Life Is Like This

Okay, I've read a few chapters, and it's written very well in a hazy way, with some inexplicable heartache. Very good (*๓´╰╯`๓)♡

First of all, I think your story is very interesting to read carefully. Life is indeed like this. If you are not satisfied, you can find something from it, and then you can experience the dissatisfaction. In fact, each of your chapters embodies "the philosophy of what life is like." I would personally feel better if this was used as the title. But now I also want to talk about the shortcomings of your book. The first is the description in large paragraphs. It is best to change these. Don't say "it has been posted anyway". No one will read it anyway. Can you guarantee that no one will read it in the next 50 years, or be "scared away" by your long description. If it were not for investment, I would not read it carefully. Second, what happened to your omission of punctuation? The third thing is about the problem you described. You wrote about each person separately, which makes the article feel a bit loose, but in fact it is not prose. I was reading Yu Jun in the first two chapters, and in the last two chapters you transitioned directly to Yu Jun's father. This is such a jump. Don't you think it would be better to write directly about Yu Jun and intersperse descriptions of his father in the middle? Fourth, your description is too bland, which makes the interesting plot lose its color. It does not focus on the description, there are too many narrations, but there are few dialogues, and the characters are not three-dimensional. Fifth, some of your words are too wordy, which makes the article seem draggy. These only represent personal opinions and do not mean that the writing is not good, but that we can make the writing better and make it more comfortable for readers. If this comment makes you dissatisfied, you can delete it. Anyway, keep up the good work.

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