Flying Across the Apocalyptic Wasteland

I've forgotten how many times this is a book review, and it may be the last one. After all, the author's progress is obvious. In the future, I think I may cross the line and self-righteously guide the author to write articles, so I will treat this as my last. Of course, I do not rule out the possibility of expressing my feelings in the future. This time it is from the time when our protagonist Liigou No. 1 Meets Jiang Xiaoxiao until he first goes to the front line. Generally speaking, there is not much problem in this period and it is a big improvement compared to before. First of all, it is about non-combat daily life. This daily life can be said to be introductory. It is much less awkward than the previous daily life. At least it can make people read smoothly instead of making people unable to help but complain. Of course, Doubixiang's daily life is also different from other types of daily life. It is much easier to get started, because most of Doubi Xiang's daily stories are supported by memes, jokes, jokes, etc., Which make the daily routine less boring, while other daily routines do not have these, or have less thank-you content, so it is easy to cause the daily articles to have no passion and lack the desire to read on. I'm off track. In short, the author's daily life is an introduction, but he still needs to continue working hard, because the author writes funny articles about the doomsday, where the apocalypse is the background, and the funny articles are the writing style. Therefore, in such a novel, once characters or plots that do not match the background style appear, it will be very abrupt, and the writing style and the background complement each other. One of the reasons why the author's daily writing was poor before was because he used too much force, which created a disconnect, but it is getting better now. Another piece of advice about daily life is to learn to accept it. You don't have to reveal all your baggage to be funny. Sometimes after the character image is established, sometimes one sentence can make the readers smile. For example, when "Decent" is mentioned in "The Lord of Mysteries", the readers can't help but think of Xiao Ke, and then think of various deeds, and then Then a knowing smile, such as "curly baboon", or "head iron" and "shame of all things" in "Sword of the Dawn"... These often only require a few words to make readers smile knowingly. This is what Big Eyeball said that he doesn't use memes, he creates memes, and if he can use them skillfully, the author's writing power will undoubtedly improve even more. But it is often difficult to grasp this degree. When it comes to licking dogs in this novel, we cannot immediately tell which one it is. To write good funny articles, it is very useful to create your own memes, because then you will have your own characteristics. Having said so much, it can be reduced to one sentence: Although daily life is much better than before, we still need to continue to work hard. After all, it is only at the level where we can see it now, and it is far from the point where we want to see it. The second is the characterization of the characters. In a funny novel, even the villain must be funny. The protagonist or the people on the protagonist's side cannot be funny. This will create a disconnect. Even if the villain is not funny, compared with the protagonist, the villain must also have a funny feeling. Although "Lord of the Mystery" is not a funny novel, Squid still handles it very well. As a big boss, the rap master cannot be funny due to his identity, but through Xiao Ke's various actions, he still makes everyone die with the title of rap master. , In the same way, Mr. A, as a mini-boss from beginning to end, is not very funny, but in the end Xiaoke's duel with him naturally made everyone think it was very funny. Another example is to make the villain funny, such as the many bosses in "Cultivation Chat Group", but there is a big difference in this aspect in this book. For example, the first mini-boss, sorry I forgot the name, is the first boss in the true sense of the protagonist. It has neither full influence nor funny behavior, so the character image is not full. At the same time, I found another shortcoming in the author's character creation, which is the lack of character creation such as Gan Linniang and Han Yinli. As a virgin who can maintain her humanity in the wasteland, Gan Lin Niang could have been well portrayed and admired by everyone, but in the end it led to unanimous disgust among readers. The same goes for Han Yinli. As a researcher with a unique personality, she should generally be very popular, but I don't like her. After all, when we read novels, we always assume the perspective of the protagonist. Among these two women with obvious personalities, one is always holding the protagonist back, and the other is conducting brutal experiments on the protagonist. Although it is understandable that the author wants to portray the character in a more in-depth manner, he inadvertently places these people opposite the protagonist. As a hunter, Gan Lin Niang cannot fail to understand that people in the wasteland are sinister. She wants to think about ordinary people from the bottom of her heart, but it is impossible not to guard against these people's attacks. Gan Lin Niang also shows a silly and sweet feeling when facing the betrayal of her adopted child. This is when the readers have already started to feel disgusted, and then she shows a series of wise operations, which makes the readers disgusted. Han Yinli has shown before that she is a researcher who only cares about research, and Ono's first meeting with her shows this even more through Ono's feelings. The author writes that Ono is disgusted with her, which has already affected the readers, because Ono has passed through the previous The plot has undoubtedly captured the readers, so Ono's disgust at this time will also leave a seed of dislike for Han Yinli in the readers' hearts. However, Han Yinli's role has not been developed much at this time, and the readers still have some affection for Han Yinli through the third master and Liigou No. 2, And later on the protagonist In a series of experiments, the favorability of Han Yin was further reduced. It was simple because the experiments were too much, almost like murder. It would be better if it was targeted at ordinary NPCs, but the author once targeted the protagonist. Although he understood that this kind of plot was mainly to shape Han Yin The image of Yinli was designed to allow the protagonist to break through. However, this plot was both cliche and too forceful, which resulted in the decline of Han Yinli's favorability. Later, he was even forced to keep the protagonist's spiritual stone, so I dislike Han Yinli very much now, but he is better than Ganlin. It can be seen from these two examples that the author still does not have enough writing power to control such a unique character, and it is easy to use too much force From the daily life and character creation, the author has made great progress, but there are still many shortcomings. The most obvious point is that it is easy to use too much force, so I hope the author can continue to work hard, go further, learn to accept it, come on, author

I stayed up all night and finished reading it. I am very happy that this is a pretty good book. There are many bad points in the first few chapters or even dozens of chapters. First of all, the writing style changes too quickly at the beginning, and the connection between some jokes and jokes is a bit stiff. I don't know if it is because I didn't read the book carefully at the beginning. I always felt that the relationship between the protagonist and the third master progressed relatively quickly, and it was strange that the third master forced the protagonist to stay. Then there's Chang Wei's thing, and that guy who did... Oh no... Gan Lin's mother, these may not be considered poisonous points in the previous books, but after all, they came from the squid side, and I'm really tired of these plots. However, a big improvement overall is starting from the pursuit and counter-pursuit. At this time, it can be seen that the author has been able to connect various jokes or jokes more smoothly, and the previous poisonous points have almost been wiped out. Even the character of Ganlin Niang has not appeared. The author has put his entire mind on the plot. Perhaps it can be said that the author has found his own rhythm? However, overall I feel that some characters are still relatively weak, and I hope the author will continue to work hard. Since I don't have much money, I can only reward 100 points. I hope the author will not forget to give up and not relax and ruin this book.

Let me make a brief comment again, my heart is fragile, don't comment if you don't like it. This time I read the latest chapter from the death of Master Ba. It is obvious that the author is making continuous progress. The most obvious point is that the daily conversations are no longer so abrupt, out of place, and awkward. They are generally more natural. I am very much looking forward to the author's progress. Of course, as a keyboard warrior, I only need to say one or two nice things, but the most important thing is to say bad things, right? The biggest shortcoming of these dozens of chapters is the poor pacing, characters, and plot arrangement during the period when Master Ba passed away. First of all, after knowing that the Eighth Master passed away, the Third Master's behavior after knowing it was too exaggerated, because at this stage, we readers only know that the Third Master and the Eighth Master are old acquaintances, the relationship may not be bad, and they both came off the battlefield. We only know that the Third Master was under the God of War before, so it is impossible for such a person who is used to life and death to reveal such a big reveal. It's emotional, so this point will be very abrupt and exaggerated when watching it, so I think it would be better if the later battlefield memories are moved to when the third master just learned the news of the eighth master's death, so that we know that the two people have a fatal friendship, and we will know that the third master is very cowardly, and the eighth master is afraid of death. This way, there is a foreshadowing in the plot, and it will be less abrupt. Secondly, it is Third Master's emotional expression. A veteran who retired from such a cruel battlefield would not be so at a loss even if he knew that his comrade-in-arms had been assassinated. It is understandable that logical confusion would appear in an ordinary person, but when it appears in a person like Third Master, it is very exaggerated. What is needed at this time is emotional restraint, such as knowing enough about the death and not missing his expression. I was about to go directly to Ba Ye's place, but I forgot that Ono was still in the store. He Yingwu reminded me and took Xiao Ye with me. After seeing Ba Ye's body, my hands trembled slightly, or my eyes were filled with tears, or my face was tearing. I think it can better express the third master's feelings. In short, I think it is better to express the emotions of a person like San Ye not through expressions, but through subtle movements or eyes. In the same way, there are some problems with the handling of Ghost Hammer, but due to the writing and ink, they are not as obvious as those of San Ye. Finally, the plot of Master Ba's death is emotionally heightened. I don't quite understand this. It's not that this part is not well written or that it doesn't move me. I just feel that it lacks a touch that touches the soul. I don't know what the specific reason is, whether it's a rhythm issue or a writing problem, but it just lacks a touch. If there is anyone who knows me, please give me some advice.

This is the first time I write a book review and it is actually a negative review. Author, you are a true god. Your setting is really stomach-ache. This is really an insult to me, who is a fan of cultivating immortals.

To be honest with this book, I decided to give up as soon as I saw the Immortal Cultivator in the first few chapters. However, after casually taking a look at the back, it was quite interesting. It was good to see an unexpected surprise when the streets were filled with great people in the apocalypse. Read it slowly, this book is still very good.

Are you a new writer? Doomsday novels, and then there are a lot of first and second actors in the novice series, the supporting roles are all villains, the theme of the apocalypse is survival, but in the hands of the author, it becomes an urban protagonist going to the countryside to play, just like the exchange of love and affection during the Anti-Japanese War is awkward, the whole novel has too many logical loopholes

To be honest, the beginning was very good, but from the moment I got Ono, wow, I thought it was a bit funny, interesting, heartwarming, and quite good-looking. But what I felt was that the protagonist jumped too fast at the end. It felt like he had just left the novice village and started fighting in the palace. I couldn't stand it like this. It jumped too fast. It felt like I skipped 900 chapters and lacked a lot of details. It also started to feel weak and boring in the later stages. It didn't look as good as the chicken and dog jumping at the beginning.

Let me make a brief evaluation first. After all, I have raised a lot this time. I am afraid I will forget some things after reading it in one go. The first point is the reaction of the protagonist when the thunder whip cutter smashes the note. The description in the book is that he becomes angry instantly, but I think this change is a bit fast. , I should have been stunned for a moment, then recalled Ono's childish words, and finally got angry. This way, the levels are clearer. Although this also has its shortcomings, it is not in line with the actual situation on the battlefield. However, it is common sense that time is suspended during the protagonist's recall of killing on the battlefield (laughs). The second point is that when the protagonist knows that a large-scale confrontation has begun, the protagonist's first reaction is a sudden sense of responsibility. This feels a bit abrupt and conflicts with the protagonist's personality. For this point, you can refer to the description of the protagonist in "Above the Dome". In general, the author's description of the characters still has many shortcomings. Although this book is much better than other novels, it is undeniable that there are still many shortcomings. The author must grasp the scale and make little progress. Now it is much better than at the beginning, but there is still a long way to go above the standard, and we must keep up our efforts

Recommended for squid, keep it first and wait until it reaches 80W 😠

First View: Viewing the Avenue The great road is formless and nameless, its greatness has no outside, its smallness has no inside. The Tao has no questions, and the questions have no answers. Taoist, why? The birth of heaven and earth, the nourishment of all things, is called Tao; Revealing the sun and moon, performing the five elements, it is called Tao; It is called Tao when it is humble and yet extremely noble; Living in darkness but extremely bright, it is called Tao; Entering into the dust of the earth, it is called Tao; The vast package of heaven and earth is called Tao; Entering something from nothing is called Tao. When it comes to the true original judgment, Dapu has been dispersed. Tao gives birth to one, gives birth to two, and two gives birth to three. One is the body, the second is the use, and the third is the creation. Body function does not come from yin and yang, creation is all due to the intersection. The top, middle and bottom are the three talents, which are shared by heaven, earth and people. The Tao generates two qi, the two qi generates the three talents, the three talents generate the five elements, and the five elements generate all things. Among all things, the most noble one is human beings. Human beings are my bodies, and I contemplate my body to seek the path. If I can seek the Tao, I can seize the vitality of heaven and earth. The person's own vitality comes out from it, and the righteous energy of heaven and earth comes in from the outside. Even in the apocalyptic world, the vitality is dry and poisonous, and radiation is hidden in it, but the vitality is not extinguished, and the vitality of the heaven and earth can be taken away in a breath. The vitality of the doomsday world is the root of the doomsday world, the mother of heaven and earth, one yin and one yang, giving birth to all things. The sky sometimes tilts, the earth sometimes collapses, the mountains sometimes collapse, and the sea sometimes dries up, but the vitality never dies. To resist the calamity thunder until the end of the world, it is important to know that the vitality is also Yin Yin. Awaken quickly, get out of the maze, don't suffer in the last days. Second View: View the Heaven and Earth If you want to visualize your body, you must first observe the mechanism of heaven and earth. What is the chance of heaven and earth? Heaven and earth use the great road to travel up and down, and they practice it untiringly. The great road is determined and practiced, and it is counted because of its practice. The clear air rises to become the sky, and the turbid air sinks to become the earth. Once the three cardinal principles are divided, heaven and earth begin to exist. The Heavenly Dao is composed of one body, which is light and clear and upward, and the one used is Yang; The earth has the Kun Dao, with two as its body, heavy and turbid at the bottom, and the one used is Yin. Yang rises and Yin falls, interacting with each other, and the universe functions without losing track of the Tao. The way of heaven has Qian as its body, Yang as its function, and Qi at the top; The tunnel has Kun as its body, Yin as its function, and water at the bottom. Heaven walks the way, and uses dry strings to Kun: if one string is pulled, it is the eldest boy, and the eldest boy is called Zhen; if it is stringed again, it is the middle boy, and the middle boy is called Kan; if it is stringed three times, it is a young boy, and the young boy is called Gen. At this point, heaven joins the earth, and the three yangs arise from the stems and the kun. The earth is used to walk the road, and Kun is used to string it on the stem: if it is stringed once, it is the eldest daughter, and the eldest daughter is called Xun; if it is stringed again, it is the middle daughter, and the middle daughter is called Li; if it is stringed three times, it is the young girl, and the girl is called Dui. At this point, the earth joins the sky, and the three yins are born through the Kun Dao and the Qian Dao. The three yangs combine with the three yins, and all things come into being. The three yins combine with the three yangs, and all things come into existence. The intersection of heaven and earth is linked to the relationship between heaven and earth, and runs on the Tao. The universe and the earth are intertwined to produce six qi, the six qi combine to form the five elements, and the five elements combine to produce all things.

You can write such a vicious recommendation about Cui Zu and be scolded by so many readers. You are also a great author for this author.

Squid tour group, let's mark it first

I have read the latest chapter of this book, and my honest review is that it is really good. Out of control. The author's writing skills are poor, the plot is compact, and the fairy grass is a book. Seeing that the author never asks for leave or interrupts updates, I couldn't help but reveal the recommendation votes and monthly passes in my hand. Come on, author, the recommendation votes will be left for you every day! ! !

The book review is very sincere From the dullness of the first chapter to the funny and successful one now The author is very attentive to this book, from women's clothing, to licking dogs with heartbeat, etc. He is trying new things. When viewed as a whole, it seems a bit sudden. The plot, characters and background are presented as if they were synthesized, giving readers the impression that it is a p picture. But the progress has been huge. The most comfortable plot is not carrying a coffin or being embarrassed in front of a gas station, but simple and ordinary practice. Maybe it is different from others, but this book, the cultivation formula and the scene design, I personally find it quite interesting. Cultivation of mind and character is suitable for cultivating immortality and time travel. Steady, win No need to force it, force the plot to start, it is most comfortable to wake up naturally.

The writing is really stupid and the characters are like shit.

To summarize in two sentences, the first sentence is that newcomers may not be familiar with the importance, priority, style, and structure, and they are studying hard. The second sentence, personal evaluation, the first few chapters with a score of 60, covering the main content above the score of 85, probably drove away many friends. I'm not satisfied with the first few chapters, but I can't make major changes now. Fortunately, the logic makes sense. It's just a beginning of "expelling people". Qingyan is aware of this problem, and I accept it. As for the poisonous points, there may be several: The first is the sudden change in painting style. The third chapter starts to get a little rough, and the style of painting is different from the previous ones. This change is a bit abrupt, and it's a matter of my grasp. Secondly, the beginning is the beginning, it has been repaired to an acceptable level. In the past, it was a "double time travel" or a "tribulation period" time travel, which was extremely poisonous. In any case, it is considered a conventional poison and not a weapon of mass destruction. Again, it must be said that this is not a conventional doomsday novel, the kind where suffering and hatred are deep and cruel; nor is it a conventional fairy tale, the fairy tale with fluttering white clothes. What I want to write is, "hearty fighting + relaxed Pippi style + different ways of cultivating immortals and evolving together". It's not a noob's passionate novel, but overall it's still enjoyable. In addition, there are some small poisonous points, which I won't go into details. Finally, my friends also discovered that I listened to some suggestions and changed them; some could not be changed; some could not be changed. Qingyan hopes that he can stay awake and be able to distinguish what should be optimized and what should be persisted. Thank you everyone!

Part One: Summary of Volume One 1. Opening There has always been a saying in online articles that there are three golden chapters. The opening of "Leap" is a typical failure case. In the most original version, it was simply "thunder rolling from the sky, scorched on the outside and tender on the inside", and it was also said that "the king of all poisons cannot grow a blade of grass". The poisonous points at that time were mainly concentrated in two points: one was double penetration. As soon as the master appears, he is poisoned, and the readers are already dying of anger before they can even curse out. Secondly, the protagonist is already pregnant with the golden elixir when he appears, which is so incompatible with the joyful writing style. In the current version, Qingyan has worked hard to remove the "violent poison", and what is left is just the "ordinary poison". Readers and friends will probably only have "the heart beats faster, the face turns blue, and the feeling of retching goes straight to the Adam's apple. But as a senior reader, I have never seen any poison! So the reader glared and gritted his teeth, and swallowed the poisonous passages like a yellow dragon! Looking at it again, it was already in front of him. The color is as usual! In addition to the "voluptuous bitch" that was muttered through clenched teeth, the reader actually felt a little bit floating..." Unfortunately, the skeleton is already completed, and Qingyan can't really change it. It feels like: I wanted to write about a great horse, but when I wrote it, I found it was a donkey, and everyone yelled, "This donkey is so ugly, I'm going to die." Qingyan worked hard, and after cutting with a knife and axe, the ugly donkey turned into a mule. Summary: All in all, the opening chapter is quite unsatisfactory. When placed in an online article, I would rate it at 83.46 Points. 2. Small transition after the opening It is a small problem. The main line is actually clear. It is just that in order to pursue the so-called "conflict", the protagonist fights with a big man from the Hunter's Guild. It is really unnecessary. Overall quite satisfactory. 3. The main story of the first volume Logically speaking, Qingyan believes that it can withstand scrutiny. What usually costs the most energy is the character's personality, motivations, possible decisions, consequences, and chain reactions. Of course, newcomers must have shortcomings, and they will gradually improve in the future. The first volume slowly unfolds the story. It is roughly about the story of the immortal cultivator He Yingwu who came to the apocalyptic world and lived in a small place like Pinewood City... Flying sand and stones. Qing Yan is very good at writing fight scenes, so brag. There are several lines in it: The first is the story line, from being ignorant in the town, to working in the third master's weapons shop, to wanting to be a wilderness hunter, and encountering Yun Lingniang in the wilderness, and then there are links one after another, layer by layer. ; The second is the cultivation line. First, I thought that immortality cannot be achieved in the apocalyptic world. After the dream visualization, I was surprised to find that I can cultivate immortality; The third is the evolution line: He Yingwu is also evolving in the apocalyptic world and acquiring various abilities. Qingyan believes that the main story of the first volume of "Leap" is very complete, and his personal score is 90. There are several points worth mentioning: First, the pursuit and counter-pursuit, a sudden rise! Wonderful! All poison spots are wiped out! If you don't read this paragraph, you will regret your life. Secondly, the assassination sequence is very exciting! Thirdly, in Chapter 30 "Thousands of Miles Away" and Chapter 31 "Prosperous Martial Arts", the gray snake walks the line and foreshadows thousands of miles. I am personally very satisfied. Fourth, the Great Dream Contemplation Technique, purely in classical Chinese, has more than 1,500 words by the fourth contemplation. This work has been done very solidly, and Qingyan is very satisfied. In addition, there are many highlight descriptions, such as "Master Qian eats large intestine", "Resentment", "War Dance", etc., All of which are quite satisfying. 4. Shortcomings of the first volume The main shortcoming should be the grasp of "degree". "Leap" is largely a joyful article. How to express joy is a test for Qingyan. I have deleted a lot of scenes that I thought were exciting at the time and I put a lot of effort into them, but they turned out to be silly afterward. This is my weak point and I need to pay attention to it in the future. Except for the poisonous points at the beginning, the delay in transitioning several chapters, and the grasp of "degree", I can say with a clear conscience that this is a good story that took a lot of effort. 5. Digression On a larger level, Qingyan will use 3-4 novels to build a fantasy story system comparable to the "Marvel Universe". "Leap" is the first one. No kidding, I want to carry this banner. So dear readers, even if it is poison, please believe that light smoke is very serious about poisoning, hahahahaha. However, the realization of this dream requires the support of readers. This book currently has 390,000 words, and the results are bleak. It needs your support bit by bit while reading the book. Thank you in advance! Part 2: Explanation of the beginning of the second volume Many book friends reported that the second volume has already opened more than 20 chapters, and there is not a single fight scene, which makes it dull. Under the premise that "Qingyan is very good at writing fight scenes", this is a bit strange. I think it is better to communicate with my friends. The main reasons are: From the overall layout, at the beginning of the second volume, He Yingwu went from a "small place" to a "big place", which is the same as many friends in reality leaving the mountain village or hometown to study in the city, or going out to work in the big city. So I "saw" that a series of embarrassing things happened to He Yingwu. The incidents of riding a motorcycle and gas stations were all based on facts. They were really not made up by light smoke. When He Yingwu came to Phoenix City later, there was nothing to fight about. So this is probably the most important reason why there is no fight scene at the beginning of the second volume. From the logic of the story, my deduction should be more reasonable like this. Fighting scenes serve to advance the plot, not the other way around. Of course Qingyan could also write about how He Yingwu met the robbers and how they fought, but I think that would only mess up the rhythm and lengthen the story line meaninglessly, so I have written more than 20 chapters without fighting today. As the boss of "Descendants of Kou Zhun" commented, daily drama is difficult to write. In fact, I wrote this paragraph very slowly, but I had to write it. This was decided by He Yingwu, not me. As of now, my characters are making their choices. Of course, as a fantasy novel, there will definitely be fighting scenes, very soon. Looking forward to the second volume, Qingyan will definitely write better.

I just want to hit a wall and lose my memory. It's so disgusting. I can write a short essay if it's more disgusting.

From the scene to the encounter with Thunder Whip, how can I put it, I was a little disappointed. The most exciting part was the escape scene with Yu Ge, but it was nothing more than that. Although it is normal, after all, people cannot always progress at a high speed. It is not taboo to say that the author's ability to describe this plot is not very good. Regardless of the battle or the semi-daily life underground, I feel a little disappointed. The first is the sniper 3000 section. According to the author's description, we can assume that the range of a sniper rifle can reach this far, but a sniper rifle is not an automatic rifle after all. The barrel of the gun cannot withstand so many rounds of bullets in such a short time. If there are such awesome materials, then the shells will be more powerful. Even if the rate of fire is poor, the power is not small, so the gun and cannon sections are almost contradictory. The second is the description of the battle. I don't know why I always feel that it doesn't have that thrilling feeling. Maybe I didn't read carefully, or maybe there were too many jokes and the atmosphere was not easy to accumulate. But after all, the purpose of going deep behind enemy lines this time was to kill enemy snipers, and then suddenly encountered an unexpected siege. It should have been a depressing atmosphere with a storm approaching, but there was not much sense of urgency or crisis. Moreover, the upgrade section in the middle was a bit long, and all the atmosphere accumulated before was lost, and I had to start from scratch. As a result, new forces joined the battle without much effort. The plot rhythm of this whole episode is really messed up. The last stage is the underground battle stage. This section is all semi-daily, which is a big improvement compared to the previous one. However, there are also shortcomings, which I won't mention. I hope the author can control the rhythm well. Funny things must be more funny than in the article, but when it is time to reduce the jokes, it should be reduced, otherwise the rhythm of some plots cannot be controlled well. I have to say that the author has come up with a very difficult formula to write, a funny post-apocalyptic text. It is difficult to integrate the two. Rather, it is better to say that funny and combat texts are not very easy to combine. I hope the author will continue to work hard and vote for a monthly vote to show his encouragement.

What the hell are you writing? Are you plagiarizing?

Author, you'd better find a class, stop writing books, you'll starve to death

What are you writing about? Do you think all readers are idiots? A person who has traveled through time as an immortal cultivator has written such a weak and weak mess. This is a useless book. No wonder it is not popular. It is a brainless piece of writing!

There are shadows of Yanyu Jiangnan's "Demon Hunting Notes"

Ten days have passed, and the plot has passed a level, so I will venture to say a few more words. First of all, I have to admit that the plot of the chase and the counter-hunt in the wilderness is really exciting. Not to mention novices, many novels I have read cannot be written at this level. It is tense but humorous, and the tightness is generally moderate. It does not give people a sense of breathless oppression, nor does it give people a sense of leisure, which is also called a chase. It is tight but loose. Moreover, during this period, it not only showed the protagonist's decisiveness in killing, but also showed the protagonist's humanity. The most obvious example is to get water at the gathering place. For the sake of himself, the protagonist can only find water at the gathering place, but instead of grabbing it directly, he keeps the money. Later, he does not lead the pursuer to the gathering place, but leads him away. This is very comfortable to watch. All in all, this large wilderness plot, including the section back to the city, is completely different from the previous ones. But the plot that followed the return of the third master made me feel particularly awkward. The interaction between the protagonist and the third master always had a sense of abruptness. I couldn't figure out exactly where it was abrupt, but it just lacked a smooth feeling. The feeling of "Ah, this is how the relationship between the protagonist and the third master should be" was very weak. Later I thought about it and guessed that it was probably the author's writing power. Let's talk about the character of the protagonist. The character of the protagonist is serious when he should be serious, but he feels a bit mean at ordinary times. This kind of character of the protagonist can be said to be more popular at the current starting point, but the author is good at writing fighting scenes, and some daily interactions are exposed. The author is probably not very skilled in controlling the daily style, so there is this sense of abruptness. Of course, this is also my guess. After all, I am not a professional. It is just a feeling generated by reading novels for many years. I have done countless things. The last part is the assassination. The protagonist's love for Ono and Ono's cuteness are simply touching people's hearts. It's great. Although Ono's stunt in the middle is still a little abrupt, it can also be guessed that given Ono's strength, this assassination is not a concern at all, or Ono has a mysterious trust in the protagonist and believes that the protagonist will never die from such an assassination. Both are possible, so I still don't guess the author's thoughts. All in all, the author seems to be very good at fighting scenes, but is a bit difficult at daily life. Of course, the above are all my immature opinions. If you don't like it, don't criticize it.

That's it? That's it? I thought the books recommended by Cuttlefish should at least have quality assurance! What kind of stuff is written? It's not even a piece of writing.

I recommend a book written by a book friend, Starting Point, "Faith of the Ragnarok", which is said to be renamed "The Lord of Dreams" soon. Introduction: An aristocratic young man who wanted to hunt and fish, awakened into a dream system at the age of seventeen and gained an experience in another world. At the same time, a rich mine was discovered in the family territory and fell into a battle between the high-ranking nobles. Is all this accidental or an arrangement of fate... Comment: This is a fantasy novel of "Western fantasy + strong Eastern elements". This kind of novel is rare on the market, and it is even rarer to be well written. The combination of the real world and the dream world is very interesting, and the various sites in the dream world are also very interesting, with Western names, atmospheres, prayer techniques, etc., Combined with Yue Buqun and the Star Absorbing Technique... A unique setting! Of course, the more complex and interesting the setting, the higher the challenge to the author. I can feel that the author has a very grand story in his mind. I hope that I can write it slowly and logically, but it will not be rounded out. It is also commendable that the setting of ability promotion is very strict. Personally, I think the power system is probably as strong as an iron barrel and will not collapse. Online writing does not have high requirements for "literary talent", but there are still certain requirements for "writing power". Personally, I think the entry-level requirement is "telling the story clearly". The author obviously exceeds this standard. As for how much more, benevolent people have different opinions, and there is no way to argue. My overall score is 79%. Occasionally dramas, occasionally magical strokes, generally speaking, it is suitable to calm down and read line by line. It is definitely inappropriate to read ten lines at a time with more "self-entertainment elements". This is also related to the general background of "Western Fantasy". You can't say "wtf" or "what?" To yourself from time to time, as that will ruin the overall atmosphere. It can be seen that the author puts great care into every word and sentence. It has a decent beginning. I can only say that it is a pity to be dismissed at the beginning. The subsequent plot gradually unfolds, so you can judge for yourself. The plot is reasonable, reversal, and unexpected. I would give it a score of about 80 points. The biggest drawback is the fighting, I almost cried while watching it... It's hard to describe, short... And weak. Interested book friends can check it out, overall personal food.

I want to report this book for plagiarism, plagiarism (Misty Rain Jiangnan) I hope everyone will follow up

Are you sure you are a god? Such a person who became an immortal was killed out of tens of millions of people. He was not even as good as Han Paopao at the Dan Formation stage.

It's just useless writing. The number one person in the wasteland. So what if he only has force? He is a mother-in-law and a mother-in-law.

I read three chapters. , The protagonist is a waste, a person who has lived two lifetimes. People are going to mess with you, but if you don't kill anyone, you are really a waste and a wasteland. You might as well write about the city.