I Want to Be Included in the Biographies

I can be considered an old reader. It has been ten years since Liu Ge and Lin Shiyi. Watching the author come along the way, he has written many great works, but looking at the new work, some words I have been holding back for a long time are really unpleasant. In fact, the framework and plot of this article are quite good, but I don't know why, but the author's writing language is more and more inclined to a straightforward narrative style. For example, there is almost no description of the environment, such as the solemnity and majesty of the first royal temple, the quiet and profound Taoist courtyard, etc. For example, if I write about the heroine's strong martial arts skills, I've written about two important fights so far, but there are almost no details of the fighting movements. In the palace banquet, the general writing method should be at least the first few words in detail, and the first few rounds of you and me should be written clearly. For another example, it was said that the heroine has a carefree personality and is not suitable for Xuan Jingsi. There were really no details to discover this before. The first time it was pointed out was during the recruitment, it was said through the mouths of the heroine and the emperor. I was stunned when I read the article. Is the heroine such a person? I didn't see it, it felt like a character was imposed. The sense of immersion is not strong when reading the article, and it is not easy to be emotionally aroused. Furthermore, there are too many psychological descriptions in the article, about various people. Sometimes half of the text in the article is psychological description. Is it really necessary? Isn't there something obvious like the lice on the monk's head, which needs to be explained over and over again through psychological descriptions, so that readers can't even understand this? For example, in the latest chapter, the eldest brother and the third brother are asked to accompany the male guests. Is Lin Jue's psychological description necessary? Who doesn't know that these are top dignitaries? He can't invite them now. Rather than spending time on this, it would be better to write about the previous sentence: Lin Jue nodded, "No problem." Change it. Similar Lin Jue looked happy and said solemnly: "I will live up to my sister's trust." Followed by a psychological description, not to mention that he was fine that day, even if something happened, he would have to move away. Can readers feel the emotions of the characters? Personally, I feel that sometimes when writing, you need to leave a blank space to let readers feel what they want to feel. After writing for many years, I have to constantly summarize my own strengths and consciously avoid my habitual problems instead of indulging in my bad writing habits. The words may not sound very nice, so I suggest you revise the previous chapters while writing. This will be a good story, come on!

Recently I went back to read the old article "Jiangshan Weipin". How can I say, compared with this article, I can clearly feel the impact of changes in the social atmosphere on the author. Feminism has really risen. No matter how good the previous Eleven was, as a queen, you can't interfere in the government affairs. The full text is based on the emperor's love for the heroine. Now the heroine can pursue her own career and say what I want to upload. Unknowingly, our thoughts are making progress, come on!

When I saw this chapter, I clicked on the details page, but I didn't find the tag "Parents". Oh my god, the text gave the heroine a chance to show off her skills in the government and the public. Unexpectedly, more than 20 chapters were devoted to writing about the bad things that happened at home. It cannot be said that the heroine was not written about how to stand out in the government and the public in the future. Plot, but there is only one out of ten. This one is only a side description and mixed with a lot of parental gossip. Although it is not a fraud in the copywriting (after all, it is just about the heroine becoming bigger and stronger), it does not meet the psychological expectations, and it makes me feel that the progress is too slow.

Come on, come on, but I feel like there could be less psychological description. Many people express what kind of person they are through psychological description.

Take care of your family and stay safe! ❤️

My family is the most important thing and I wish you a good recovery.

There has been a major change in my family and I have no time or energy to finish this article. After three months, the money you paid for VIP will be returned to you.

Hongmei is on the imperial court

I went back and read Chapter 38 carefully. It seems that the Queen Mother observed something. Looking forward to Taoist priest's journey to pursue his wife. Yuanyuan currently wants to be the Crown Princess of South Vietnam.

Is this Taoist priest the male protagonist?