For her, happiness is like the breeze blowing by her face and gently blowing her hair, but she can never hold it in her hands. All she can do is to feel this short-lived happiness...
Reader comments
Newbie, please give me some points and encouragement.
Very contagious,
I feel an indescribable feeling
I can see that the author really wanted to make his work suspenseful, but he used too many general pronouns, such as "woman", "man" and "boy". These words make people feel confused when reading, and they can't tell who is who, making the readers feel like they are in "bad water". I think that when the author wrote this chapter, he had not yet thought about what to write next, and the foreshadowing he made made people completely unexpected about the following content.
Sincerity is the biggest feature of this chapter. It can be seen that the author is very careful. It can be seen from many detailed descriptions that the author has seriously imagined the scene in the article. For example, "the sleeping baby gently frowned" is very well written.
This chapter is better than the previous one. The reason why I say this is because in this chapter, I can feel the general outline of the story that the author wants to present to us. The article was written in a very suspenseful way, which attracted me and made me finish reading it without even realizing it. Especially the part at the end where the girl ran out was very suspenseful. However, in the section describing the spread of the love letter, the language is a bit wordy and dragging, and needs improvement.
Very suspenseful. Fill the hole quickly! I'm waiting for your update.
Don't make me wait too hard. ＊＾V＾＊
It looks good, I just entered the situation, but it has not been updated for a long time, it won't be another big pit: (
It's very well written. Don't you plan to finish it?
Waiting for the sequel... Come on, author = =
Wow, it's been a long time since I've updated. I thought I'd left off. Keep up the good work!
Teacher, teacher, when will there be new information?
Newbie, please give me some points and encouragement.
Very contagious, I feel an indescribable feeling
I can see that the author really wanted to make his work suspenseful, but he used too many general pronouns, such as "woman", "man" and "boy". These words make people feel confused when reading, and they can't tell who is who, making the readers feel like they are in "bad water". I think that when the author wrote this chapter, he had not yet thought about what to write next, and the foreshadowing he made made people completely unexpected about the following content. Sincerity is the biggest feature of this chapter. It can be seen that the author is very careful. It can be seen from many detailed descriptions that the author has seriously imagined the scene in the article. For example, "the sleeping baby gently frowned" is very well written.
This chapter is better than the previous one. The reason why I say this is because in this chapter, I can feel the general outline of the story that the author wants to present to us. The article was written in a very suspenseful way, which attracted me and made me finish reading it without even realizing it. Especially the part at the end where the girl ran out was very suspenseful. However, in the section describing the spread of the love letter, the language is a bit wordy and dragging, and needs improvement.
Very suspenseful. Fill the hole quickly! I'm waiting for your update. Don't make me wait too hard. ＊＾V＾＊
It looks good, I just entered the situation, but it has not been updated for a long time, it won't be another big pit: (
It's very well written. Don't you plan to finish it?
Waiting for the sequel... Come on, author = =
Wow, it's been a long time since I've updated. I thought I'd left off. Keep up the good work!
Teacher, teacher, when will there be new information?
I still want to see it~ Update update~
What a big pit! ~~~ Update soon