Chapter 2
You've buried a lot of pitfalls, and you've got a lot of flaws. I can't complain.
1. You can read it again to see if there are any words that need to be deleted. For example, when Shui and Gu are talking, you can delete a little bit in that place.
2. The semantics are repeated. Shui said I can't see. Gu explained, you are blind. I suggest adding another sentence, because of what caused your blindness.
Otherwise, explaining it will be the same as not explaining it.
3. System, he said he would adjust it, but you never said anything about adjusting it from beginning to end. Either delete it or add it again.
4. Sorry, my mother didn't let me go out at that time
3. Gu's character design is not very full, very complex and diverse, which will make it difficult for people to see what kind of character design you gave her. It is not convenient to explain in detail in the comment area how you can change it yourself.
I'm here to find a chat for you~
1. An hour is two hours. There is a paragraph in the article that Gu cannot wait for so long after several hours. You can add a paragraph to spread rumors or go out to find Gu.
2. Your story progresses too fast, especially like writing an assembly line. You can add more small details to highlight the character's personality and make the character fuller.
Chapter 2 You've buried a lot of pitfalls, and you've got a lot of flaws. I can't complain. 1. You can read it again to see if there are any words that need to be deleted. For example, when Shui and Gu are talking, you can delete a little bit in that place. 2. The semantics are repeated. Shui said I can't see. Gu explained, you are blind. I suggest adding another sentence, because of what caused your blindness. Otherwise, explaining it will be the same as not explaining it. 3. System, he said he would adjust it, but you never said anything about adjusting it from beginning to end. Either delete it or add it again. 4. Sorry, my mother didn't let me go out at that time
3. Gu's character design is not very full, very complex and diverse, which will make it difficult for people to see what kind of character design you gave her. It is not convenient to explain in detail in the comment area how you can change it yourself.
I'm here to find a chat for you~ 1. An hour is two hours. There is a paragraph in the article that Gu cannot wait for so long after several hours. You can add a paragraph to spread rumors or go out to find Gu. 2. Your story progresses too fast, especially like writing an assembly line. You can add more small details to highlight the character's personality and make the character fuller.