Wei Jian Yongzun

I finally had some free time during the holiday, and I also reread what I had missed before. I could feel the subtle changes in Dongfang, but to be honest, I didn't expect that Dongfang could persist until now. It is really amazing. It is said that there are very few authors who have discovered a god. Many big writers have finished writing the first book, and the traffic of the second book has begun to explode. I will brag that you have the qualifications to become a god. Give it a try first and keep up the good work 😏

The first monthly ticket in 2019 is given to you. Recommended 6/6 Already voted

This month's recommended 7/7 monthly vote is 1/1. Already voted and supported

I finally got a level up and got one more recommendation vote. I support you by recommending 7 times a day.

It's just that the updates are not strong enough, so the results are not good?

Swipe the booster card and get a monthly ticket. Recommend 6/6 to support brothers.

Tianxiufeng is responsible for the appearance 😊

The leader of Tianxiu Peak, Yun You, who sounds stern but is actually very protective of his shortcomings, is heartbroken for Chang Xi, and his figure is plump and hot... It's so bad that it makes your heart beat ❤️

Q version Chang Xi hopes everyone likes it 🤭

Congratulations on getting it on the shelves. I plan to fully order it. This is my first fully ordered book. The author must keep it up.

This book really has the potential to become a god. Although I have only read twenty chapters, I only need to ensure the quality of the rest, not to overeat and not to finish. Personally, I think it is very beautiful, the environment description is very good, and it has a strong sense of picture and immersion. The characters have distinct personalities, and everyone has their own characteristics. The ending can definitely be made into a TV series

It seems that you are someone who wants to write a book seriously. I want to give you some advice. Character dialogues and monologues are the biggest shortcomings of your article. The flaw in the language description greatly hinders the overall level of the article. It is recommended that you carefully read the dialogues and monologues of your characters. There are a lot of redundant words, dramatic vernacular, and imprecise words and phrases, so it sometimes smells like a running account. This is a lack of your writing skills or vocabulary reserve. There is also a relationship between the character's speaking style and the character's image and background. The character's language should be suitable for the character. Language description also shapes the character's image. The setting you give to the character will in turn determine what your character should say and how he should say it.                  ，，，， Then at this time, a certain behavior of a junior in the Qi Lian realm made the master you set say: This kid is so terrifying, it made him take a breath; your master was shocked and said, "What, the Qi Lian realm can actually do this?" In this way, your verbal description creates a fussy character about your master. It conflicts with the calmness you set. This is called a mismatch between language and characters. If there is too much contrast between the character setting and the actual character image created by the language, the article will have a typical sense of stupidity and poisonousness. The severity of this feeling now depends on the magnitude of the contrast. It seems like you didn't notice this.

The graphics are full of visuals, and the writing skills are not to mention. Even the ordinary fight with Huang Shangxian without the use of immortal magic looks extremely real.

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Give a reward to the helmsman🤓🤓

I have recommended it every day since I was qualified to recommend it. I am willing to use my meager strength to increase the motivation to continue writing! Come on, support you! !

It's been a long time since I've seen a book that appeals to my taste. It's not pretentious or cliché, it's a breath of fresh air.

Yunyou's uncolored line drawing😊

This book appeared on my bookshelf by itself, which is probably fate. I have read all the chapters I have written and I feel pretty good about it, especially the online IQ and the lack of intrigue within the sect, which makes me feel very comfortable. I like the rhythm of the article very much. It suits my habit of reading word for word. I feel anxious when reading at a fast pace. I hope there will be a single heroine or no heroine, and the protagonist will not be ambiguous. Come on, author, keep it up and save some manuscripts every day. If new authors want to attract attention faster, more is a good way (personal judgment). Also, if there are two chapters a day and you distribute them separately, wouldn't there be an updated list?

This book catches up to now. I feel it is much better than those written by so-called masters. I started to mess around in 2003. This book is good, good luck to the author!

Can any fellow Taoist tell me if I can read this book? Did Shen Nong test poison?

Qingxuan character design line draft, hitting people with the ball 😌

I didn't expect that the author was once a king🐶I'm still a gold and silver player after five years of playing. Should I give up this game😂

The plot is really good, I should continue to follow it. However, the writing style and presentation techniques are poor and need to be improved. It is recommended that the author find his own writing style as soon as possible. The author's writing style is still a bit monotonous for the masses and it is difficult to attract real old bookworms.

Okay, it's all booked, come on, author.

No, because of Mao Qingyi's perky big breasts? It's so obvious that it's a sidestep?

It's a very good book, and the protagonist's IQ is also online. It's not like other books that forget all the ultimate moves, skills, and trump cards and just pretend to be B.

I didn't read the book, but read the introduction and was very interested. But when I looked at the character column, in addition to the male protagonist, Isui's female supporting character, is this called no harem? Well, there is no harem, and there is ambiguity, which is even more annoying. I don't know about the article, but an article is all about women. It makes it difficult for those who want to find a plot, no ambiguity, and no harem to have the courage to read it.

After reading the first chapter, I feel that the author is a bit cute and his writing style is also very good. Please support him!

Sanjiang finally worked hard. It's not easy for old bookworms. Great book! 😢😢I rarely write book reviews