Marvel's Super

The main character is mentally retarded. Give me some time. I'm not good enough and can't write what I want. It makes the main character look a bit silly. Let me write another 100,000 words. Give me some patience. I am slowly figuring out how to write! Thanks! The writing is so poor and I am very anxious! I can't let you look at me like you ate shit. I have been reading novels for almost ten years, so I know how you feel. But it was really the first time I wrote it, and what I was thinking changed after I wrote it. I was also very painful. I will try my best to avoid the problems you mentioned. Take your time and change it little by little! Thank you to everyone who reads this book. There are also typos, it was written on a mobile phone, I will pay attention to it

A superman must be a eunuch. No one's super can survive

It's written like this... It's also embarrassing for you. The protagonist's sister really tried to persuade her to quit, saying she wanted to teach her a lesson, but she relented in the end. It's amazing.

"A Very Serious Book Review" The plot and setting are very good, and the subject matter is novel, but... I am afraid of everything but... The author has a very big picture, and the timeline is too far forward, because there is no reference to the plot line. All the plots are the author's free play... But the author's free play is not used very well. To be honest, the entire early plot is like a running account. It develops itself over time. There are no conflicts, no surprises, nothing that catches the eye. The reason that motivates readers to continue reading, in my opinion, is the sense of anticipation for the appearance of the original characters... And the author, by bringing the timeline so far forward, is also taking advantage of this, intending to make the story longer... Characters, at this point... I really don't know what to do. How to describe it... Maybe it is due to the author's writing skills. The protagonist is portrayed... Quite... Enmmmm... Stupid?!... Especially like a student who has just entered the society and is spoiled by his parents without being beaten by society... And the other characters, to be honest, are very unpleasant, or too hard... For example, the little black panther, I remember that there is a whole chapter that is the inner monologue of the little black panther... Please... It is necessary Well... The author can completely fragment this chapter and slowly highlight this character in the subsequent plot, and this chapter is all inner monologue, which is too ingenious... You know, this is not a composition, this is storytelling... Summary, the subject matter is novel, the plot is flowing, the character is mentally retarded, and the writing is ingenious... But the new work of the new artist is still making progress... Ps. Think about how to solve the problem of not having enough fun...

Superman's biological force field was eaten by the author

For the sake of finally getting a Superman novel, are you willing to support the author? I can't stand it anymore. I really can't stand the first twenty or thirty chapters.

Nowadays, few people writing about Marvel are so bad. After all, there are references from the original works, movies, and many similar novels. Let's talk about a few major issues (personal suggestions) 1. If Superman and Captain are brothers and a family, the plot will collapse. Captain Marvel's brother died during the Vietnam War, from 1955 to 1975. The plot is probably around 2013. Captain Marvel is about 53-71 years old, and Shi Da Ke is about 40 years old. So, you want them to be the same age? 2. Stark, studied at MIT at the age of 15 and graduated with the highest credits. Moreover, Tony's butler mentioned in the movie that Tony only has alumni and no classmates, so he has never attended classes! So when you're 18, you don't see Tony at all. This guy has already fallen out with his dad. 3. When Captain Marvel and Superman are together, do you still write about the purple sweet potato spirit? When you go out, you are chased and beaten by two people traveling at the speed of light? 4. The protagonist's IQ is no longer a problem of mental retardation. JB was chopping down trees when nothing happened, but SHIELD didn't show up? You must know that when the captain was first frozen, SHIELD was at its strongest, and many artifacts and black technology alien spacecraft were collected at that time. 5. In my impression, Superman has never lost control of his power. Even if the Man of Steel suddenly increases in strength, he can still control it very well, and he doesn't need to exercise. You don't even understand the basic settings of Superman. Are you writing about Mao Dachao?

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I just saw someone talking about selling myself and thought it would be a poisonous point, but this pretense caught me off guard 😏😏😏

Dachao, I don't know if it looks good or not.

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You superman, remember the origin of the ingredients, and only need to buy the seasonings. Everything else will be fresh within ten minutes.

Look at the ability of the main character on the cover = Brandon's version of Superman?

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I remember Captain Marvel had a separate movie

I feel like the protagonist is very childish in his behavior, please keep a low profile. Which family member in the Marvel world has a good ending?

Well, I quite like the beginning. There are actually quite a few Dachao books, but not many that are really well written. This is one of the few openings that I like, including the characters, but I still hesitated to give up. A sunny male protagonist, robbing people and things... Is also the ancestral story of a superhero. Does the author think this inconsistent setting is appropriate? No matter how you think about it, it's awkward,

He has superhuman abilities, and the protagonist came very early. Why not learn knowledge? Besides, Dachao's ability is low in magic resistance. Why not study some anti-magic skills? I think the protagonist will learn it very quickly, because Dachao's ability includes a super brain. Why not become a scientist, usually a scientific researcher, and in times of crisis, transform into Superman and hide his identity to become a superhero. Wouldn't it be great?

This is my first time writing a book, so there will definitely be a lot of bugs. If you have any comments, please share them here. I will read them and make corrections if I can. Also, gentlemen, please be gentle and don't give me a bad blow.

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I just got off work and wrote two chapters in a stumbling manner. I couldn't even finish it! Writing a book is so hard! I envy those who write such beautiful books!

I'm surprised, are all novels written like this now? I have an older sister, and I get bullied by her all day long, and yet I still don't get angry. It's called affection, and I feel bad. Do you have masochistic tendencies? Don't say anything about a good relationship. You can still feel confident about stealing your money and spend it, but you can cry just because you say it. It's disgusting.

Is the heroine invisible? ? Bus, this one

Come on, let me explain it to the author. Dachao has a super brain, but just like a computer, it only starts up when it wants to use it. It is usually shut down, and when it is shut down, its IQ is zero, haha😄, I can't explain it anymore.

Not only has the mind and IQ of a 5-year-old become 5-year-old, but he has also become a 5-year-old! The narrative is a bit slow, and my sister is very annoyed. I can't figure out why many authors write some disgusting supporting characters? Are you afraid that your book will become popular? Also, the day his sister found out about his ability, he promised to go to Africa with his sister in the next few days to strengthen her. Didn't you just say after beating the robber that you weren't going to force anyone? So why should Wakanda strengthen your sister? Big face? You don't need to read any further to know that the protagonist will either be a holy mother or a troubled mother in the future!

This protagonist is not mentally retarded, he is simply a charlatan... He has the power of a god, a loser mentality, and is a racist... Seriously, it looks really bullshit. They are no different from those lawless mutants in Marvel who have no brains and gain power. It's just that the protagonist's power is relatively invincible.

Why do you behave like Erha when you go into space? Do you take a bath in the sun and wash away your sanity...

In the second chapter, I saw the chapter about stealing money and persuaded me to quit.

Author, you Superman writing is okay 🙂 Feilu next door wrote that Superman traveled to the Super Seminary and was a Silver Super, but he didn't beat Morgana and was injured (although I didn't expect that Morgana's strength of less than 1,000 tons hurt Bai Yin Chao 😒) and there are a lot of super gods in the comments talking about beating Superman.