After Running Away from the Wedding, the Sickly Beauty Became Obsessive

How to put it this way, this article is still familiar with the high start and low end. When the copywriting was not changed before, the first volume was really good. However, from the plot of the bandits in the second volume, I don't understand why a JQ was arranged to promote the plot. Xiao's character also felt collapsed later. . .

It's hard to comment, but I'll be objective. I really dared to add extras later. I didn't expect that it would actually attract some people, but basically no one watched it. This is not your first unfinished book. Some of the problems are not only related to Machiavellian writing. As for the second chapter of the extra chapter, it is obviously written from a God's perspective. It may also be that you only wrote half of it in order to complete it and put it later. I can't help but watch your updates every time. Don't worry, I saw it again from the recommendation list. I chased it, paid it by mistake, and I don't know how to get the quota from the editor. Since you can open v, please don't mess with people. Even if you can't write well, please write it in full. At least you have to respect your own work and readers, right? Really, the most outrageous novel of 23 years

I really tried hard to read it, but the plot behind it was really hard for me to accept. If the author is still here, I hope I can watch it. Maybe he speaks a bit bluntly. I apologize first: 1. There is no doubt that Da Da's writing style is okay. At least in my opinion, the writing style does not particularly make me drama. However, when writing about the background of ancient power and conspiracy, I still hope that Da Da will pay attention to the wording. It should be better to replace words like "I like you" with "Xin Yueru", that is, the wording needs to fit the background of the times. 2. Character creation: As far as my personal opinion is concerned, the character creation is very strange. First of all, the problem is relatively minor. Wuniang is so intelligent that she is almost a demon, but she is righteous for the sake of love. She gives in time and time again and then gets hurt in order to gain the emperor's trust. Although it is marked later that it is all expected, it just makes me feel inexplicable. There is a feeling that the author is not strong enough to make the protagonist stupid and forcibly redeems his respect. Wu Niang does have the heart of a teenager to admire her, but first of all, you need to know that she is an orphan whose family was wiped out. She has her own ideals and revenge. She is not a love mind who can give up everything just for her lover. She can fall in love, but the hatred between the country and the family is undoubtedly not higher than love. The portrayal of Wu Niang makes me feel that she is in love just for the sake of falling in love. She is obviously a really good one. The character is portrayed as an incompetent and furious love brain; Qilang's problem is bigger. It is understandable that the original idea was to create an innocent young lady with high martial arts skills, but it is obvious that she was portrayed as a confusing image of naive, stupid and weak in martial arts, and her martial arts also fluctuated to a great extent. She could defeat the powerful warriors of the Hu people but was defeated by Wuniang's secret guard with one blow. So what does Wuniang want a guard like her to do? I can understand what I wanted to write about Wu Niang recognizing Qi Lang from the beginning, so I wanted to frame her around her, but the emotional line was not reflected at all. Just imagine, the person you miss suddenly appears in front of you, you can't recognize her, but at least you will do something to make her go smoothly, right? But what about Wu Niang? What did she do? She didn't do anything. After recognizing Qiniang and taking her into the house, she didn't take any care of her. It's hard to judge this behavior as showing off love. First of all, the author also needs to make it clear that the daughter of a general is not the same as the daughter of an imbecile family. In ancient times, a daughter who could get into that military position would not be able to cultivate a favored daughter into a genius who knew nothing no matter how much she neglected education. What's more, Lin's father obviously did not ignore this. Would someone who let his daughter practice martial arts at the age of three not teach her cultural lessons? I don't believe it. Machiavellian scheming, housekeeping techniques, etc. Were compulsory for women in that era (an impassioned speech for studying history). It's fine to be ignorant of the world, but a brain that only believes in rumors will appear unique if you don't have eyes. Also, kindness is not the same as stupidity. A person who sees a killer threatening the life of the one he loves still hesitates to kill him. This is a narrative that makes people feel that she has no brains. I know that what I want to portray in the later stage is a Qilang who wakes up and realizes that he still loves her, and a crematorium who pursues his wife in reverse. But have you ever considered a question? Qiniang is the son of a general and is born with pride. It is really difficult for me to understand how she became a petite wife. I won't complain about the fact that a woman disguises herself as a man and no one recognizes her. Don't pretend that everyone in the world is a fool to highlight the protagonist's IQ, okay? And in the later period, it is really a typical domineering CEO and her little wife. I don't read romances because I can't understand that the heroine is the hero's treasure or plaything. Isn't the creation of the seven mothers and five mothers in the later part of this article a replica of ancient romances? Qiniang was kneeling on the ground and was trampled on. It's a shame that you wrote such a plot. This is not paranoia, it is an insult to one's personality, disrespect and insult. Some other characters, let me talk about Sister Lin first. Sister Lin and Sister Lin really have the same problem, regardless of right and wrong. It's not so indifferent. She and Xiao Tang have a story and their relationship is still unresolved. The Xiao Lin family has been friends since childhood. Even if people's hearts change, the friendship between young people is still there. No matter from any aspect, she should be more inclined to seek help from the Xiao family instead of the prince; 3. Plot: Compared to the above-mentioned character creation problems, I think the plot problem is bigger. First, let us sort out some of the story points of this book (I don't care whether it is accurate or not) 1. Lin's father is in jail 2. Qi Lang enters the house 3. The two meet 4. Play polo 5. Sister Lin goes on an expedition 6. Go south to find medicine 7. Undo the poison and get married 8. Escape from marriage 9. Discover your true love 10. Get robbed 11. Get married. In fact, from my point of view, the plot of this book is very nonsensical, and the machinations have a kind of beauty that makes me confused. First of all, I want to talk about question 1. Lin's father being imprisoned seems to me a very nonsensical thing. I know that great achievements cannot overtake the master, but what did Lin's father do? In the same sentence, the military attache is not a weakling, he knows when to show off his edge. When we met in prison, when Xiao Lin asked who the culprit was, he knew it was Tai but wrote Xiao. I really don't understand and disrespect him. Isn't this a typical misunderstanding? Misunderstanding for the sake of misunderstanding is really a speechless way of writing (either you describe that Lin's father was tortured in prison, his ears were ringing, and he could no longer hear clearly, not to mention that the prison was extremely dank, and the injury could not be taken care of well, so he had already developed symptoms. The inflammation was festering. Father Lin's face was pale, his forehead was hot, and his mind was a little confused. It was ridiculous that "Master, who harmed you?" Was actually heard as "Master, who can you trust?" Father Lin raised his arm tremblingly, and caught it. The blood in the room made a small mark on Qiniang's palm, so that the background is fuller and at least the misunderstanding is more reasonable.) 2. I really want to say, treasure, in ancient times, there was a household registration system, and the household registration system had a face, and officials reviewed the body. Do you really think that women in the boudoir have no place of origin, and women in the boudoir also have to be naturalized and called eunuchs. Don't be like a woman in the boudoir who can't leave the house and you can feel that no one in the world except the Lin family recognizes her, okay? After all, the description of a woman disguising herself as a man is very thoughtful. Don't think that just by corseting your chest and changing into men's clothes, it will be perfect, okay? (I used to be a loyal audience for articles about women disguising themselves as men, and I deeply hate this kind of behavior where no one recognizes the disguise even though they are not well disguised.) If you want to describe a woman disguising herself as a man, my suggestion here is that in addition to necessary conditions such as clothing and corseting, please wear makeup. Thank you (Sister Lin) It doesn't make sense to be able to disguise herself (Lin Mei doesn't know or can't learn it), 3. Two people meet: The dog hole here is a big worry for me, I'm really a little speechless, the dog hole is being drilled back and forth by the face, Wu Niang doesn't want to see it, so why not seal the dog hole, just to forcefully advance the plot? I really hope the author can reflect on whether his plot design is appropriate. Internet articles are also articles, and their plot development still needs to be scrutinized. 4. Polo also has a lot of questions here. I am really too lazy to type it. The emperor and ministers who have read countless articles can't recognize that she is a woman? Also, in ancient times, there was a strict hierarchy. If you look up to someone, it would be a stain on your holy face. How could you live to finish playing polo? If I remember correctly, you wrote it clearly. This world is supported by the women of the Xiao family with the help of the emperor. According to my understanding, all the power in the world lies in her two hands. The emperor has no power yet, but he only sticks to some righteousness. How can the prince be so virtuous? I can only say that his persecution of Wuniang is nonsense, as ridiculous as the cat and dog he raised suddenly scratched himself to death. If you really want to write about the political layout, you can't give the Xiao family two such great rights. At least Xiao Wu can't have complete auxiliary power. You have to write about Xiao Wu mediating among the ministers, using eloquent words and a sweet sword. I understand that the defeat is like a mountain, but don't you think the attitude of the Jinling Guard who confiscated the family changed too quickly? The capital is a land of arrogance, but there are still officials and prison history. It is very useful for them to criticize people, but if you don't write it, it will be very thin (the plot is full of problems except for the emotional line, and I really should give you a thumbs up) 4. Machiavellian background: I can't say that this background has no problems, I can only say that it is full of problems. I can see that you really want to write a normal plot, but everyone is really brainless. You should study hard. I am really too lazy to type. I hope my wife can write better and better!

Damn, is it possible for you to rewrite your story after escaping from marriage?

I've finished reading it. The writing was pretty good, but the ending felt a bit rushed. Some plot points were just brushed off, and I didn't even get enough of it! (Very loud

Who drinks it? Why don't you write it?

The consequences of not sleeping in the middle of the night if you buy the full text

So who is drinking it? I won't rest in peace

Overall it's pretty good. It does need to be better written at the beginning, but the ending is a bit rushed, but the flaws are not outweighed.

First, sprinkle flowers! Congratulations on the completion~ Secondly, although the back is slightly lacking, the front is really exciting! Remarkable. Finally, I look forward to your advance receipt!