Well, I finished reading it in one go
After only reading the first chapter, I felt that the heroine was a Mary Sue. There were too many descriptions after that, so I picked some and looked at them. They were too complicated.
The plot doesn't progress much, and I always feel that there are very few dialogues. It's always about what happened to the heroine. It would be better to introduce some things around her properly.
I recommend wrapping the dialogue in new lines and paying attention to the layout. Squeezing them all together will make people feel visual fatigue.
The style is a bit on the opposite side, not very clear, and always feels uninteresting.
Regarding symbols, do not use ".". Since it is an article (Chinese), just use ",," to separate it.
Regarding the word count, except for the first one or two chapters, it is better to have 3/4 thousand words for the rest.
I took a look at your column and found two articles, both recent and less than 10,000 words.
I have just become a writer and am a junior high school student. I don't have enough time, so I recommend writing a new article (I have enough experience here)
Also, don't write dark articles casually
Sorry, I just took a look and found out that you have abandoned the pit. If you have abandoned the pit, I think it is better to lock it up.
You must be a newbie~~~~The characters are a bit broken, and there are too many descriptions of the environment, which seems cumbersome. It would be better if the text was streamlined and to the point. Everyone has their first time, so take your time. Now that you have dug a hole, work hard to fill it. Come on, you are very courageous.
Very slow update, update soon!! 11111
Well, I finished reading it in one go After only reading the first chapter, I felt that the heroine was a Mary Sue. There were too many descriptions after that, so I picked some and looked at them. They were too complicated. The plot doesn't progress much, and I always feel that there are very few dialogues. It's always about what happened to the heroine. It would be better to introduce some things around her properly. I recommend wrapping the dialogue in new lines and paying attention to the layout. Squeezing them all together will make people feel visual fatigue. The style is a bit on the opposite side, not very clear, and always feels uninteresting. Regarding symbols, do not use ".". Since it is an article (Chinese), just use ",," to separate it. Regarding the word count, except for the first one or two chapters, it is better to have 3/4 thousand words for the rest. I took a look at your column and found two articles, both recent and less than 10,000 words. I have just become a writer and am a junior high school student. I don't have enough time, so I recommend writing a new article (I have enough experience here) Also, don't write dark articles casually Sorry, I just took a look and found out that you have abandoned the pit. If you have abandoned the pit, I think it is better to lock it up.
You must be a newbie~~~~The characters are a bit broken, and there are too many descriptions of the environment, which seems cumbersome. It would be better if the text was streamlined and to the point. Everyone has their first time, so take your time. Now that you have dug a hole, work hard to fill it. Come on, you are very courageous.