One is the king of the Liuli Kingdom; the other, an artistic young man who transmigrated through time and space. One is beautiful and powerful, the other gentle and a little scatterbrained. One is a legendary champion, while the other is a gentle young man with miraculous hands. Though utterly different, the two meet and fall in love, drawn together by fate. Now, allow me to slowly tell you the love-filled fantasy of these two lovers. “Clang! Clang! Clang! It was a stormy night, and XX and 00 were…”
This is the first story I've ever written. It's mainly a fantasy about transmigration and magic. It's not very well written, and my writing is still rather immature. But please leave lots of comments so I can improve! =o=+ This story does include male pregnancy, so if you don't like that, please don't read it! -o=+
Premise:
Why does it feel so strange? It's too economical and not good enough. It feels like the key is being omitted.
It feels strange
Two P kids, I used to like them but now I don't like them anymore
Sir, please work hard and update! ! ! ! !
No matter what, as long as it's not TJ, it's a good article, haha~
. . . . I didn't expect updates to be so slow. . .
It can happen to people who haven't been online for as long as I do. . .
It looks like there are still about two chapters left. . .
Come on and update. . .
Dad, I'm not even 14 now. What about the introduction? I think it depends on how you write the article. I always feel that if you don't add anything, no one will read it. But the story has reached the point of clan war. Forgive me for being stupid, but I can't think of any follow-up plot. Usually when you come out, it will end here, and writing it down will be verbose, unless something happens again, such as jealousy, which is the only possibility in this story, but you can also break into the demon clan to increase the life of the book. But what about "Cheng Yaojin"? (Zemo Rossil) Kill or... In short, it is best to re-read the article, sort it out, and carefully consider the subsequent plot. After all, this article is only in the middle, so it is best to add more plots. In short, write as exciting as you can. I recommend "Luska Demon God", which is also a fantasy series, for your reference. This kind of article is very popular.
Introduction. . . . It doesn't matter whether you change it or not. . . If you want to change it, just change the last sentence. .
If the article were to be revised, the nonsense in the first half would be what is in the brackets. . It's best to delete it. .
But I may not come here often in the future. . . It was also secretly today. . .
In case there is no message of encouragement. . You should continue to work hard. . .
To be honest, the saving grace of this article is that the beginning is very engaging, but the plot of the story is not vivid enough, which is very disappointing.
It's completely out of touch with the theme. There are a lot of meaningless things that appear out of nowhere. The characters have become unlikable. Yue has become a childish child. It's really disappointing. It felt good at first, but it got worse and worse later on.
This... I really want to ask you, is this NP? ? ? If not, wouldn't Morosil be a tragic mission? ? ? If so, I guess it won't be finished in just a few chapters. While cultivating feelings, it should also involve racial grievances. In short, in a word, long live happiness.
Why does it feel so strange? It's too economical and not good enough. It feels like the key is being omitted.
It feels strange Two P kids, I used to like them but now I don't like them anymore
Sir, please work hard and update! ! ! ! !
No matter what, as long as it's not TJ, it's a good article, haha~
. . . . I didn't expect updates to be so slow. . . It can happen to people who haven't been online for as long as I do. . . It looks like there are still about two chapters left. . . Come on and update. . .
Dad, I'm not even 14 now. What about the introduction? I think it depends on how you write the article. I always feel that if you don't add anything, no one will read it. But the story has reached the point of clan war. Forgive me for being stupid, but I can't think of any follow-up plot. Usually when you come out, it will end here, and writing it down will be verbose, unless something happens again, such as jealousy, which is the only possibility in this story, but you can also break into the demon clan to increase the life of the book. But what about "Cheng Yaojin"? (Zemo Rossil) Kill or... In short, it is best to re-read the article, sort it out, and carefully consider the subsequent plot. After all, this article is only in the middle, so it is best to add more plots. In short, write as exciting as you can. I recommend "Luska Demon God", which is also a fantasy series, for your reference. This kind of article is very popular.
Introduction. . . . It doesn't matter whether you change it or not. . . If you want to change it, just change the last sentence. . If the article were to be revised, the nonsense in the first half would be what is in the brackets. . It's best to delete it. . But I may not come here often in the future. . . It was also secretly today. . . In case there is no message of encouragement. . You should continue to work hard. . .
To be honest, the saving grace of this article is that the beginning is very engaging, but the plot of the story is not vivid enough, which is very disappointing.
It's completely out of touch with the theme. There are a lot of meaningless things that appear out of nowhere. The characters have become unlikable. Yue has become a childish child. It's really disappointing. It felt good at first, but it got worse and worse later on.
This... I really want to ask you, is this NP? ? ? If not, wouldn't Morosil be a tragic mission? ? ? If so, I guess it won't be finished in just a few chapters. While cultivating feelings, it should also involve racial grievances. In short, in a word, long live happiness.