She thought she was just an ordinary college student who got into a prestigious university by cheating during her senior year of high school.
But they told her that she had the power of soul and faith, and wanted her to be their savior and help them save their capital.
Intention: love, hatred and hatred for family and country
Reader comments
What should I say? I specifically read your column and the introductions of other books. It seems that your earliest book was written six years ago. It is actually not easy to persist until now. Although there is no complete book, and each book only has tens of thousands or hundreds of thousands of words, it is not easy. But to be honest, there are still some problems with your writing.
First of all, the first possibility is that your inspirations are too many, too mixed and unfocused, so you have written several books, and you have written a little bit about each book, but you have not been able to stick to writing any one book.
Secondly, there are some minor but important problems in the layout of your article. I have written novels, but I have only written a few thousand or a few hundred words. I have never written a long novel. My understanding is not very deep. This is just a personal opinion. Please forgive me if it offends me.
Regarding online novels, segmentation is actually very important. I read the first chapter of your book. In fact, I was surprised when I first clicked in, because I haven't seen a paragraph like yours in a long time. Each of your paragraphs is too long, and some sentences are also very long.
If you want to improve your writing skills, it's best to consciously practice paragraphing. According to my experience in reading novels, it is best for each paragraph to be about two or three sentences, or at most four sentences. It's best to have about two commas in a sentence, and don't make it too long. Maybe you wrote it on a computer and didn't feel anything, but if we read it on a mobile phone, one of your paragraphs would take up almost half of the screen. It looks very laborious and can easily consume your patience. Sometimes inserting a shorter paragraph is more appropriate, but seems uncoordinated. And sometimes one of your sentences is quite long, and it can be written in five or six rows without even a period. This situation is not good either.
Besides, the first chapter I read may be a bit one-sided. I think you are more suitable for writing a slightly shorter story. Like the tens of thousands or hundreds of thousands you are writing now, it will be almost complete. Don't make the story too long and cumbersome, and then you can't write it anymore. Delete as much as you can, and simplify and express it. Because I think your writing style may not be able to support a long novel with hundreds of thousands or millions of words. What you write is more like a flat and straightforward description, lacking the ups and downs of the plot and the expression of emotions, and it feels a bit like a running account. It is actually difficult for me to describe it to you here. Well, that's it.
Please forgive me if I am presumptuous! There is no malice here, I just want to make a suggestion in the hope that I can be liked by more people. Of course, it doesn't mean that you have to listen to my suggestions to be liked by others, or that you don't have to write a lot of articles to please others. It's just my personal opinion expression. If you don't like it, you can delete the comment.
Another note: I am very touched by DaDa's persistence in writing. I wish DaDa's hard work will be fruitful, and the clouds will clear and the day will come (=^▽^=)
[Prick-eared Rabbit Head] I finally returned to Gotham. Is it almost over? I feel like I want to return to the heroine's own world.
What should I say? I specifically read your column and the introductions of other books. It seems that your earliest book was written six years ago. It is actually not easy to persist until now. Although there is no complete book, and each book only has tens of thousands or hundreds of thousands of words, it is not easy. But to be honest, there are still some problems with your writing. First of all, the first possibility is that your inspirations are too many, too mixed and unfocused, so you have written several books, and you have written a little bit about each book, but you have not been able to stick to writing any one book. Secondly, there are some minor but important problems in the layout of your article. I have written novels, but I have only written a few thousand or a few hundred words. I have never written a long novel. My understanding is not very deep. This is just a personal opinion. Please forgive me if it offends me. Regarding online novels, segmentation is actually very important. I read the first chapter of your book. In fact, I was surprised when I first clicked in, because I haven't seen a paragraph like yours in a long time. Each of your paragraphs is too long, and some sentences are also very long. If you want to improve your writing skills, it's best to consciously practice paragraphing. According to my experience in reading novels, it is best for each paragraph to be about two or three sentences, or at most four sentences. It's best to have about two commas in a sentence, and don't make it too long. Maybe you wrote it on a computer and didn't feel anything, but if we read it on a mobile phone, one of your paragraphs would take up almost half of the screen. It looks very laborious and can easily consume your patience. Sometimes inserting a shorter paragraph is more appropriate, but seems uncoordinated. And sometimes one of your sentences is quite long, and it can be written in five or six rows without even a period. This situation is not good either. Besides, the first chapter I read may be a bit one-sided. I think you are more suitable for writing a slightly shorter story. Like the tens of thousands or hundreds of thousands you are writing now, it will be almost complete. Don't make the story too long and cumbersome, and then you can't write it anymore. Delete as much as you can, and simplify and express it. Because I think your writing style may not be able to support a long novel with hundreds of thousands or millions of words. What you write is more like a flat and straightforward description, lacking the ups and downs of the plot and the expression of emotions, and it feels a bit like a running account. It is actually difficult for me to describe it to you here. Well, that's it. Please forgive me if I am presumptuous! There is no malice here, I just want to make a suggestion in the hope that I can be liked by more people. Of course, it doesn't mean that you have to listen to my suggestions to be liked by others, or that you don't have to write a lot of articles to please others. It's just my personal opinion expression. If you don't like it, you can delete the comment. Another note: I am very touched by DaDa's persistence in writing. I wish DaDa's hard work will be fruitful, and the clouds will clear and the day will come (=^▽^=)
[Prick-eared Rabbit Head] I finally returned to Gotham. Is it almost over? I feel like I want to return to the heroine's own world.
Good looking, my type