~~Self-serving flirt x indulgently doting~~
~~Childhood sweethearts + age gap~~
After her startup failed, she wanted to find someone to help her unwind, preferably someone who could guide her out of her predicament. After thinking it over, her childhood friend was still the best choice.
He was handsome, levelheaded, extraordinary, and rich, with a good temper to boot.
Most importantly, he knew how to reward and punish fairly. He could be mercilessly strict when needed, or gentle enough to hold her on his lap.
There was just one catch: she'd dated her childhood friend before, and they'd broken up.
She tentatively asked him, and to her surprise, he didn't refuse. He only fixed her with a deep gaze and asked, "What do you want me to do?"
Si Qingyan had no experience either, so she used a rather unsuitable comparison. "Have you ever taken care of a child?"
Her childhood friend smiled. "Why did you come to me?"
Si Qingyan answered frankly, "You comfort me, and you're the one who makes me feel the best when we..."
Little Extra
Mr. Shi was a gentle man who rarely lost his temper.
Ms. Si often teased and played tricks on him, and he always seemed happy to let her do as she pleased.
He would even look up at her affectionately, as if hoping she'd slap him.
One afternoon, Ms. Si went to find Mr. Shi in his study and discovered him resting with his eyes closed on the sofa.
She tiptoed over to steal a look at the handsome man. She wanted to kiss him, but didn't dare, so she could only gaze at him for a long time.
When Mr. Shi finally woke, he punished Ms. Si fiercely.
She was indignant and asked why. It turned out he was angry because she hadn't committed to kissing him.
Rekindled romance with an ex | Reunion after a long separation | Flirtatious push and pull | A blend of spice and sweetness | Older man spoils younger woman
1v1, both are each other's first, happy ending, six-year age gap
Theme: A broken heart is healed and made whole by love
I've been feeling very anxious lately. After reading this article, I was soothed by the words in it. It rubbed my heart into submission, and I was able to fall asleep beautifully again [pink heart]
I don't know why, but my wife's words make me feel light but warm at the same time. I like it so much 💪 💪
I've been too busy lately and finally got around to it. It's beautiful!
Hi, here I am. I have collected and finished reading the first three chapters. After all, the first three chapters are an important beginning to attract new readers. Here are some small suggestions that I think are great. If the interpretation is wrong, the author please ignore it and just accept my praise haha. [Plot Highlights] The rhythm of the first three chapters is quite smooth. There are several places that I think are great: (1) The heroine has a three-dimensional character. Although she was disappointed after her business failed, she also has the tenacity to face reality. She is independent and humorous. She is good at "breaking up" but has a delicate character. She is very flesh and blood. (2) Ex-boyfriend: Shi Yuanming's return setting is very natural. Did the "illusion of being watched" at the airport give a hint? The subsequent reunion scene was not too deliberate either. He was very restrained and allowed the characters' psychological activities to continue to drive the plot. (3) Funeral parlor setting: I think this is very cool. There are very few background settings like this in the early stages. Moreover, this scene is also connected to Si Qingyan's pastry skills, especially the scene in the end where she comforts the bereaved family with pastries, which is very contagious. [Fine-tuning suggestions] The following is a personal opinion, the author can refer to it: (1) The impact of the breakup can be exaggerated: the breakup of the male and female protagonists seems to have a great impact, but the first three chapters only mention "crying for three hours", and then the heroine returns to normal. Although this can show her tenacity, if a little struggle or emotional contrast can be added to her psychological activities, such as details such as whether there is an instinctive "escape" or "wanting to speak but can't speak", for example: "She clearly thought she had given up, but the frequency of her heartbeat was still out of control, like the feeling of being thrown into the ocean when we broke up... She subconsciously clenched her fingertips to remind herself to breathe." Or the male protagonist's reaction can be a little more subtle. Although he is a mature and calm image, which makes the female protagonist's emotional fluctuations more obvious, I think it can be subtle to make the male protagonist have a slightly unnatural reaction, such as: his eyes stay longer than usual, but he deliberately looks away / his voice is lower than usual, with a little unconscious pause / his fingers seem to be slightly curled, as if he is controlling himself not to do something, etc. Small details can make the male protagonist's emotions more intriguing, rather than "completely calm", otherwise the female protagonist's emotional ups and downs may be a bit too one-sided. (2) Some psychological descriptions can be more streamlined: the psychological activities in some paragraphs are a little lengthy, especially when recalling the past or self-analyzing, such as her reaction in the car when she learned that Shi Yuanming returned to China. Although these descriptions can show her state of mind, if they can be more concise and avoid excessive repetition, it may be more compact and the reading will be more powerful. (3) The suspense is laid out in a more structured way: The suspense in the first three chapters is currently mainly focused on "the return of the ex-boyfriend" and "the future development of the heroine", but if a "more tense hook" can be left at the end of each chapter, it may be more attractive to continue reading. For example, if the end of the second chapter was not "she realized that Shi Yuanming didn't want to recognize her at all", but a subtle move by Shi Yuanming hinting that he actually still cares about her, it might be more interesting. [Final remarks] The opening of the first three chapters is already very good! Big thumbs up to the author! There is a clear relationship between the characters and emotional foreshadowing. At the same time, the setting of the funeral home also brings freshness to the plot. I especially like the scene where the heroine comforts the bereaved family members with noodles, which is very impressive. If the emotional entanglement between the male and female protagonists can be more deeply portrayed in the follow-up, and the rhythm of psychological description can be polished in detail, this work will be very attractive and worth looking forward to!
This kiss pierced my heart.
Habit and indoctrination, oh oh oh, you are the one who dotes on your protagonists
It's hard for you to write, hard for me to imagine, hahaha
That's right, death education and physiological education should be taught to children early
Oh yeah, an old acquaintance is here to make a guest appearance, please wipe the Internet and become popular!
It's really sweet. There should be a detailed and in-depth version!