When Magic Meets Immortality

It's rare to see a novice author who writes well... In general, there is no big problem, but the description of details is a bit lacking. So far, there is almost no description of the environment (>_<) Also, don't leave out a certain part of the description just to foreshadow or leave suspense. This is a common problem of many novice authors. What I say may be a bit abstract. For example, if you want to write that the protagonist has noticed the conspiracy of the other party, it is best to write that the protagonist has noticed it at this time, rather than saying "Actually, I have noticed it at such and such a time" when the other party is finally exposed. This kind of plot is very blunt and forced (´･ω･`) The last thing I have to mention is the setting of the monk's status. To be honest, this is really a big problem. It cannot be explained by just saying that the political form of the other world is different from ours. Taking Wen Zhonghua as an example, religious monks have equal status with ordinary people. To be honest, if it is only equality at the legal level, there is no problem, but ordinary people must at least have some respect for the monks. After all, it is the monks who fight against cults to protect these ordinary people, just like soldiers in reality, they all have some benefits and preferential treatment. As for the Maple Leaf Country... To be honest, the first thing I thought of when I saw the Maple Leaf was Australia... The setting that the status of ordinary people is higher than that of monks will really become a big failure if it is not changed. I also wrote about it in this chapter. This is not to say that the status of monks from different countries is similar, but it should be within a range that conforms to ordinary logic. For example, the status of the Zhou Emperor in the Zhou Dynasty declined from the Western Zhou Dynasty to the Spring and Autumn Period to the Warring States Period. In the end, he basically had no real power, but when his status was at its lowest, it was impossible to be lower than ordinary people. The same is true for monks in the book. If you work hard to practice, the treatment you get in the end will be similar or even lower than when you don't practice. Who would be willing to practice? Others are minor issues. Since the author is writing for fun, don't worry too much about grades and increase writing efficiency, resulting in poor quality. Just follow your own pace. Since it is writing for fun, don't pursue the speed of updates but improve the quality of writing Come on (ฅ>ω<*ฅ) I am very optimistic about your work.

I read it in one sitting, it's quite interesting. Come on, author, keep at it.

The writing is quite good, I give it to you

The story is exciting, the writing is smooth, and it is good. I have saved it and will look back.

Collected, please update, support

Come on, good! ! !

It makes sense that the title of the book is quite interesting. Why has no one read it?😒

Brother, greatness is not achieved in a day. After you wrote your first book, I feel that your writing is pretty good. Keep at it!

Why can't we spread the cultivation of immortality in the magical world?

Come on! The most important thing about web articles is persistence