Chronicles of the Immortal World

Short review: The heroine was exiled for 50,000 years. After she came out, she and the hero reunited on a road that was full of twists and turns, sweet and sour, and full of side plots. Book title: "Twenty-Three Chronicles of the Immortal Realm" Author: No. 2 Handbook Keywords: Fairy Tales, Classical Fairy Tales Commentator: Wu Ge Work Link: Introduction: Six Realms: Emperor Yuan Heng, who has been exiled for 50,000 years, is finally back, and she is going to benefit the people (and harm the Six Realms) again! Shivering! Yuan Heng: Making trouble? No, I don't want to! Really, as I get older, I just want to take good care of myself! For her plan to provide for her retirement in heaven, Emperor Yuan Heng said boldly: Whoever can build her a palace that is more low-key, luxurious and meaningful than the First Heaven, she will make him her chief disciple. Do you really think that the heroine comes back to show off her power and take revenge by slapping her in the face? No, you are wrong, she just filled the hole she dug for herself before, otherwise she would really not be able to climb out... This article is a compound love story about sweet pets, and the relationship between the male and female protagonists is slow to develop. Book review: "Two and Three Chronicles of the Immortal Realm", this book has an average title, it can be regarded as a "moderate and infallible" kind of book, there is nothing particularly attractive and there is nothing bad about it. The word "fairyland" points out the background of this article. The full text focuses on some grudges, entanglements, loves, hates and obsessions in the six realms of immortals, gods, demons, humans, demons and ghosts that are worthy of sitting on the bench and eating melon seeds. It is commonly known as "The Eight Diagrams Revealed", and the higher-level ones are called "Unofficial History of Immortals and Gods" or "Anecdotes of Immortals and Gods". The introduction briefly reveals the character of the heroine, the "scourge" in the eyes of all living beings in the six realms, and the "new Buddhist girl" in her own eyes. The introduction is the same as the title, not particularly attractive but not wrong either. Shangxuan is clearly the male protagonist, but he is only mentioned in the last sentence in the introduction. He is extremely unconvinced in his heart. Looking at the main text, I feel that this article is a group portrait article. Looking at it this way, the introduction is very boring and does not cover the highlights and attractions of the article! Personally, I suggest you write something related to the male and female protagonist after the introduction. The first two sentences and the last sentence of the entire introduction are somewhat attractive. The two words "reunion" make people think endlessly, and when combined with the main text, I was very excited to read it, and became a little expert in promoting reunion online. The "composite" setting is very good! I can write a lot of plots! There is a feeling of blank space, which is great! When I read the main text, the first few chapters made me confused and confused. The plot is very good. Although the scene description is simple, it is very picturesque. The fairy tale atmosphere is breathtaking. The writing style also has a unique charm. The characters are more interesting and distinctive than the last. But to be honest, the plot connection is a bit perfunctory, and there are also two sentences and paragraphs that cannot be seen as dialogue, narration, or self-talk psychological description. Why is this happening? Because there are no double quotes or words that imply that those are psychological descriptions. (Please check it yourself for details. For example: Chapter 6 [As for Tai Chi and immortality, your father Qinghua was transformed after God Father created the world and rebuilt Heaven.] This sentence does not have double quotation marks.) Because the title and introduction of the book are relatively "unremarkable", I didn't have high expectations when I first read it. The beginning of the second paragraph of the first chapter gave me some dissuades. It's this sentence: "Look up to the sky and scream three times, shaking the whole mountain. The spirit beasts fled, rushing towards caves or finding a hiding place to relieve the depression in their hearts over the past few years." Can the order of the words and sentences in this sentence be changed? And it has no subject! For example, change it to "He thrust his waist, raised his head to the sky and roared three times, which shocked all the spiritual beasts in the mountain and fled, or rushed to the cave, or hurriedly found a place to hide. This can relieve the depression in his heart in recent years." Or change it to "He thrust his waist, raised his head to the sky and roared three times." , In order to relieve the depression in his heart over the past few years, the spirit beasts all over the mountain fled, or rushed to the cave, or hurriedly found a place to hide. " This sequence of words "look up to the sky, akimbo and roar three times" is really unacceptable to me! In addition, the names of Mo Heng (the heroine's sister) and Yuan Heng (the heroine) are very close, so it is easy for people to get confused. The author's first few chapters were so confusing... I read it several times before I straightened it out! The timeline is as follows: Chenxing Zhenjun molested Mo Heng and was sent to heaven for punishment - while his father was attending a wedding banquet, he sneaked to the Eastern Wilderness Great Wushan and met Mo Heng. He was caught again and was imprisoned for another five hundred years - he was imprisoned in the Northern Wilderness for five hundred years and came out to meet the heroine Yuan Heng! The order written by the author is: True Lord Chenxing was imprisoned in the Northern Wilderness for 500 years and came out to meet the heroine Yuan Heng - interjection narrates that he molested Mo Heng but was sent to heaven for punishment - interjects narration that he sneaked to the Great Wu Mountain in the Eastern Barren while his father was attending the wedding banquet and met Mo Heng again and was captured again, and was imprisoned for another five hundred years - and then returned to the ongoing timeline: his conversation with the heroine Yuan Heng! Am I the second Olympics? One is Yuan Heng and the other is Mo Heng. Even if they have the same faces, the scenes are one in the Northern Wilderness and the other in the Eastern Wilderness. It's easy to get the place names confused! It is recommended to describe more scenes so that the plot and characters can be recognized according to the scene! For example, in the first chapter, add some scene descriptions of the Northern Wilderness. When narrating the story between Chenxing Zhenjun and Mo Heng, add the sentence "He was imprisoned five hundred years ago" or add a description of the scene in the Great Wushan Mountain in the Eastern Wasteland (write down the difference in scenery between the two Northeastern Wastelands), so that the plot and scene can be recognized! Then, Mo Heng was born in the "Ice and Snow Field", and the "Borderless Land" where Yuan Heng was imprisoned was also an ice field five hundred years ago! It's such a similar but unrecognizable scene again! I have the right to suspect that the author deliberately made it difficult for us to distinguish between the heroine Yuan Heng and the heroine's sister Mo Heng! In addition, the male protagonist sometimes "goes to the mysterious" and sometimes "changes to the mysterious". Can you explain it? Although there is some confusion in front! There are so many segments! When describing the heroine's psychology, "I" and "she" are used too frequently! But I have to admit that the characters are very powerful, and each character's personality traits are very prominent. It made me very happy to watch it. It has the kind of relaxed and lively writing style, which gives me the pleasure of watching a "snatch". After straightening out the opening plot, it's really fun to read the rest. This article is well written, but the beginning needs to be revised! The title and introduction of the book don't matter, it's acceptable. The author said that she had revised the opening chapter originally, and it may have been her revision that caused the opening chapter to be so confusing. The overall plot is compact and interesting, and it's heart-wrenching to watch the male and female protagonists compete against each other! After getting a taste of it, I read more than thirty chapters in one go. Such a good article has been buried, who is to blame? The author would like to ask you to be more diligent and revise the beginning to make it as good as the rest of it, okay? Explanation: When writing this book review, I feel like I have transformed into the Roaring Emperor! It was the author himself who made the beautiful jade fall into dust, OMG!

Hit my heart. Let's talk about the shortcomings first. At first, I thought that the male and female protagonists appeared in the first chapter, but later I found out that they were not. I almost confused the names of Yuan Heng and Mo Heng. But since the plot behind it is very attractive to me, this doesn't hurt. What I like about it is, first of all, there is absolutely nothing wrong with the writing. The occasional emojis make people feel happy, not too much, not too little, just right. The writing style of this article is very brisk, and except for the confusing name at the beginning, it doesn't take much thought later. The author clearly explains the background and several main characters in the first ten chapters, which is impressive. For example, Shangxuan's unconditional love for the heroine is heart-wrenching to watch. And Jiang Xuan's unconditional support for the heroine, it is enough to have a true friend in life. And that stupid and stupid Xingjun who always gets beaten up, hahahahaha. The personalities of these characters are really bright and clear. Since I started writing books, I rarely come across a book that I particularly like. Originally, it was supposed to be about ten chapters of Testing the Poison, hahaha, but I accidentally finished reading them all. I always have the feeling that if this book is well written, it will definitely achieve something in the future. Readers, don't miss it if you pass by, you really won't be disappointed!

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The writing style is so cute~ Such a pure fairy tale, accept it!

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Is this the end? ! No, why did Taiyin die alone in the happy ending? ! By the way, is there a follow-up for the two of them? 😢

I came to the romance industry mainly because one of the points you mentioned touched me. I also think why the male protagonist can't be a gentle and considerate person, and I don't like CEO stories the most. Your book is so beautiful. Must collect! It looks interesting and makes you want to laugh all the time.

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