I Wore It into My Own Book

This is the first two-dimensional novel I have read. It's quite interesting to see the familiar anime characters appear. With well-created characters such as "Watching Birds Under the Moon" Zhang Chulan and "Watching Birds Under the Moon" Feng Baobao, this book is guaranteed to be humorous. But while it is humorous, there is still room for improvement in this book. For example, in the first half of the first chapter, the word "Le" is used too much. In Chapter 2, the punctuation used when the system first appeared should be wrong. In addition to these two places, there are many places that can be modified in the article. (I have read Chapter 23) In other words, if the author can calm down and read it again from the beginning, and correct the unclear parts of the text, he can further improve the reading fluency of the work. I don't know much about the rhythm and other aspects of the work, so I can only give my opinions based on what I am good at. Sorry for the inappropriateness.

Overall Rating: 78 Pseudo-2D Battle Theme: Male Video·2D·Original Fantasy Number of words read: 10w/12w Commentator: Nai Gan Yujun Jue 1. Introduction to the book title (16/20) The book title (8/10) is very creative and attractive enough. According to the readers' imagination, there are at least four or more themes that can use similar book titles. There are a lot of possibilities and it's very interesting. Introduction (8/10) I spent a lot of time on the introduction, but later found out that it was a hodgepodge of pseudo-two-dimensional fics? When I saw Sister Baoer, my whole body felt bad. There should be many readers who go there just for Sister Baoer. It can be said to be full of selling points. 2. Writing style (16/20) 1. An easy-to-read funny article. The article is full of jokes and cuteness, and the humor and the inherent knowledge of the original characters can basically attract a large number of readers for leisure and entertainment. Very delicious as a spiritual snack. 2. Smooth and natural complaints, which will not break away from the plot and cause too much sense of dissonance. There is almost no fighting. Conflicts and conflicts can be pretended and muddle through, avoiding a lot of necessary fighting and killing. 3. Beginning (16/20) The beginning tells the story of the tj author who was struck by lightning and traveled back to his own novel, and then tragically became a villain of the belated system [Warring Lords], so the daily dialogue is the mutual loss between the protagonist Su Chi and the father-in-law of the system. Coupled with the patchwork of the main plot, it barely constitutes a big pot of stewed plot. At the beginning, they were arguing about the stories in their own books and the funny and nonsensical dialogues, which was full of laughter. In terms of rhythm, there are not many flaws. After all, the relaxed and humorous life is enough to support the sense of substitution. The plot advances briskly and seems natural. Shuang Wenxiang, cultivating class, close to farming. 4. Plot setting (15/20) The best part of the whole text is the setting, and the weakest part is the plot. Because there is still a certain gap in my mind after reading it. Because many magically modified characters are a bit like going through the motions, and many things can be mixed in. If you write happily, you will naturally find a trace of redundancy when you are calm. Many characters have entered the protagonist's world, which is a fantasy world. Characters from different time and space, different cultures, and different dimensions will meet together, and there will still be a sense of dissonance. Another issue that challenges the author's writing skills is the grasp of the original characters after the magic transformation. This is somewhat close to the plot needs of Shuangwen, so many characters are very close to Su Chi, which seems to be a bit spoiled by the original work. The main plot is not clear. Breaking off the engagement has not ended yet, obtaining secret realm pets, and the demon king's conspiracy are just the tip of the iceberg. At present, it is still close to the path of nurturing and farming stories. Although every time it is said to be meaningful, the pace of the expected plot development is indeed slow. Except for the flashy characters, there are also flashy military settings, vitality and talent. It is also a wise choice to materialize the literary realm and turn it into a fighting force. After all, there is always a measurable scale in the text. The protagonist is publishing a book now, so it's okay to copy it everywhere. But for now, the protagonist, who has worked hard to practice One Punch Superman physical skills, is still in the stage of developing his combat power. 5. Overall impression (15/20) In general, it is a two-dimensional work that is different from the expected humanities. After all, with the skin of fantasy, it can be foreseen that the later stage will basically be a two-dimensional chaos in the fantasy world. There is no change to save a certain feeling like the original two-dimensional fan, nor is it focused on portraying a certain magically modified character. It is more like a two-dimensional character exhibition show. (For example, Feng Baobao left after a few chapters of cutscenes.) Soon a new batch of characters will appear and continue to destroy people, but after going back and forth, the characteristics of each one are only retained in the impression of the original work, and the content that appears in the novel is not profound. It is a pity and a wisdom. After all, magic modification always has to bear the pressure of the original work, and it also has to test the plot ("Under One Person" is so slow to update, does the author have to wait until then to continue to advance the plot!) So the atmosphere of fantasy novels is still very strong, and it is full of joy. It is relaxed and happy, and you can nostalgic for your favorite characters at the same time. As a nostalgic party, the emotional score is very high, but some sensory distortion due to the plot needs a little attention. The above is only my personal opinion, discussion is welcome, reprinting is prohibited

The imagination is really big, but it's okay to travel randomly. There is no main line. It's like reading hydrology.

In my opinion, the biggest problem with the article is that it is a bit scattered and lacks a complete main line, that is, a framework. I hope the author can connect the entire link well. Then (ง •̀_•́)ง I'm going to start praising you (the author sits back and accepts my little red flower): This is an article with no pressure to read, so it will be particularly relaxing and enjoyable to read. And the article is very cute and interesting. The rhythm is also well controlled. The most interesting thing is the protagonist of the article, Xiao Xiaosu, who has a soft and cute temperament. |ω) This is the little angel Su Chi (^･ｪ･^): I would like to ask the author, will this Beacon Day prince system have an unethical love affair with our little Su! How cool (^･ｪ･^): Let me ask the author again, will our little Xiao Su eventually turn into an evil and beautiful woman, thus confusing the whole book and charming the beautiful men all over the world?

The style at the beginning is a bookworm + Guochuang fan. If it can be cute, it will be cute! The writing is humorous and smooth, and the plot has no taboos! Is a useless Fenghuo public system okay? Is a traffic-jamming system okay? Is it okay if I don't need Bilian? This book organically combines some very interesting elements and stirs it up, it's really delicious! Of course, there are still some shortcomings when cracking the bones in the eggs. Here is my personal opinion: 1. The writing is off-topic or the imagination is too big, which will make the article seem a bit scattered. Often, before this matter is finished, the pig's feet will start to do other things. This time I just brought in the pig's feet and found some cool spots, and then I had to turn into a sponge and absorb the new settings. 2. There are a lot of two-dimensional terms and professional vocabulary for old bookworms. Of course I enjoyed watching it, but I am worried that some readers who are not cute in anime or who are relatively white will not be able to get these points. 3. A more detailed plot suggestion. The pig's trotters ate snake gall at the beginning and then obtained the wine pot. I think it is completely possible for him to level up in one go and then start the next trial plot of the Great Zhou Palace, so that it will not be too jumpy. At the same time, I really wanted to see what test questions were asked in the palace exam, but it seems that they were not written down (or I didn't see them~.~) Summary: The biggest problem is still a bit scattered. It would be better to finish an idea or a story completely and explain it well before starting the next idea. The foreshadowing buried in the middle cannot interfere with the main plot. My humble opinion, please forgive me But I have to say that this book is a good book with great laughs and plot! ! !

It's quite nice, a combination of multiple elements, and there's no sudden discomfort. It's just that sometimes there are missing words or typos. I hope you'll pay attention to it

Let's give an introduction to the casting call for supporting roles. That's right, I don't need original supporting characters here. For example, falling in love with Han Li in cross-dressing? A square dance aunt, a dancing goddess? As long as it is imaginable and interesting, I dare to write about anything. Then there is the problem of introduction. I really don't know how to write it. (´◔‸◔`)

Platinum writer Zhu Chulan visits This book has been identified as a fine quality grass jelly Infinite creativity Come on, come on Don't wake me up...

Write your book well, I feel like your subject matter will not lose its popularity.

It's really naughty. Sure enough, there is only a difference between zero and countless times for women's clothing! The author is in a big hurry! Very beautiful, very beautiful, very beautiful. Say important things three times!

I don't believe this is possible either.

New book released? I'll take a look first.

Already invested, please stop updating me, please keep writing.

The title of this book is very nice. If this book is finished, I plan to read the next one quickly. The subject matter is very popular.

Like it very much! No TJ, or else I'll send you the razor blade!

Feeling aggrieved Baba, the screenwriter asked me to change my name.

The plot is pretty good so far, and the combination of multiple elements will not be very conflicting. The second sister of Da Aibao🤭 hopes that it can be maintained😁

Thumbs up if you agree! ! ! 🤭