The novel is split evenly between plot and romance.
Plot:
A different perspective on the apocalypse.
The heroine struggles to survive in the apocalypse.
She takes part in a contest to claim the highest position.
Her chaotic entrepreneurial journey unfolds as human civilization reaches a crossroads: will it face destruction, or leave Earth and enter an age of interstellar civilization?
Simply put:
A contest for power in a chaotic world, and a chaotic entrepreneurial journey.
A live demonstration that history is written by the victors.
Heroine: "Barge into the imperial family? Hah! Why would I need to barge in? I am the imperial family!"
The Earth Memoirs record: What the people of this era don't know is that the upheaval of their times is not only a clash of civilizations, but also a struggle between brain-computer interface humans, genetically modified humans, machine humans, and ordinary humans. The outcome will determine the direction of humanity's future.
Romance:
From the boy next door, to the refined young uncle, to the mad, depressed ghost of an officer (the male lead), there's bound to be someone she'll like.
Don't say the heroine is building a harem. When she's reached her position, having a few relationships is only natural!
Other notes:
This is the author's first novel. I revised it many times while writing, but still feel it has plenty of flaws. I managed to write the heroine's growth, but couldn't capture her bearing as a ruler or her broad-minded willingness to sacrifice herself for humanity. I'll keep revising it over time.
The story is set a thousand years in the future, in an alternate version of Huaxia. But based on the technology in the novel, it should really be set one or two hundred years from now. I made it a thousand years in the future to make timekeeping easier.
Setting: Aliens are known as Corrosion Beasts. They are alien creatures wrapped in membranes and dripping with corrosive fluid. I've made up a mountain of lore about them, which will be explained gradually in the story.
Weapons and equipment:
Lightsabers: Shaped like ancient swords, with solar-powered blades. Starting with the third generation, the blades can extend and retract, much like the Golden Cudgel.
Force fields: Similar to plasma shields, they can protect cities, buildings, and people. There are two types: one designed to block attacks from Corrosion Beasts, lasers, and the like, and another designed to stop physical objects. The latter has a wider range of uses, but is expensive and quickly depleted.
Light guns: Firearms powered by solar energy.
Light rounds: Either bullets fired from light guns or solar-powered bombs. I'll try to make the distinction clear through context when I revise.
Light screens: Essential for citizens of the Empire, they function like identity credentials and can be used for communication, purchases, and more. When not in use, they look like almost transparent bracelets worn on the wrist.
Flyers: Like large, protected skateboards that fly through the air.
Light cars: Vehicles that travel both in the sky and on the ground. They're expensive, so ordinary people can't afford them.
(A beginner's imagination. Please point out anything that doesn't work.)
(I'll try to update daily.)
(This is my first novel, and I'm not sure I can handle it well. I may revise it at any time, so please be patient. This is an experiment, but I will definitely finish it. If it doesn't work, I'll revise it a few times, but I'll keep going until it's complete.)
Theme: May we all have a beautiful future!
I am also from Xiaohongshu. I have a humble opinion, that is, you don't need to use your full name when talking, right? A: "b...". B: "a..." This feels a bit stiff and awkward. For example, when you call me the male protagonist, you can call me boss based on your personality or the identity of the male protagonist? Young Master? Or maybe call him An An or something, so the male protagonist doesn't need to call Ni by his full name, or even just speak directly without calling him by his name, because there are only two of them, and the reader knows who is talking to whom. [Glasses][Glasses] This might be a little smoother. The other thing is that after reading two chapters, the writing style is still relatively immature, and the psychological activities can be a little less meow, and the focus can be on depicting the characters' expressions and movements, although it may be more cliché to write "a quick glance" and "a glance". There is also the sugar sprinkling at the end of the second chapter (I guess). It is a bit stiff and not very touching. It feels like the words are right but there is no emotional communication. Refer to the previous point and it would be better if there are more facial expressions and movements. There is also the last one, this one may not be polite, that is, the names of the male and female protagonists are more realistic. The names of the protagonists are more niche or literal and may feel more pretentious. It is a cheating trick. Some names sound very pretentious, so you can get twice the result with half the effort [Glasses] But, the first book has 900,000 words written. It's amazing. Your first book can reach this level. I give you a thumbs up. I wish your book will be a big hit []
"Brushing mutton" is a big bug for the author~ Huh, maybe I'm ignorant, I haven't seen anyone else
Well, the author is great. I haven't read much. I'm going to talk about some things that I think can be improved. I don't know if I'm right. I personally think that there is no need to talk about some less important plots in a large space, which will drown out the key points. My personal judgment standard is that if it is not the core plot and can be summarized in a few sentences, there is no need to describe too much (my personal criterion for judging the core plot is whether it is related to the main plot or the protagonist's growth line). Those plots that do not make readers want to explore will only wear down their patience, such as the part where the protagonist returns home. Also, don't throw out some irrelevant information at the beginning. First, the information that readers can receive per unit time is limited. Second, if too many things are explained, there will be no suspense. For example, the names of the protagonist's parents, and information about the protagonist's friends who later died. Some background settings and world view settings of the protagonist can be explained as the plot develops. If they are placed in the copywriting, without relevant background, readers will have difficulty understanding and have no patience to read. For example, the function of the light screen can be mentioned in one stroke when the protagonist uses it. Because this thing can be completely compared to a solar-powered mobile phone with NFC function for the future world. It is not far from the reality of today's life, and it is not so special. Too many unnecessary explanations are like calling curtains "manual control devices for the amount of light entering human living quarters"... Also, try not to directly include general comments about the protagonist, at least not so that people can see it directly. For example, after only reading the first chapter, I can feel that the heroine is Feng Aotian in the author's eyes, but I personally can't tell what her character is, or what is the difference between her and other Feng Aotian... For example, "The protagonist likes money very much, and she would rather commute three times a day." "I work all day long to earn an extra three thousand yuan." This is a description of the protagonist's personality, and there is more room for description later. However, if you just write "the protagonist loves money" without supporting it with some relevant information, it will only make people think that this is the author's evaluation of the protagonist, not the protagonist's personality. Another thing is not to reflect the power of the protagonist by describing others as inactive. For example, in the beginning of the plot where the protagonist snipers others, I can ask this: Since the protagonist was using a lollipop to confuse the enemy, why was the enemy not prepared at all when facing a sudden target? In a situation where you may be eliminated by others at any time, isn't it the most important thing to protect yourself? If those people lack vigilance, but in the eyes of those enemies, the target they face is only one target designed by the protagonist. Note that there is only one here, so isn't it strange that many people pay too much attention to it at the same time? After all, in that case, efficiency is the best way to play. If this can still be explained by those people underestimating the enemy, then why is there no specific positive description of the protagonist's abilities in the following chapters? After all, if such a powerful person suddenly appears, everyone will be on guard. Why is there no further description? What method will the heroine use to kill the enemy later? Do you still need to confuse the enemy? But this trick won't work in that case. Also, what if the enemy wasn't fooled in the first place? What backup plan does the protagonist have? None of this is reflected. Therefore, the charm of the protagonist will only be reflected very thinly. Also, evidence alone does not stand up. It only describes the protagonist who confuses the enemy and wins, and then has the characters in the following chapters praise the protagonist to show that the protagonist is powerful. There are not enough examples. Because one success can also be explained by luck, unless it succeeds every time or multiple times. Maybe the author, Baobao, will think that the protagonist's strengths will be further described in the later chapters, but the problem is that at the beginning, the protagonist failed to leave the impression that "she is awesome". Moreover, the description here of the protagonist confusing the enemy is more of an example than a foreshadowing, because it does not involve a long chain of thinking. Just like writing an argumentative essay, the points should be close to the examples (the points here refer to the character evaluation of the protagonist, and the examples refer to examples). Maybe what I said is a bit incoherent, but I really hope that the author can write better and better 🤩 🤩 🤩 If the author just wants to simply share his creativity, then I am sorry for my finger-pointing. If the author has a need to sign a contract, I also hope that my suggestions can bring some help 🌈🌈🌈 I wish Dadabenben becomes popular (ps: I am from Xiaohongshu, and I don't mean to find fault. If it causes trouble to the baby, you can contact me at that time and I will delete the comment myself??'?'??)
The misuse of punctuation marks will not bring shock, but can be changed to repeated words to bring confusion and shock.
Madam, I didn't look back, it must be an interesting story. After reading one chapter, I felt that the writing style was a bit rough. The scenes and characters depicted seemed imaginable, but the expression was not smooth. The story told was like a straightforward narrative, maybe lacking some emotional and emotional involvement? Please don't mind if it's not a very professional feeling. Come on 😚
It should be more descriptive of the scene and less of the psychological activities of the characters. It should be written a bit like the first person.
It's from Xiaohongshu, let me take a look at 🌈
The name is too close to life, and 15% of the words are confusing. After finishing a chapter, it just feels like a running account, and the key points are not highlighted and the character's personality is not highlighted.