Peach Blossoms in Full Bloom

What a bad ending, you are so stupid~~~Why is Mao not a HE?

A mouthful of blood spat out on the keyboard, and the author tortured me greatly.

Short stories are often the greatest test of an author's skills. Within the limited number of words, telling a story clearly is the basic, making the story good-looking is the goal, and in the end, if it can touch people's hearts - it is success. Although the story is cliché, it depends on how it is written. The text of this article is fresh, and the author has completed the task of telling the story clearly. I especially like the setting of Su Yanxi as a bystander in the article, which not only achieves the completeness of the story from a unique perspective, but also changes the boring feeling that may be caused by overly simple plot development to a certain extent. But on the latter two issues, it did not do a good job, as can be seen from the comments of other readers. This is mainly because the author has not mastered the rhythm and structure of the article. Before writing an article, the first thing to consider is the theme, that is, which plot in my article do I want to emphasize and hope to impress people? Once determined, it needs to be continued and implemented. In this article, the relationship between the peach blossom demon and the monk is the main line. The infatuation of the peach blossom demon and the monk falling in love without knowing it is the key to touching people's hearts. The writing should focus on this. As for the poor cannon fodder fox fairy, his role is the same as Su Yanxi: to connect the main plot and intensify the conflicts appropriately to advance the plot. Please note that his appearance is definitely not to compete with the male protagonist, let alone express his infatuation in front of the female protagonist. Because this is a short story, any side details that have nothing to do with the main plot should be brief, otherwise it will make readers feel dragged out and confused - they will not know where their focus should be. In this article, the interaction between the fox fairy and the heroine is too frequent, which weakens the inherent emotional line of the article and naturally greatly reduces the touching degree of the ending. And if the words spent on the plot are used on the emotional development and character building of the male and female protagonists, will it make the article more compact? Some people think that the image of the heroine is not full enough. I suggest that it can be supplemented in her interaction with Su Yanxi, because Su Yanxi's status as a passerby will not divert the reader's focus, and the description of the heroine's character through her perspective is also more intuitive and objective.

I don't know where the human face is going, The peach blossoms still laugh at the spring breeze.

The writing style is good, but the image of the heroine is not fleshed out enough, the characterization is a little weak, and the plot is nothing new. But overall it's good.

Do you feel that the Lun family looks familiar~very familiar~=V=come to hook up

In fact, I rarely read short articles, mainly because I feel that short articles are more like snacks. Of course, some are delicious, but for me, they cannot fill my stomach. Adults seem to like to use scenes as transitions, which are a bit stiff and more like scripts. In addition, adults don't seem to be good at writing fighting scenes (but the injury scenes are very graphic). Many fighting scenes that could have been very exciting are omitted, which reduces a lot of visual enjoyment when brainstorming. The small actions of the characters are better depicted, such as Xiao Qiantao pinching the little monk's face, but the details, transitions, and sometimes the perspective are not controlled enough, but it may also be because of the short story. Of course, this article is still very good. After reading the first chapter, I still feel that there are shadows of Green Snake. It is also a enchanting fairy, a gentle scholar, and a handsome monk. Although the writing is good, I still feel a little regretful. It always feels a bit vulgar. But after seeing the twists and turns, I have to say that this place surprised me. Fortunately, it is not such a clichéd story, which makes people want to read it. The monk and the goblin somehow reminded me of Changqing and Zixuan in the Xiansan TV series. It's not that they don't love each other, and they're not ruthless, but after all, they only have one way to forget their feelings, but they can last for a long time in another sense. Qian Tao is obviously not that lucky, or is she luckier than Zixuan? Because although she never knew whether the monk had her in his heart in this life, fortunately, she did not need to waste all her life on him. As she said, "Even if it is him in the next life, it will no longer be him." Her love was so clear and sure, which destined her tragic fate. What's more, there is also Shao Zi. I liked Shao Zi as soon as he appeared. Hehe, I am a demon fox controller, let alone a demon fox who is affectionate and unconditionally dotes on the heroine. So when I saw Qian Tao die to save him, although I was heartbroken, I was more than happy - fortunately, he did not become cannon fodder for other people's love. In fact, his personality is more distinct than Kong Xiao, and his feelings are more persistent than Qian Tao. If he becomes Qian Tao and Kong Xiao's cannon Hui's words would have spoiled him too much, but his subsequent life may not have been easy - Qian Tao died to save him, which was definitely not a good outcome for him. He would never forget Qian Tao for the rest of his life. He was affectionate before, but now he is even more kind. It would be a bit cruel to let Shaozi miss a woman who never loved him for the rest of his life (I'm sorry, because I like Shaozi too much). I don't know how to evaluate Kongxiao. First of all, I can't be cute towards the monk. I don't know why. It's a very strange feeling. But I was attracted by the encounter between him and Qian Tao when they were young. As expected, I am a childhood sweetheart. In fact, I feel that his hatred for Qian Tao (?) Is not necessarily because Qian Tao is a monster. , More likely because of a kind of self-disgust towards himself and the sadness of thinking that he had been deceived. He knew that he had actually violated the precept, but he could not convince himself that he could not forgive himself, so he wanted to accept Qiantao to prove that he was a great person who could eliminate harm for the people. Teacher - There is no way, most people are still reluctant to blame themselves when something happens. He loves Qian Tao, but he is far from loving himself as deeply. Therefore, he is tempted to blame Qian Tao alone for the fault of two people - because he is determined that Qian Tao will not take responsibility. It's his fault. Many people are like this. Once something happens, once another person becomes the perpetrator, he will immediately feel better. And he is often more indignant than the bystanders and wants to kill him quickly - otherwise, how can he calm down his unpeaceful heart? In the end, Qian Tao died in his hands. I wasn't surprised, but I didn't expect him to miss Qian Tao so much. He was a monk and his five aggregates were empty. So what if he felt heartache? He could have told himself that Qian Tao was a demon and deserved his death, which would make him feel better. Of course, I don't blame him. Not every male protagonist has to be passionately devoted to the heroine. He just doesn't love her deeply enough. Know what you want. "But in fact, many times, not knowing what you want makes you happier. At least after Qian Tao's death, you can comfort yourself more confidently and ignore the unknown heartache. He shouldn't be understanding in the first place, right? His and Qian Tao's past, those young people pursuing blind dates and being hostile, all can only sigh that this is really a bad fate that will not end well. A silly scholar like Su Yanxi would be happier - indeed, the consequences of cheating in short articles are often better. Maybe in a few years, he will get married and have children to take the imperial examination. I just wonder if he can still think of the beautiful lady in pink with a charming smile when he sees the peach blossoms in the courtyard? It's a pity that the peach blossoms still smile in the spring breeze, but the beauty is nowhere to be found.

Hui Chang is looking forward to the following development... Actually, compared to Monk... I like Shaozi better...

It's a twist... There's something new...

It feels like watching "Green Snake"... Hehe, I like the setting of the fox demon~