Hu Tu

Suggestion: Change "Sir" to an official title instead of calling people "Sir" casually.

I also hope that the primary school students' language dialogue will meet the requirements of the times as much as possible, so that they will have a sense of belonging to the times! This article is the basis of the work. I hope Mr. Xiao will not write a modern urban novel cloaked in history. The battlefield scene can be described through multiple aspects such as dialogue, psychological environment, etc. To depict the bloody and cruel battle on the battlefield. In terms of general fighting, you can use words such as: turning sideways, bending over, kneeling, falling from the sky, capturing, etc. To form a scene of killing a general. The formation of troops is also a good material. In the early stage of the battle, the description of the environment is good, and the above constitutes a complete battle scene. This is the second one. Finally, the biggest taboo is not to fire firearms. If you do it, you will not have a sense of the times. Adding firearms is not so easy to get. You can come up with cold weapons from both China and foreign countries in the later stage and no one will criticize you. There is a novel about the Eastern Jin Dynasty called Wu Huan Hua, which is well written (in ancient vernacular) and has exciting battle scenes and a sense of substitution. In the later period, a firearm plug-in was used to bring the artillery that only appeared in the late Northern Song Dynasty to the Eastern Jin Dynasty. Fans later lost their followers. Many people can't stand watching "Jin Yan Blood" because this poisonous point is too powerful. This is the third one.

It's very well written. Can you update it twice a day?

It would be a good book worth reading if the protagonist could contain his innocence. To be honest, I saw that the protagonist let go the bandits who burned, killed, and looted, and recruited the Huns who killed innocent people, just because he didn't want the helpless people to die, and he didn't want the hostages to die. I really couldn't hold on anymore. Overall, the early stage is really attractive, but these two points are really unacceptable. If you want to achieve common prosperity for all nations in the era of the Five Husbands, why don't you go to that era and experience it yourself?

. . . The system is a big failure, and so is summoning characters. I personally don't like it. . . Others don't know

The writing is okay, but the updates are not good. It is impossible to get results.

The author's previous writing is all good, but I don't know why he added a system in it. Every time I read this kind of historical novel, I feel like why is it classified into the historical category? Just put it in the fantasy category. I don't know what the author was thinking.

720,000 Words is still LV1, why? 1. Read the content in the book, various traditional routines, how to attract fans. 2. The author of history should have read a little bit, but the details are not very similar at all. You can call the Central Army of the Western Jin Dynasty the Central Army, the Yamen Army and the Suwei Army (the Central Army of the Western Jin Dynasty is divided into the Yamen Army and the Suwei Army). What kind of trouble are you repeating the Central Army? This is the Western Jin Dynasty, not the Republic of China. 3. The dialogues in historical novels should be as old-fashioned as possible. Most of those who are still willing to read historical novels have some basic skills. It is not that vernacular texts cannot attract fans, but a bit of ancient charm in the historical circle can attract fans even more. 4. Less novice stuff. Is it okay if military training can be involved in the game? I also brought in tank warriors to assist, and actually said this to the superior. Are you really not afraid of poisoning your book friends? I thought it was normal to lose followers after watching this. You can find the right words by reading a little bit, you don't have to resort to such tricks. There are really not many novice readers in the history field. I just saw the equipment for military training. For the time being, the author can take a look at these four points. If you think it's nonsense, just ignore it.

It is better not to use Arabic numerals when using these numbers in the article. It is better to use Chinese characters. Using Arabic numerals will drive many literary and artistic young people to death.

In terms of interpersonal address, the author should put more effort into it. It is recommended to refer to the contemporary work "Han Zuo Gaomen", which was written in the Eastern Jin Dynasty.

If you don't have a stallion in the harem, just lick the pig brother enough and touch the Holy Mother's nose with a wry smile.

I haven't started fighting after reading 50 chapters. The pace is too slow.

Update soon! If I can't go out at home during the Chinese New Year, I'm counting on you.

Come on, write slowly. Writing a book means that it needs to settle slowly before readers will read it.

I'm so dizzy that you didn't update anymore. The speed of the update is so beautiful.

Big cheers for the author