Big Brother Goes Down from the Start

Seeing this, I would like to mention my own thoughts. I started from Chapter 36 and have only finished writing the first copy now. It is obviously too long and the language is not refined enough. I often want to skip some narrative content; the other is that the heroine is sometimes too out of the ordinary, but she is over 80 years old, and occasionally feels that it does not match. At first, I did not feel out of place in the General's Mansion, but after meeting the senior brother, she became more and more out of touch. The advantages are also obvious: the role of the male protagonist is not stereotyped and is very novel; the heroine's daily life in the general's mansion is also very warm. If the author's writing skills were better, he might be able to write this gag more effectively.

This chapter is so sweet!!! Can we say that there is no meal replacement in the entire network?! I've been saving up for so long and it's fun to watch it during the May Day holiday!!! I hope Xiaoyu and Qingyun can be happy in the future!!!

The story is a very good one, better than many of the current industrial saccharine novels. But for a long novel, it is indeed difficult to grasp the later stages, and collections and subscriptions are also greatly affected. It can be felt that the pace in the middle and later stages is too fast, and the heroine's growth line is almost omitted. I hope you will continue to work hard and write better stories! Finished with flowers~

Why would a low-level snake demon know such a secret?

The most romantic confession of a sword is probably to give myself to you, a very happy ending... Reminds me of the time when I was not a poisonous woman (x After reading it, I feel that the overall writing is smooth and the foreshadowing is well recycled. Although the pace in the middle is a bit slow and the pace is too fast in the later part, the overall shortcomings are not concealed. It is a very good article. It would be nice if there could be more interaction between the male and female protagonists (mainly because I can't see enough hhhhhh). I look forward to the next one being more exciting~

Oh my gosh, I feel like the setting of Hao Miao liking Tian Yuan because she is the Five Elements Stone is particularly good. He is heartbroken for no reason and thinks it is his true love, but it is actually his greedy nature. Qingyun is so kind that I won't even kill him. No wonder Haomiao kept doing this when Xiaoyan went to heaven. It was Qingyun who could save his life. In this way, Xiao Yan is no longer a sword. He has been reincarnated for hundreds of lives and reborn from nirvana. Although he commands the world's swords, he also has human emotions. In this way, Xiaoyan Xiaoyu is really easy to beat. Xiaoyan went to the lower world with his goal, and he gave up the sword (the real body stayed with Qingyun). His talent belongs to Qingyun, and he is a tool sword without feelings (hey). His only selfishness is Xiaoyu's. Because of Xiaoyu, he began to love the world, and everything he experienced in Qingyun Mountain became his happy memories. The only "deviant" thing he did in his life was the three sword intentions before his death, which tightly entangled the fate of the two people. This is my only selfish intention, I believe you will come to me Still that romantic confession: The blue clouds turn into rain, the white hair is gone, I only have you

Is there no extra episode after Xiaoyu goes to the upper world? I want to see the follow-up of the two of them in the upper world 🙏 🙏

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.

Why don't you remember Xianyu [please please]?

Did the snake demon in front really have no foreshadowing?