Beauty Mobile Phone That Travels Through Time

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No, I am very optimistic about your book. Both the plot direction and the relationship between the characters are actually very good, but the most unpleasant thing is that there are too many theoretical settings, which really affects the reading experience. It is often separated from the main line and characters, which makes people confused. No matter how good the setting is, it will make people boring, especially for online serial novels. The reader has to wait for a long time, but it is not the protagonist's interesting point, but just a bunch of settings. In fact, from these settings, we can see that Da Da is a very thoughtful person and a very attentive author who can make sure that nothing is missed in the work. I like this about the author very much. Personally, I think the author can try to integrate the setting into the plot, or take it out separately. I am not good at writing. I just expressed some opinions as a reader. I am not correct and I apologize for any offence.

The author looks at what's going on behind you. It feels more and more casual, but I actually think it's a bit better. Come on and write.

This book is getting better and better. Starting from the second volume, there are many wonderful highlights.

Author, you have released a new book and you haven't reminded me of the old one. It's so deserted.

47 Photos, 46 photos, do you have a misunderstanding about aesthetics? Unless you have seen too many beauties and then become accustomed to beauties, and you suddenly see a big beauty, your aesthetics will improve. There is something wrong with you. Beauty is beauty after all. The emergence of beauty is based on ugly women. The true beauty of normal people will not change unless you are surrounded by beauties.

This slow-paced batch can barely hold on in the early stages, and the cool points never appear. The author is obviously not good at describing the ups and downs of the plot.

Are you pretending to be a fool because you feel happy if you can put more commas in your words and count more words?

It looks good from the front, and the setting of Haoranqi is also very stylish. But the protagonist changed when he entered the capital. One night when he went out to play, he thought about visiting a brothel. How could he cultivate such high quality and quantity of Haoran Qi? In other words, how could he cultivate Haoran Qi. That is not awe-inspiring, or even scholarly, it can only be called bookish. The more books you read, the higher the quality and quantity. It has nothing to do with your character or your ideological realm.

It was okay at the beginning, but later on I was chased to death. It was no fun. It was always a lot of trouble. It felt quite rubbish. There were also a lot of setting theories.

It's okay to pretend to be a fool, but why pretend to stutter?

Beautiful face, why do people nowadays like to take eccentric swords? The nine-ring sword is so low, the straight sword of the Tang Dynasty is much better, I can't complain. ,,, Whether you are strong or not is only a temporary matter, Whether you are handsome or not is a lifelong matter,,

The clone is really a poisonous point, and the huge gap between the introduction and the content is also a poisonous point. The title of this book should be changed. Forage

It's too long-winded. I just go over and over again some spiritual stuff and can't understand it at all.

This month's first monthly pass, I'll give it to you!

A fool can't finish a sentence. The death of my parents was handled so well, so embarrassing! From a human perspective, 1 is a fool who cannot afford to be a fool and runs away in fear, 2 is to kill wildly and indiscriminately. The only choice between being a fool or a son of man is 2.

Aesthetics, weirdness, I, reject. Speak, not well, speak well, **

Pretending to be a fool and pretending to be addicted? ? Please stop talking like that, it makes me so embarrassed. . Is it interesting to put so many commas?

Maybe it's because I've read too many novels. I feel like if I bump my head, I suddenly become stupid, and if I bump my head again, I suddenly stop being stupid. These are all normal things

I just want to ask in which chapter the protagonist begins to transform into a handsome young man, escapes the fate of a fat man, and begins to transform his face into a handsome guy.

The book was okay in the early stages, and the plot was okay, but it also had a lot of flaws. First, there were a lot of settings, which made it a bit tiring to read. Second, it pretended to be stupid and stuttered, which was a bit embarrassing. Third, in Chapter 41 of the second volume, those who parted ways to hunt down the protagonist, those people's spiritual roots were too powerful, right? The first one, the Sands of Time, touches the surface of the Avenue of Time. You can see what happened in the past, and you can even see the details of the protagonist's finger pointing on the phone. The second one, directly displays the things in your heart on the map. The third one, collects the soul breath and directly tracks it thousands of miles away. It feels more powerful than the protagonist's golden finger! These are still a few trash cultivators, so what if the geniuses cultivated by the major forces don't torture the protagonist to death?

If you don't have a harem, you don't need good looks? What logic

The iron-eating beast helped the human race defeat the demon race, became a national treasure, and lived a life of eating and sleeping every day. 😁😁😁

When I looked at the name, I thought a mobile phone had traveled through time.

Keep pretending to stutter, it's annoying to watch! Even a fool doesn't stutter! How many chapters should I pretend to be? I'll stop reading if I keep doing this!

I just want to know what the setting is for the protagonist to be so strong and powerful, to suppress the feudal king so fiercely, and to throw his son away. His son has been chased and chopped, and he still doesn't take him back.

Use online literature techniques to write physical literature stories.

Everyone knows that the protagonist is not stupid, but he keeps pretending to stutter. It's so annoying! The more I watch, the more I can't stand it! It's so pretentious that I don't even want to watch anymore!

Come on! Very well written, I like it very much!

I finally understand why not many people have read this book. There are too many private goods, and the whole article is full of benevolence. It's so tiring to read.