Let Go of That Dragon

Since it is a seedling, let me get straight to the point, mainly to make suggestions [Background setting] To be honest, I thought I was traveling to Azeroth, but it turned out not to be the case. When I saw this, I felt that if the author did not describe the map well, the difficulty would increase greatly, because it is difficult for readers to buy into the different world flow. As a result, the description below is unexpectedly smooth, and the map setting is very reasonable. It can be seen that enough effort has been put into it, which can give readers a rough judgment. Then there is the description of the scenery. It is recommended that you describe the unique scenery or landmark buildings when you come to a new scene. You can get a lot of extra points. For example, Devil's Bay can be written as: In the early morning, the sun has just risen, the sunlight shines on the dark sea water, the sea breeze surges, and the black waves rise and fall, as if there is a devil hidden in it. This is Devil's Bay. Legend has it that this place once... For another example, Silvermoon City, or the capital city, you can write that there is a large statue in the square: Entering the city gate, Karl looked up and saw that it was a huge statue, holding a giant sword in his hand and pointing into the distance, just like the owner of the statue guarding the city back then. In short, it is necessary to leave a first impression on the readers and not let them feel that the difference between Devil's Bay and Silvermoon City is just the difference in name. [Character Setting] The protagonist is set as a Hearthstone boy who was reborn in a different world due to an accident. This continent only has two professions: warrior and magician, and the protagonist has become the first magic swordsman + dragon knight with dual skills in monsters, which can still give people a sense of expectation. The protagonist setting is basically reasonable, but it can be more exciting. Focus on the key points. Your goal is to become a dragon knight. Make less complaints about useless content and add more to the plot. Then there is his teacher, a playboy and a bard. The setting is okay, but the character is a bit poor, but the character image needs to be strengthened. It is best to write a bohemian feeling. Just like Guo Jia, who was impoverished and had no talent, even God was jealous of his talent, but his talent was not recognized, so he chose to wander around the world, drinking wine all day long, and unexpectedly met the protagonist. Then he rekindled hope and taught the protagonist everything he knew. As for Kaimo, he should be the protagonist's friend. He has too few scenes to comment on at the moment. [Plot Analysis] The plot is the most important part, especially the first few chapters. If you cannot retain the readers, you have already lost. The beginning of this work cannot be considered particularly brilliant. The chapter that really attracted me and made the readers look forward to it is in the eighth chapter. In other words... If you don't insist on seeing Chapter 8, there may be readers in the upper right corner. So, if possible, revise the plots of the first few chapters, otherwise readers will not be able to endure it, and neither will the author. [Personal Miscellany] The writing is very good, and the title of the book is very good, which can attract readers to click on it, but as for the plot, emmm, I have already said it above. Other places are still very good, and the subject matter is also good. To be honest, if you fix it at the beginning and it doesn't fall apart later, it has a chance to become the next "Release That Witch" If you have any other questions, just contact me on QQ. Finally, everyone who has a dream deserves recognition.

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