Defeating the God and Subduing the Demon

Some suggestions, don't comment if you don't like them. First of all, the paragraph introducing the mainland background at the beginning can be removed directly, because readers all know the background of the world in fantasy novels. There are immortal cultivators who fly to the sky and escape from the earth, and every plant and tree can become an immortal. Therefore, there is no need to introduce this paragraph. If you write it, it will be considered as a low word count. The first chapter should be concise and get to the protagonist quickly. The second thing is the description. In your first three chapters, you mentioned the protagonist in the first chapter and spent a little bit of pen and ink describing it. This is not enough. And in the last two chapters, the pen and ink was not spent on the protagonist, but on his father and the characters of the Ten Thousand Demons Clan? ! This won't work. The protagonist has no sense of existence at all. We need to focus our writing on the protagonist! Finally, pay attention to paragraphing and punctuation. These are details and must be controlled.