The Day I Fell in Love with Dazai

It's really an honor to receive such a great reply from the author. To be honest, the number of comments I planned to edit at the beginning was almost two or three times as many as the previous one. I wrote them while I was brushing them twice and three times, and I wrote a lot without realizing it. I was just worried that writing too much would make people read it easily, so I took the previous part's view into consideration. However, after seeing the reply, I still thought of polishing the rest before posting it. I think this is a derivative article of Fumino. From the beginning, I quoted a lot of Fumino's original text. It seems that my wife's original intention was to hope that Dazai in the novel would not be too OOC, so I adopted Fumino's classic beginning and many famous scenes. It's just that these famous scenes seem to appear a little too densely. It would be nice if these famous scenes were interspersed with Aohara Rin (I'm sorry for the typo before) and Dazai's daily relationship, and the changes in Dazai's attitude towards Aohara Rin were expressed through these different scenes in the process of getting along for a long time. In fact, there is another small point, and that is about Dazai's resourcefulness. I can see that the author wants to express his recognition of Dazai's intelligence, like the three little ones in the back who are in awe of Dazai. But except for the fear in Dazai's eyes among the three little ones, there seems to be no description of this aspect of Dazai. The reason why Dazai serves as the script team is that Dazai controls the overall situation and promotes the development of things in seemingly inconspicuous places to achieve his own goals. There is also Dazai's ability to achieve his own goals through words and obtain information from others. For example, he can obtain the information he wants through the barrage, rewrite some things through the barrage, or find out Aohara Rin's identity through the barrage. Although Dazai played a lot of time, Dazai's abilities really didn't seem to be displayed... So since they are all derivatives, the wife can write some tasks of her own to write about Dazai's testing of Aohara Rin, or Mr. Mori's investigation of Dazai and Aohara Rin's relationship because of the variable of Aohara Rin. After all, as the leader of the mafia, Mr. Mori will definitely try his best to use Rin Aohara in the early stage when he is extremely short of men, especially when he discovers that using Dazai can drive Rin Aohara to do things (I have to say that Rin Aohara's force value is really beyond the standard). Then there is the integration of the cursed world. The changes in the world at this time will definitely be discovered by Dazai. At this time, Dazai will investigate, and then slowly contact the people of the cursed, and get to know each other. Because the appearance of the cursed spirit began to affect Yokohama, would Dazai and Aohara Rin meet Gojo Satoru and the others when they were on a mission, and then become friends because of the plot contact? (Personal thoughts are for reference only) The if line is the same. The forced mode is really interesting, but the interaction between Dazai and the detective agency seems to be a little less except for Oda Tsukuru. Even if there is no interaction, it is just quietly watching everyone in the detective agency's daily fights in the dark. There is also the insertion of Magical Sakura. I just feel that Magical Sakura is not suitable for Dazai's world. After all, she is an innocent and cute teenage girl? It seems like the style of painting has changed all of a sudden. If the wife likes to have Aohara Rin take Dazai to experience a magical girl as a side story, that would be fine too. As for reaching the end of this article, that's for sure. I also hope that my wife's next article will be better (^?^)ノ

The first thing that attracted me when I saw this article was definitely the author's preference for Dazai and the cute cover. I really like these two points, so I carefully read the author's article from beginning to end with anticipation. Originally, I thought it would be better to comment on this long review when the author has finished it, but I thought it would be better to post it on another day. The following are some of my comments on the author's article. First of all, the pace of the article seems a bit too fast. The communication between people itself starts from getting along with each other without knowing each other a little bit, and then starts to understand each other, from stranger to intimacy. But the first meeting between Aohara Rin and Dazai was written a little too hastily. For example, when Dazai refused to live together at the beginning and returned to the container to review after the refusal, the sudden new character for him was an inner analysis, an analysis of the relationship between Aohara Ling and Danmaku, and a suspicion and investigation of Aohara Ling's origins. As Fumino's intellectual ceiling and the founder of the largest intelligence network, Dazai will definitely investigate the origins of Aohara Ling. The description of the initial period of Dazai's investigation into Aohara Ling but unable to find the origin should be able to better promote the relationship between the two. For example, Dazai deliberately put himself in danger to test Aohara Ling's reaction, or Dazai tried to test the limits of Aohara Ling's abilities. As for the difficulty in describing Aohara Ling's cruelty and preference for Dazai at the beginning, it can be written from Dazai's different attitudes towards enemies and Dazai when he usually goes out on missions. This can also be expressed through the attitudes and inner monologues of Dazai's subordinates and Mr. Mori towards Aohara Ling. Even if Aang Yuan Ling is on a business trip for a period of time, opening a forum among his subordinates can enrich the character design. What's more, I feel that judging from the force value of Aohara Ling set by the author, there is no need for him to be so polite to Mr. Mori. After all, in the author's article, no one seems to have a higher force value than Aohara Ling. If it were written that because Aohara Ling had been following Dazai, Mr. Mori noticed that there was a person with an excessive force value beside Dazai, which caused the master and apprentice to discuss and arrange for Aohara Ling, it would be better to shape the image. In fact, I still feel that Fumino's main game is a little short. When jumping from Fumino to Jukai, it seems that Dazai and Aohara Rei didn't get along for too long. The author doesn't have to write in such a hurry. In fact, Fumino can now slowly describe Dazai's temptation, Dazai's arrangement of the mission, arranging Aohara Rei to do things when he goes on a mission, Aohara Rei's efforts to break up the fight when Dazai mocks Chuuya, etc. Are all parts that can be written. Then from this little bit of daily life, Aohara Ling interacted and talked with other characters in Fumino, because I privately felt that the conversation between Aohara Ling and Chuya in the tavern seemed to have a shallow and deep relationship. They can slowly get along with each other over a long period of time, like when Chuuya came to find Dazai when Dazai committed suicide, but found that no one could be found, then Aohara Rei completed the paperwork for Dazai, or Aohara Rei's favoritism when Dazai was writing Chuuya who refused to admit defeat every day. And the author might as well write more about the daily interactions between Dazai and Aohara Ling, such as how Aohara Ling took care of Dazai when he was in the container, brought food to Dazai, and participated in festivals together. If the author doesn't mind after reading it, I'll continue writing. But no matter what, I really like this type of article, and I'm also looking forward to the author's next pre-received article.

I feel very surprised. In fact, I read the beginning and found out that I had read it before. I read it before I changed it, and then I stopped watching it because it didn't meet my expectations. I read it again after a long time, and I was very surprised. How can I put it, because I am a heavy control, so I inevitably have so many requirements when looking for articles that I feel a little bit, haha, which makes it very painful when looking for articles, but I am willing to do so. After all, I cannot accept the first person I love. I am really hurt (after all, there are hundreds of millions of copywriters, and it hurts me to read them). I was really surprised after the revision. Before the revision, I felt no different from other original protagonist stories. They all gave me a feeling that I liked him very much but actually didn't care much. In short, I had the feeling of original character > Osamu Dazai. It was like I felt uneasy that although I said I liked him a lot, in fact, he was not irreplaceable. Regardless of the promises made by the original characters, the feeling of uneasiness still cannot be eliminated. In fact, I like the original characters and my husband's CP articles very much, because to me, the original characters are different from other characters. I can ignore the original character of the character and love my husband unscrupulously, but... It is indeed too few that meet my expectations. After many years until now, I have only found two books, but now I can add one more, although there is no The ending seems to be a trap, but for me, I am very happy to feel the author's love for him. There is no kind of saying that he likes him but in fact he keeps hurting him. There is no such thing as liking him. It means that the whole world likes the original character, only the original character reluctantly likes Dazai, and everyone is sad and incomprehensible that the original character likes Dazai. It is really great.

I feel very surprised. In fact, I read the beginning and found out that I had read it before. I read it before I changed it, and then I stopped watching it because it didn't meet my expectations. I read it again after a long time, and I was very surprised. How can I put it, because I am a heavy control, so I inevitably have so many requirements when looking for articles that I feel a little bit, haha, which makes it very painful when looking for articles, but I am willing to do so. After all, I cannot accept the first person I love. I am really hurt (after all, there are hundreds of millions of copywriters, and it hurts me to read them). I was really surprised after the revision. Before the revision, I felt no different from other original protagonist stories. They all gave me a feeling that I liked him very much but actually didn't care much. In short, I had the feeling of original character > Osamu Dazai. It was like I felt uneasy that although I said I liked him a lot, in fact, he was not irreplaceable. Regardless of the promises made by the original characters, the feeling of uneasiness still cannot be eliminated. In fact, I like the original characters and my husband's CP articles very much, because to me, the original characters are different from other characters. I can ignore the original character of the character and love my husband unscrupulously, but... It is indeed too few that meet my expectations. After many years until now, I have only found two books, but now I can add one more, although there is no The ending seems to be a trap, but for me, I am very happy to feel the author's love for him. There is no kind of saying that he likes him but in fact he keeps hurting him. There is no such thing as liking him. It means that the whole world likes the original character, only the original character reluctantly likes Dazai, and everyone is sad and incomprehensible that the original character likes Dazai. It is really great.

The saddest thing in the world is that when you are looking at something that makes you happy, it turns out that... It is gone 💔 😭

Although I am still slowly editing the text, everyone's images are starting to become more vivid and three-dimensional. She is indeed the author's wife (applause should be given here). Although it may not be appropriate, looking at the wife's little bit of additional settings, it gives Dazai, Aohara Rin and other characters The more colorful inking, or the later filling in of Aohara Rin's past world, are like the process of slowly painting a simple little doll made of cloth while watching a short video with exquisite makeup, filling it with soft cotton, and working hard to turn it into a glamorous one. As a reader, I am honored to witness the growth and improvement of this book. I am also very grateful to my wife for listening to my opinions and giving me enthusiastic answers. If my comments can give some encouragement to my wife, I will be very happy. When the writing is equal, I will definitely try my best to write the short story of Dazai and Aohara Rin with my immature writing style, but I still can't grasp their characters and the way they get along. Please don't feel pressured by my comments. After all, as a reader of my wife, I will certainly support my thoughts and ideas. Please also believe that this article is constantly getting better and the data will get better (in fact, I can work hard to impress people:)) To be honest, I am looking forward to Dazai and As shown on the cover, Aohara Rin wore a simple and luxurious traditional kimono embroidered with dark patterns to participate in the summer festival together and became the most beautiful kid in the crowd. It is a pleasure to see two people like noble princes holding hands. Dazai and Aohara Rin with pigtails are so cute, looking at the two little ones.

Update, why isn't it updated? What I saw so well suddenly disappeared... 💔

Don't give up! Creation is a painful and torturous process, but we have been watching you and looking forward to a perfect ending for your story!

As expected, you have to search for it yourself to find the articles you like.

Uh-huh, it actually tied...! Now that the matter has come to an end, I'm here to remind you of the update. It's so cute wwww🥺🥺