The Collective Called Me

Short comment: In the creative circle, there are comments about applying for a floor plan in June. Interested authors can also write an application. Since this book hasn't been signed yet, I'll mainly write a review based on its shortcomings. Book title: "Fantasy of Interstellar Civilized Society" Author: Living Memory Keywords: Civilization development, tribe-national spirit, exploring the unknown world to the universe? Work link: Commentator: If there is no trace of beauty Introduction: On the first day when Chen Yuxing was pulled into a trial by a higher civilization (actually an experiment on the origin of civilization by a higher civilization), he created the first split body to help him survive the trial. They guessed the game to determine the leader. They fought with the monkeys to pick fruits (but failed). They collected energy and passed the trial system to build their first "love nest" - the primitive teaching house. Then they started to "light up" skills. For the leader, let's learn cooking and sewing. For Split Body No. 1, Learn to make weapons! After building the house, the two "I" went out to explore the world happily, but! Encountered a venomous snake! In order to save Split Body No. 1, The leader was bitten by a snake. Before he died from the poison, he transferred the leadership authority to No. 1, And then went with the wave by the creek. So how will the "Chenyu Star" civilization develop next? Book Review: ① Personally, I think the prologue and the first chapter are not well written and may need to be deleted. ② Typos and some sentences are not fluent. It is recommended that the author go back and read it through when he has time. ③The chapter name is not good enough. It can be longer and the content of the chapter can be condensed into the essence as the chapter name. ④The props at the beginning had very strange names, they were all unknown, weird, etc. The author of the prologue uses dialogue between advanced civilization creatures to reveal what the trial of the protagonist Chen Yuxing is about. However, in the next dozen chapters, there is no advanced civilization. Therefore, it is recommended that the prologue and the first chapter be deleted, and the background will be revealed later when the protagonist has a certain degree of exposure to cosmic civilization. The first chapter talks about the original identity of Chen Yuxing based on the Big Bang and space waves (string theory? Regarding this, the author may need to explain his origin of writing this in his own words) - he is a human being derived from nine planets exploded from a small ball in the center of the universe. Advanced civilizations that are extremely curious about the center have placed "eavesdropping devices" on every human being on their planet, so that humans themselves will send out waves that cannot be detected by human civilization and bring information back to advanced civilizations. One day, a higher civilization used this "eavesdropping device" to drag Chen Yuxing and some people into the trial. As I write the second chapter, I feel a little bit familiar. What is the content of the trial? It requires them to develop their own tribes and groups from primitive times. Therefore, it contains a lot of the author's thoughts on civilized systems, which is quite thoughtful. When the first leader dies later, it starts to involve sacrifice, teamwork, division of labor, formulation of systems and other civilized social system contents. But if civilizations like this come one by one, they don't know whether they will be able to connect with higher civilizations in the year of the monkey, horse and moon, so it is still recommended to remove the content of higher civilizations in the prologue, or to accelerate it later. The title of the book may also need to be changed. How about "The Origin of Civilization"? Because this subject matter is quite deep, the author should work hard to think of how to make it more accessible to more readers~

Everyone is welcome to point out my typos, sentence contradictions, ambiguities, etc., As well as common sense knowledge errors.

Many of the ideas in the book are not particularly mature, but it might be interesting to read them yourself later haha. I didn't make an outline when I was writing, I just had a general direction. Now I am hesitating whether to go to the stars normally or do a little time travel, and whether to set up a connection with the earth.

Damn it, why does Headless know, but I don't? What's going on?