It seems a bit messy and seems to lack some sense of rhythm.
It is a good thing to write an uncomplicated story step by step, but unfortunately there are too many characters and the narrative is too messy, making it a bit unclear who is who. Many characters lack characteristics and are difficult to remember. The rhythm of the article is somewhat disrupted because of these characters. The description is good, detailed and fastidious, and the writing is also very smooth. However, the imitation traces are too heavy, and it cannot escape the general martial arts and ancient Chinese style. It is a bit mediocre.
It seems a bit messy and seems to lack some sense of rhythm.
It is a good thing to write an uncomplicated story step by step, but unfortunately there are too many characters and the narrative is too messy, making it a bit unclear who is who. Many characters lack characteristics and are difficult to remember. The rhythm of the article is somewhat disrupted because of these characters. The description is good, detailed and fastidious, and the writing is also very smooth. However, the imitation traces are too heavy, and it cannot escape the general martial arts and ancient Chinese style. It is a bit mediocre.