Paddling in the Second Dimension

"Padding in the Second Dimension" Author: The Spear is Still on the Battlefield Type: Two Dimension Rating: 7.8 Book Review: The writing style is smoother, the characters are more vividly portrayed, and there is a sense of immersion, but when reading It will still be a little thin. The main problem lies in the characterization of the dialogue. It is recommended that more details be added appropriately, and the characters' demeanor and psychology during dialogue be appropriately supplemented, so that readers will not feel too hasty when reading, and the picture will be stronger. Next, let's talk about the plot. A system that dislikes the master is a very interesting setting. Compared with the same system text, this is a more outstanding point. At present, it seems that Da Da has no big problems in terms of rhythm control and plot ups and downs, but for the text, it can also add some explosive points that can catch the readers' eyes at once, which may be more helpful in attracting readers. In general, the writing and plot are both good, and the setting is quite innovative, so it is quite interesting to read. 19 Has been collected, please continue to work hard! From：chu shi

There are many typos in some chapters that I haven't found yet. I see some every time I go back and look at them. I might as well create a page. If anyone finds it, please leave a comment below. Thank you very much!

The writing is still very good! Already collected, keep up the good work!

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Really. You don't need an oar to row a boat, hahaha 👍

I have a strong desire to survive. I passed by and kept everything I needed to leave. I got out of here. Come on brother. Shh! Come here, keep your voice down, I'm telling you, "I'm here to cheat, others should tell others."

[Qianshan Tests Poison] Book title: Paddling in the Second Dimension Rating: 8.3 Points After Effects: This book by Chang Qian Da Da reminds Qian Shan of another old book, "Dream of Tokyo Ghoul" by Dark Night Elvis Presley. However, in comparison, Chang Qian Da Da Da's book is more flexible, not too buggy and acceptable, and the system in the book is also very naughty and humane, which is in sharp contrast with the traditional system. And Qianshan is also a Naruto fan, so I have to say, "Oh, it's not bad." But the only shortcoming is that I hope some attention can be paid to the personal inner monologue. Longer inner monologues can be expanded with quotation marks, so that the change of person will not make people confused. The other words are great. Thank you for your support.

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The first few pictures are pretty good, but the later ones feel like they were copied from Naruto without adding anything new 😰😰

The appearance rate of the system is too high. It can be reduced a little. There are also some plots that I hope can be skipped. For example, the nonsense of the original work such as the dream of Class 7, the plot of grabbing the bell, and the protagonist, the butterfly, need to be considered. With this butterfly, we need to consider the butterfly effect. Don't write everything according to the original work. I hope it will be better in the future. Finally, this system is stained with the poisonous points of the current system. The author should work hard 🙂🙂🙂

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