Prison of Fate

Update progress: Currently 64,000+ have been read. Overall impression: If you can stick to Chapter 70 and beyond, it should be considered a good book. I'm sorry for giving such an evaluation. Personally, I think there are indeed some wonderfully written parts, and they are not too few, but most of them are in the second half... Judging from the retention of bookmarks, I have read nearly 80 chapters before "getting into the action". The suspense setting at the beginning is not very clever. Although it is real, it is not fascinating enough. It might be okay if it is used as the opening of a mystery puzzle game. The first 35 chapters, until leaving Cuiye Village, are generally at the level of food and grass, non-toxic and harmless, and can be read (except for the part where the protagonist Wang Qi tries to pick up girls is a bit awkward). In addition, the authoris very familiar with the world. The structure is quite detailed. The main perspective of Wang Qi has conflicts between concepts and other worlds (and throughout the whole text - * is a very interesting point, which will be discussed later). It is also logically self-consistent, which enhances the sense of substitution to a certain extent. The following thirty chapters, from entering Yama City to chapter 65, that is, before the mystery is revealed for the first time, I don't know why I didn't understand it when I first read it. Even though I pushed through it, I had no impression at all. I just browsed it again, and I'm still not very interested... So I have to guess the possible reasons: Too many angles and it's a bit confusing? The plot progresses slowly and the pace is a bit draggy? Too few paragraphs and too dense text? (I didn't read this part carefully, so I just made a [guess]) Then it's time to enter my favorite part: Start with the experimental report in Chapter 67! The "triple-blind" experimental design is well received! The subjective phenomenon setting of both right and wrong is well received! And everything related to the experiment is very well written! ! (Including Chapter 95 about talent testing) Of course, what I appreciate may also be dyslexia - proper nouns and various concepts appear too frequently and easily affect the fluency of reading. I was confused with Wang Qi almost the whole time when it came to the later part involving mathematics and physics... As a former liberal arts student, I almost wanted to skip a lot of chapters because of this_(:з∠)_ *Chapter 78 and Chapter 79 The Conflict of Concepts between the two races Elves and Humans is particularly well portrayed. The argument between Liya and Yin Hua is extremely real. Therefore, the author found this part fascinating and unexpectedly left a good impression on me. Maybe it's because I haven't had much of a sense of immersion until now, so the intimacy brought by the projection of reality resonates with me even more. (Including the views of elves raised by humans on feeding on the same kind in the following 82 chapters, and the views of normal humans (?) In chapter 174) The protagonist Wang Qi of this book is limited to a weak chicken with a strong desire to surviveNot handsome, so the tone of the whole text is particularly depressive: The tenderness seems to be covered with a piece of gray cloth, and the hot blood seems to be covered with a layer of shadow. The world is on the edge of collapse at any time, and the hands in the darkness are always trying to drag it into the mud. So Wang Qi is here. However, this poor kid is a real weakling. He doesn't know the facts about cheating and can't use them. His social skills are negative (real social fear), he is a scumbag in foreign world fighting, and his knowledge cannot keep up with the trend of the times. Under such circumstances, it is obviously unrealistic to expect more from an ordinary junior high school student. Therefore, the author's Wang Qi can only succumb to the mercy of fate, clinging to the only thing he can do like a drowning man grabbing the last straw, even if it is also controlled everywhere - even though he doesn't know why he came, he doesn't know that he is the intersection of light and darkness, and he doesn't know that he is the turning point of the world's expectations. He doesn't want to change history, he just wants to live, if possible, with some dignity. He did not want to deny the value of his life as a human being, but he had no choice but to force himself to deny it, to behave awkwardly, ridiculously, even pitifully and hatefully, under the constant concern of death. I don't know if I understand it correctly, but at least from this perspective, his clumsy and almost unreasonable behaviors all have reasonable support. He is not unique, but one of thousands of ordinary people. His wishes are reasonable, small and real. (Writing this, I suddenly have more expectations for Wang Qi w) The above are the first 155 chapters of the first volume. After cutting off chapters 142-153, I have the main character in my subjective impression. Volume 2 can't be remembered at all, so I'll just skip it (Hey) As for 142-153, why are they listed separately? Because this is currently the only Wang Qi's personal home game time (it doesn't even take up one-tenth of the space, which is really pitiful compared to other protagonists). There is nothing to talk about in terms of strength. It seems that the character has grown, or some of the previously less obvious traits finally showed up after meeting the corresponding conditions (possessing sufficient strength), such as kindness towards the world. Those who are forced to sacrifice have not lost their goodwill toward the thing that forced them to sacrifice. What's even better is that such a sacrifice may not necessarily bring what you want - Wang Qi faces endless possibilities, and every choice will have a corresponding impact, but he, no, there is only one future they are looking forward to. It's a great subject matter, don't let it collapse later. Then there is the chapter 140 from the time it was released without going into detail. It may be because there are so many concepts involved that I struggled to read them intermittently, and I don't remember them clearly, so I just skipped them and just mentioned a few points: First, the images of the church members are well portrayed and can be left behind. What impressed me were Pope's "Even if tomorrow is the end, we must live seriously today" (Chapter 93) and Bianfang's "There is no word "final" at all, the war never ends, it just changes from one form to another" (Chapter 126). The second is where Hirakawa Tsubasa (a normal human being) delivers a message to his mother. It is very interesting to see the darkness under the lamp (Chapter 135). Third, there is a description of a senior magician in Chapter 134 that is very realistic. The previous chapter, about 90+ to 100+ college daily life, is also pretty good. In addition, I want to focus on complaining about 141. It was supposed to be a very tragic and dramatic chapter! After reading it, I felt no fluctuation in my heart. Finally, if you can cut off some redundant parts, unify the perspective as much as possible, tighten the lines and write fewer lines, it should be better than now. In the end, I realized that I seemed to have gone off topic (no matter) (give up) Anyway, I grabbed the end of this week and finished writing the long review (laughing)

It seems to be very stable, but it panics.

If it is not necessary, do not add entities ----Occam In normal contexts, among conventional interpretations and "subtle meanings", conventional interpretations should take precedence in understanding.                                                                                                                              By Gris If it can be explained by stupidity, then don't presume malice on others.                                                                                        If the condition is not sufficient to produce the consequences to which it is assigned, we should either reject the condition, or make it merely a part of the factors which produce the consequences. ​​​​​—Hume A claim made without evidence can be dismissed without evidence. ​​​​​—Hitchens If a claim cannot be falsified through experiment or observation, then it is not worth discussing. ​​​​​​—Alder Only theories that are falsifiable can be considered scientific.                                                                                                        Popper

The author's ideas are very good, and the setting is also very new. The first 11 chapters are really useless except for hinting at a few points. The daily grind is too slow.

I can feel that it is a good book, but it lacks something, and I can't put it in words. Besides, it's 99 chapters, and it's only six comments. It's too bad. Come on, author.

Included in book list, ↖(^ω^)↗

So the protagonist's ability is razor, right?

It's always good to put it on the shelves, come on, I don't plan to put it on the shelves anymore, it's free and no one will read it 😭

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Personally, I think your writing style is okay, but there are a lot of elements at the beginning. Although it may be very important to your plot, it is a bit discouraging to ordinary readers. If you just want to write casually, it doesn't matter. If you want to follow the crowd and make some extra money, you must give up this writing method!

It's true, but your color needs to be darker

Come on, adjust your status and move on ✊

This book... As long as the author is happy 😒

Come on✧٩(ˊωˋ*)و✧