The Fierce Wind Is Hard to Cross [Rekindled Romance]

Hey hey here I come! Already collected it! As expected, writing is my comfort zone (laughs). As I read Chapter 5, I liked some parts very much, and some felt that they could be better with fine-tuning. Regarding the plot, I think if there are any mistakes in the analysis, the author can ignore them and just accept the praise of the highlights! My favorite highlights (1) The writing is very delicate, and I like the details very much. For example, the atmosphere of the reunion on a rainy night is great. From the thunder outside the window, the shadow reflected by the McLaren car lights, to the male protagonist slowly lowering the car window, the whole scene is full of cinematic feeling. I feel it is very graphic! There are also some good descriptions, such as the pure music and the faint smell of perfume in the car, which are used to hint at the past relationship between the two and make the emotions more ambiguous; the heroine's shoulders were wet by the rain, but she did not care, using details to show calmness and restraint. Why I like to read Xianyan is not only because of my sexual orientation, but also because I can empathize more with the relationship between men and women. In addition, this kind of very intimate picture can outline a lot of imagination, which is very satisfying to me. The dialogue style in the article is also natural. The male protagonist speaks concisely and his tone is full of hidden emotions, which can show his character. The female protagonist has a clear sense of independence and alienation, avoiding the "reunion after breaking the mirror" setting, where the female protagonist often appears a bit passive. (2) The background of the story is explained very clearly. From the heroine Yun Zhi's journey from temple volunteer to job search to meeting her ex-boyfriend again, the whole process is quite smooth, and the overall rhythm is also well grasped: the heroine's unemployment and social turmoil, the ex-boyfriend's identity change (online ride-hailing hahaha), and then family conflicts and workplace crises. The intertwining of these conflict lines makes the story attractive, and it will not be said that only the emotional line will be thin. (3) Regarding the heroine, I think she is a smart, independent, and somewhat alienated person. As a painter, she has the sensitivity and self-esteem of an artist, and she also shows a sense of resilience when faced with the difficulties of real life. Faced with being fired from her job, cyberbullying, and pressure from her mother, she chose to proactively find solutions instead of passively accepting them, which is great. The clues about the "reunion" with the male protagonist Qin Sulin are well buried. They don't get back together right away, but slowly reestablish the connection through misunderstandings, temptations, and trials. (4) Regarding the male protagonist, Qin Sulin's description makes me feel that he is a flower of the high mountains + forbearance + a mysterious setting, a mixed-race business elite of Chinese and English, currently driving an online ride-hailing service?! This is something I find very funny. He is not quite like a traditional boss. He is not overtly possessive, but has a bit of cold probing (such as the interactions in the car and the subtle probing in conversation). The interaction with the heroine Yun Zhi is a bit complicated and complicated? It doesn't seem like there's complete alienation, but there's also no immediate pursuit, creating a feeling of tug. [Suggested parts that can be fine-tuned] The following are purely personal feelings, and the author can consider them for reference. (1) Regarding the setting of online ride-hailing, I think that although it is interesting, it seems that it could use a little more suspense or explanation. According to the bartender in the article, "It should be a difficult customer." This is more like a casual guess. I think it is appropriate to add other characters' guesses, such as: "It seems that it is not just the customer's problem. He was also very unhappy with his family a while ago." Or "Something is wrong? Have you ever seen a rich man who would personally go to work? A person like him, even if he wants to keep a low profile, should have a better way." If there are more guesses here, I will notice that there may be an inside story behind this matter, and I will want to continue reading. Or another approach, using Qin Sulin's attitude, would be more natural, such as arranging for someone to ask him (or Yun Zhi ask him) in a certain scene why he drove an online ride-hailing service? He can reply: "Idleness is idle anyway." (Keep character version) "Don't you think it's interesting?" (Use a rhetorical question) "Sometimes, if you want to understand something, you have to change your perspective." (Throwing out a plot hook to make people want to know the reason behind it) In this way, I will feel that Qin Sulin's behavior is not only discussed, but that he himself also participates in the narrative, adding depth to the character. (2) Yun Zhi's emotional response to her mother's pressure to marry is relatively straightforward, but if she can add a little subtle psychological struggle, the conflict will be raised to a higher level, such as adding some memory fragments when her mother is putting pressure, such as: "When I was a child, my mother also forced her to learn piano and painting..." Or "It's not that she doesn't want to satisfy her mother, but she just can't obey." Such descriptions will make the conflict between mother and daughter not just stop at "pressing marriage vs. Resistance", but have a deeper emotional conflict. (3) Yunzhi can add some "warm but sharp" qualities. In fact, her character is already very complete, but she still seems a bit too passive and defensive when facing the male protagonist. If she can show a warm but not weak side in some places, maybe it will make her more attractive? For example, in the online car-hailing part, I think she can show ridicule, for example: "Are you so free? I drive online car-hailing every day, isn't the business not doing well?" It's a bit humorous but also has a little unintentional concern, which will make the character interaction more back-and-forth, rather than just a unilateral state where the male protagonist is pressing forward step by step and the female protagonist is defensive step by step. (4) Some psychological descriptions can be a little more obscure. Currently, some of the heroine's psychological activities are directly expressed. If a more obscure way can be used, it will increase the sense of substitution. For example, the original one: "She looked at him, feeling a little overwhelmed." It can be fine-tuned to "She looked down at the toes of her shoes and buttoned the corners of her clothes unconsciously." Using some actions to imply psychological changes can also make the expression more delicate and add a little change to the overall reading. [Final chat] The overall reading of this article is very smooth and comfortable, and the atmosphere is also well established. If you can add a little more emotional description and psychological activities of the characters, it may make the whole readability more immersive. Thank you to the author for the above! I wish you may your thoughts flow freely and be happy every day!