The previous generation's love and hatred have already determined the next generation's fate. She thought she had finally escaped her miserable life, but through a twist of fate, she transmigrated to ancient times. At last, she found happiness!
Although it is two points, there are still some loopholes. I will analyze them for you part by part.
At the beginning, how did the maid know that she was pregnant? Don't skimp on this. And then there's that hahaha... It's better to give a tone, and at the end there's her laughing and crying, mourning the unfortunate fate of her child. Then when the maid gave birth, how could she give birth in just 5 hours? It took a long time. When she went to change the baby, how could a woman have the strength to move around after giving birth? Don't tell me she was a superwoman. Finally, there is the ending. You have been using an outsider to write this novel. How do you use "we" in the end? You should use "them".
If I correct the top two loopholes, the word count will increase by about 100.
It feels a little weird, I can't tell what's wrong.
Very awesome (I am no longer narcissistic in front of the computer at this time)
Also, I think it would be better to add some psychological descriptions.
Although it is two points, there are still some loopholes. I will analyze them for you part by part. At the beginning, how did the maid know that she was pregnant? Don't skimp on this. And then there's that hahaha... It's better to give a tone, and at the end there's her laughing and crying, mourning the unfortunate fate of her child. Then when the maid gave birth, how could she give birth in just 5 hours? It took a long time. When she went to change the baby, how could a woman have the strength to move around after giving birth? Don't tell me she was a superwoman. Finally, there is the ending. You have been using an outsider to write this novel. How do you use "we" in the end? You should use "them". If I correct the top two loopholes, the word count will increase by about 100.
It feels a little weird, I can't tell what's wrong.
Very awesome (I am no longer narcissistic in front of the computer at this time) Also, I think it would be better to add some psychological descriptions.