This Is Not a Serious Konoha Village

I'm the author and there's room for improvement. It can be said here.

The first three chapters are poisonous. Let, raise your hands if you agree!

Let me first explain that I am a loyal fan of Naruto. I would like to make a suggestion for your novel. First, divide it into more paragraphs, otherwise it will be uncomfortable to read. This is not a composition. Then it would be better to add some classic lines from the original Hokage.

First of all, I have collected it. Lack of punctuation is a gap. The biggest shortcoming is that the world view is too big and confusing. By extension, you mix things from various systems together, which will cause visual fatigue to the reader, and I won't read the first three chapters to be honest. Also, the author is too self-indulgent. I think if you can stick to it, you should not put all the worldview at the front. It should be linked to the plot. It is best to put some eye-catching things in the front to attract readers' interest. It's useless to say more. If the author wants to improve his skills, he can add a public account on WeChat (Yang Chen said online articles), which is Yang Chen's 314 public account platform. It introduces in detail how the author can write a more successful novel. My name is Lei Feng, don't thank me.