring. Not many people are in the mood to continue chasing you for subsequent content, and a lot of people will be lost in the front. Speaking of the protagonist, since you are going to write about a dragon as the protagonist, you have to grasp the character of the dragon protagonist. To be honest, in your writing, the protagonist is described as a protagonist who eats and waits for death without working hard to gain great power. He is also timid, slippery, and has a lot of shortcomings. It's okay if there was no system before. With the system and the protagonists Dragon Mother and Dragon Father were imprisoned, they felt that they were too weak and wanted to become strong and control their own destiny. It was really unreasonable to be afraid of hardship and want to gain strong power at the same time. There was no growth at all and it felt that being slippery during practice seemed really heartless (after all, your parents were imprisoned and they also wanted to become stronger and were afraid of hardship). In addition, the sudden outburst at Noah's coming-of-age ceremony was simply embarrassing. I don't ask you to portray a character with such positive energy but at least bring some bright spots. For example, when the protagonist thinks that his parents were imprisoned and he felt weak, he struggled to cultivate at the bottom. Although it is a bad routine, it is more heartless than your description. You are really a completely negative character! There is no reason for poor grades. The protagonist can really persuade him to quit. Don't say that it's written like this because the protagonist is a dragon. Is Noah a dragon? Although he only appeared at the coming-of-age ceremony, every dialogue between the protagonist and his friends really made me feel that Noah is the protagonist. Noah also has shortcomings, but he also has advantages, and his performance is more like a proud dragon. The protagonist behaves like a philistine villain in human society, bullying the weak, afraid of the strong, incompetent and heartless.

I'm looking forward to the plot of the academy, but there are too many women, which is a bit toxic. If it's not a harem story, don't have so many women, and you have to be bullied by her. I really can't stand it, and the women's characters are gradually getting repetitive. In order to avoid repetition, the author can only make the women more and more bad (such as the dragon girl at the beginning, the female red dragon and the new female loli) or more and more vulgar (two maids), but this is really unbearable If it is really a stallion and a harem, can you please give me a sign of your feelings? So that I know I can quit earlier, but I personally don't like If there are only one love line (two at most) or none, I can still pursue it. After all, the plot is generally very good.

I saw that the protagonist was captured by Wanzu and used as food, but there were still dozens of young true dragons. They had eaten a lot before, and now there are still so many. It felt weird. Isn't this too much?

Is this book written for kindergarten children😐

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