Cultivation of Immortality by Mortals: Starting from a Casual Cultivation

The protagonist, as a scumbag who runs a harem, has nothing to do but Han Li. The author is writing about the original novel of "Don't be crazy about Diss". This is a basic moral sentiment. Others are too lazy to mention it, but I just want to say one more thing.

What to say about the writing, it is good sometimes and sometimes bad. I can't grasp the strength of the writing. In addition, the protagonist's temperament has not changed and is as unchanged as a diaosi. I think the character of the protagonist in the last update has not changed at all. The second grade is immature and sometimes silly. It should have something to do with the author himself. He has little experience and his writing is tender, but it is still okay for a newcomer.

Too many explanations……………… Are you writing a novel or interpreting ordinary people? ? Looking at this book, you are a fan of mortals and are very familiar with mortals Don't write some nonsense Your interpretations can be presented through the plot, don't write them outright

The author writes well, but there is one thing you'd better pay attention to. When you write any fanfic, never find fault with the protagonist. This is a big no-no. Because everyone has their own opinions, and you, the author, also have your own opinions. But it is not the icing on the cake🌸, and it will attract poisonous things. The author can just hide it in his heart, there is no need to write it out in the article. The book friends who come to read your article all read it based on their good impression of Han Li. They want to read a refreshing article that arouses the mood of the book friends. No matter how reasonable your analysis is, you will often lose more than you gain.         ， ，         ，，， This will do more harm than good.

It feels like I have been saving it for a long time. It's only a dozen chapters, and I ran out of time after a while.

After reading the first hundred chapters, I generally feel that the writing is pretty good. The layout and plot arrangement are very reasonable, and the bloody forbidden herbs being taken away from the old man is amazing. There are many problems. First of all, "there are many thieves" and "thieves and so on" appear too frequently. When I read these words, I feel very unfamiliar. Secondly, there is almost no description of the fighting skills, and the various methods of the protagonist only exist in PS.

After reading two more chapters, I feel a little disappointed, Coke-kun. The preparation for the visit to ask for someone was good, and it felt like it was going to be on fire. But it wasn't until I finished reading the last two chapters that there was a problem (it was about to light up, but I realized that the match was actually wet - it didn't light up). Isn't this climax wonderful? I read it again from Dengmen, then looked back at the previous chapters, and then read a few passages of Mortal, only to realize that, Coke, the fighting scenes you wrote were a bit sloppy. How can I put it this way? Your creative thinking and the framework in your mind are very good and majestic. Only some details can be further optimized. For example, in the latest two chapters, the Mahayana fight ends like this. It's too simple. Good guy, Liuji was given away in two strokes. No matter how bad she was, she had been the ancestor for a long time. She didn't have any magic weapons, talismans, curses, elixirs, earth, wind, water, fire and other exotic treasures, secret treasures, pets, and all kinds of evil things, etc.? Didn't you search? Good guy, just a few clones are too meager, there are so many things to write about! The fighting can be more detailed, this is the Mahayana fighting method! What's more, it's still a life and death battle. Shouldn't we change the world and move mountains and seas at every turn? It should be more powerful than a nuclear bomb washing the ground, and Xiao Wang has so many good things in his hands, why has he never used them in Dou Fa? I still hope that your thinking will not be constrained by the original work. If you can write in your own style, come on! 😠

Can the author write it in plain language? I'm a bit confused.

I have to say that the author's arrangements are very detailed and thoughtful. It's a thoughtful article that I like very much, but it feels like the pace is a bit fast, and if the protagonist is too smooth sailing, it feels a little inconsistent with the cruelty of a mortal.

This book is good. If you don't grab the golden finger during time travel, it's just a piece of cake. If you're afraid of death, don't become an immortal. If you don't grab it, you're worse than a stray dog. At least a dog can grab food to survive.

1: This book does not consider the mortal world and the spiritual world, and adjusts the background from the spiritual world. This mortal is not that mortal. You can understand it as a person who has read the legend of mortals cultivating immortals, and the mortal world in their conscious imagination. As for the vial setting, it is simply a tool for accelerating the ripening of the elixir. The bottle spirit will be obtained by Han Li, forming a double dragon pattern. In the end, whether two dragons compete or the loser becomes the winner, it depends on the opinions of everyone in the group. Don't be stubborn with me. I don't have any extra energy to waste on explaining this. 2: Many book friends said that my writing was a bit long-winded and explained too much. I always used some events and plots in the original work to make sense. It felt like I was writing an argumentative essay. I can only say I'm sorry about this, I'm really sorry. First, it's my writing habit. During this period of time, my head is full of argumentative essays. What would I write if I don't write argumentative essays? (How can I have no one to share my pain? Hehehehe). Second, my writing skills are limited. I am just a science and engineering undergraduate who moves bricks on a construction site, and I have no gorgeous words. Third, my energy is really limited and I know everything I know. I recognize all these shortcomings. I will try my best to adjust my state. After I go back every night, I will calm down and adjust my Qi for half an hour before writing. Reduce the plots related to the original work to give everyone a little more sense of exploration. 3. If you don't like this book, think it ruins the original work, think Han Li is good at everything, or think my verbosity is unbearable, you can go out quietly and turn left! Please respect each other, come quietly, and leave quietly! The mortal in your eyes may not be what I see, nor may it be what everyone sees. You have to be capable and write your own book. I will be the audience and I will pick out the bones for you and see how you feel. Since you don't dare to write, then don't just talk. Okay, life is not easy, just do it and cherish it. Happy reading everyone.

After reading some, I don't understand why I have to go out to get so many clones if I don't practice hard. I only get one or two, and I waste my time and spend several years looking for them.

I think this novel can be renamed "The Encyclopedia of Mortal Opportunities" or "The Guide to Mortal Cultivation through Time Travel" 😁

Hundreds of Mahayana cultivated over hundreds of years? Where do you get so many resources? Not even if you have the resources, right?

Stick to yourself, the writing is very good, many readers did not write comments, not because they don't read, but because they just read the book and have no time to comment. After the revision, it is very troublesome to comment! I have been a bookworm for about ten years and am very picky about books. I basically can't fault this book. Kill decisively, there is nothing wrong with it! No Holy Mother, nothing wrong! I'm not a boy who makes money, there's nothing wrong with him! It's not like you can't move when you see a woman, there's nothing wrong with it! Many people are too mortal and dislike the protagonist's solo career, instead of clinging to Old Devil Han's lap! In fact, to be honest, with Han Lao Mo's character, unless he has an immortal body, Han Lao Mo's thighs are really hard to hug. But this is what makes Mortal and Han Lao Mo unique and attractive! If Han Laomo is the heart of the Holy Mother, then we will definitely not like him!

Huahua without clothes＊Ancestor of the Demon World＊Sister Baoer

Come on, the author, he has really written his own characteristics, and without violating the original work, he has directly or indirectly clarified many contradictions in the original work, making the work more complete and reasonable. The plot is thoughtfully conceived, not only losing the ups and downs of the original work, but also adding new whimsical ideas, which is very good.

It is not easy to understand the author from beginning to end, but overall it is very good. The pig's feet pattern is there, and all kinds of actions are still in line with the public. I look forward to having a fairyland fan.

Let's list the beginnings of entering the mortal pit 1. You are participating in the Yanjiabao Competition. You are very proud and want to get a good ranking. You suddenly see a Yan family wearing a mask and long green nails walking towards an ordinary young man 2. You were born into the first family of Yuanwu Kingdom. Fu family, although your cultivation level is low, as a direct descendant, you enjoy a lot more resources than the disciples of the Yuling Sect. When you traveled through time, you were busy preparing for your ancestor's birthday. Suddenly, you heard screams and the sound of sword light breaking through the air 3. As the number one god incarnation in the human world, in order to go further, you and two friends stole Crossing the space node, when all your treasures were destroyed, you finally saw the wall of the spirit world, and a black light suddenly flashed in front of your eyes 4. As the ancestor of the first true spirit family, you gathered a group of people to bravely rush to the Bitter Spirit Island, and ended up meeting the ancestor of the demon world who was holding the Xuantian Treasure. Fortunately, there was a real person among the travelers. Guys with extraordinary strength can restrain one or two, and there is an old monster's soul in the spirit world. You suddenly see the ancestor of the demon world destroying the old monster's soul, and then a puppet beside the ancestor that was originally a trophy suddenly moved and swallowed a drop of green liquid I don't know if there is any more, welcome to add.

The author is writing a novel, not an expository essay. Can he not use lengthy explanations?

It feels like the author has fallen into a misunderstanding. Getting treasures by chance, strengthening oneself, and improving means can all bring excitement, but if these gains are obviously too many, so much that it is impossible to calculate the gains and losses, then aesthetic fatigue will occur. Nowadays, the protagonist obviously has an overwhelming number of methods. This is actually unreasonable. Most of the methods will not have a chance to appear, but the protagonist has already improved to a higher level. By then, the countless methods will not be used, but he will need to spend energy to upgrade one by one to keep up with the protagonist. It is impossible for the protagonist to obtain enough different resources at every level to ascend to heaven, and many methods are destined to be in vain. In fact, as long as you maintain the necessary means to help the protagonist progress, maintaining so many means that you can't remember will not bring you any fun at all.

I finished reading it before and moved it out of the bookshelf. Now why do I still charge some coins for the second time?

The writing is too detailed. Every action and every idea has to be explained once and for several paragraphs. It's almost like the whole world is analyzing what should be done this and what should be done that. I'm analyzing everything, but it feels like there's no plot left, and I'm dizzy. Does the author know what it means to be detailed and brief? Readers are not fools. You don't need to analyze every thought and every thing. It seems exhausting. I was looking forward to it, but who knew it would be like this?

This book is generally not good, except that Xin Ruyin dies inexplicably, and even if he is reincarnated with memories, he is no longer the same person as before, and the protagonist is crazy to have an heir 😅, and is particularly unfriendly to the women in the original book. The last thing I saw was that it was quite poisonous.

I read 92 chapters in one go, which made me read late into the night. The next morning, I had no energy in physical education class. I asked the author to compensate for the mental damage and at least give me some energy 🥱

I feel that the writing is okay, and it shows the stubbornness of a mortal cultivating immortality. I watched it continuously and it felt very satisfying to watch it in one go. However, if you catch up on updates, you will definitely feel that the progress is delayed. It feels like the author is either speeding up the progress to discover the plot faster, or adding more updates every day. Otherwise, if the amount of content every day is very small and the plot advances so slowly, it will easily make people who follow the update feel inadequate.

I just want to objectively evaluate the protagonist's holding of the Sky Vase.

Start by re-opening a Mortal fanfic, I feel like the results will be better than the ones you are currently writing.

Come on, you are the best at writing "Mortals Cultivation to Immortality" fan fiction.

I've read more than half of it, and it's probably the most serious one among all the fics. Personally, I can't accept some of the protagonist's emphasis on the plot and the author's arrangements, as well as a small part of the second setting, so I can't read it for the time being. I'll read it again in the future.