Delight in You

This part of deep diving is a bit awkward First of all, this is a foreign tour group. How can it be so easy to find an "understanding" Chinese aunt to fan the flames and encourage others? And the accent of the Northeastern dialect is not immediately recognizable as Nagada people. How long does it take to hear the last sentence?? Secondly, if I remember correctly, not just anyone can go deep diving, right? It seems like you need a diving certificate, right? There was an indoor simulated deep dive in the swimming pool of the gym I used to go to. It was only about 10 meters deep and was used for training for those who were taking the junior diving certification exam. Did the aunt go down to the deep dive in this chapter? (You don't have any basic medical conditions or certificates?) What's the depth of the scene you described? That kind of tourist "deep dive" of less than 10 meters? It feels quite strange here. Third. The plot is too awkward. This is very strange. The author must have checked the 5-day reissue. . If you are more careful, you should be able to find that 5 days is for the replacement of a passport lost in China. It usually takes 30 days for a passport lost overseas. It usually takes 15 days to replace a travel permit for returning to the country. Your overseas 5-day expedited service. . . . In fact, seeing this, the emotional line seems to be getting worse and worse. Why does Fang have such a relationship with Wu? Why did Wu seem so concerned about Fang in the front, but so awkward and indifferent here? Fang was in the hospital before, and Wu Dou knew to go see him. Why did he let Fang go to Thailand alone now? Is there any inconsistency in the author's character design here, or is Wu's transformation "appointed" in order to highlight Mr. Yi's performance? And the relationship between Fang and Yi here is also very confusing. Viewed from the front, Yi is portrayed as having put it down, but picked it up again. Then he asked the two of them to get married so that he could let go completely. However, due to Wu's "personality reversal", Yi suddenly couldn't let go. Has the author thought about the characters' personalities? Does the character's personality and behavioral logic change at any time according to the author's preferences? Does the author feel that because he has determined the relationship between Yi and Fang, especially that he wants to place Fang in the triangle vortex, he arbitrarily adjusts the characters of Yi and Wu to "force forward" this emotional line?

This chapter is a bit confusing, and the plot seems to be confusing. The beginning of the article talks about the chaotic check-in of a tour group. At the end of the article, news about a tour group is added. In the middle, it is also mentioned that Yi is looking for a one-day tour group. These three, especially the one-day tour group in the middle, only have a few words. If you miss it, it is easy to misunderstand that they have joined the previous group. . . It's better to add later, there is news about easy-to-find one-day tour groups. Because the last sentence ignores the main sentence, and the group used is still a tour group, not a one-day tour group, it is easy to be confused.

Some of the language is not fluent. After reading several chapters, I found that the author likes to omit subjects, especially in sentences involving multiple people. Although I can understand it, it still feels a bit awkward. A few questions here The most basic thing is that using mobile phone notifications to create "accidental encounters" is actually not very logical. After all, I was able to get a copy of someone else's marriage certificate in the previous article, so why can't I find out someone else's honeymoon destination here? 80% Of the people around you will know this, right? Let's not talk about the obvious and bizarre going to two places. Since the plot needs to be determined by the emperor, forget it. But this Yi can also hit the top, which is a bit too bizarre. It might as well have been that Yi had found out about the two people's movements, but it was probably just through people on Fang's side that he was going to Thailand, and then he followed them and found that Wu didn't go. This would be more reasonable. After all, it is unlikely that he would say it publicly after he had just gotten married and had a honeymoon separately, so it was more reasonable for him to pursue the woman based on the superficial information and expose it somewhere. In addition, given the popularity of the Yi family, they are often in local newspaper news and local headlines. They are all from C City. Doesn't the woman know Yi? A bit unreasonable

Sister Qi is a character introduced at the end of the previous chapter. No specific explanation was given, and her identity is unclear. She appears again here, which feels very abrupt. The marriage certificate thing is also weird. How did they get a copy of each other's marriage certificate? Does the requesting party have to hand it over? The logic behind why she agreed to get married is very weird. Yi and Fang seemed to have a relationship before, Wu and Fang also seemed to have one, and it looked like a triangle. But why did Fang allow Yi and Wu to get married? Just for that tech company? In fact, if you are married, a direct guarantee from the couple can solve the financial problem. As mentioned before, a corporate guarantee can also be used. Of course, since the article did not consider this issue, I will not mention it. But there is another question, is Fang and Wu getting married, just get a certificate so quietly? No drinks? How can you say that one is a female CEO of a company and the other is a technical master of Fengkou Technology Company, but there is no such content? Instead of embarrassing the marriage certificate, it would be more interesting to create a bunch of photos or videos of drinking and feasting, and then act awkward.

First of all, the legal person is just the "scapegoat" of a company and usually has no real power. The handling here is not appropriate, especially for technology companies, where core start-up teams such as investors/technical experts are in charge. Don't you know that in those days, the Sanhe masters paid tens of dollars for an ID card and specifically took the blame for legal practitioners? . A legal person is not equal to the person in charge of the company. The author should check this carefully. It is basically common sense in the business circle. Therefore, according to the general framework of technology companies, those who are qualified to negotiate with acquirers should be the core leaders of the company. Among the start-up teams, they are either investors who have invested a lot and hold a large amount of equity, or they are core technology experts who dominate the life and development direction of the company. However, from the article, it seems that the technology giant is this partner Wu. . . So in principle, if we look at it from a realistic perspective, if he can't do it, there is no need to talk about it, and no one else has the right to call it out, especially who is a legal person who takes the blame? You've got it all backwards. . In this situation, if the other partners and management insist on selling the company, and they have the technology and strength, it will not be the same as just leaving to lead their own subordinates to build a new team in a matter of seconds, not to mention switching jobs to major manufacturers or other companies. . . If it were to be realistic, other people could talk to Yi Bei about the pre-war, and then Wu and Mr. Yi would have a "one-on-one challenge" in the end, which would make the conflict stronger. Moreover, a slap from behind would be more effective. In addition, the emotional line is quite confusing The author has written three chapters, but the past background and relationship between Fang, Yi, and Wu are still not clear. Especially here, Wu's partner legal person said that they all know Wu's feelings for the other party - this is very strange. What does an acquisition have to do with personal feelings? What's the secret behind this company? Or is it that Yi Bei has told these people beforehand that this is his brother deliberately causing trouble for a woman? The author's explanation here is too vague. The ins and outs of the triangle relationship were not explained before, but here it feels even more confusing. It's already the third chapter. Instead of solving the mystery one after another, it continues to add some unclear passages to make it aggravating. It feels very confusing to read.

The transition in the first two sentences is not very good. Lack of subject and perspective. It seems that it was written as a whole and published in chapters? Is it causing the cutting problem? Still the same problem. If Mr. Fang didn't like Mr. Yi, he wouldn't say something like that, right? I will leave the room card at the front desk of your company - doesn't this mean that I will advertise that I slept in other people's guest rooms? Judging from Fang's personality and attitude towards the transaction, it is more likely that he put the room card at the hotel front desk - after all, there is no need to hand over the room to the guest after registering it. He can just pick it up next time he goes to the hotel. So this part of the process feels a bit wrong. Of course, from the plot below, we can also feel that if it were not handled in this way, the two would not have met in the hospital. But I still feel that this area may still be handled inappropriately. The two presidents only have one room card, which can be left at the hotel counter/let the minions handle it. They have to go into battle in person. . If you want to highlight Yi's concern, you can handle the room card normally: For example, Fang left the room card at the front desk of the hotel, and he went to the front desk to ask about it. The hotel staff said that Fang's condition was not good. Later, Yi felt uneasy and went to Fang's company to find someone, which made more sense both logically and emotionally. There are also some problems with financing. Mr. Fang's company doesn't look bad either. I wonder if the author knows about a financing method called secured loan. For example, I have a company A that needs to raise 100 million yuan, and the total assets of company B are 1 billion yuan. Among them, the liability + asset guarantee limit of all calibers has not reached the upper limit of the relevant regulations. Then company B can use its own credit to guarantee company A to obtain a bank loan. In other words, Fang's company looks very rich, at least not bad. With 20 million yuan in financing, if Fang uses his own company as a credit guarantee, he can provide funds to Wu's company. This kind of gameplay is very common in business (so it is easy for the debt chain to break and fall into pieces) Let's just say that regardless of these considerations, in AI, a popular industry, start-up teams still have their own patents, and they also have prospects. . The big manufacturers just throw money at it and eat it up, okay?! Will it be the turn of these outside companies that do makeup and the like to step in? And to be realistic, the registration system has also been implemented. Wouldn't it be better to just paint the pie and go public to make money?!! In other words, there must be a more reasonable explanation for the funds here - why is the relationship between Wu and Fang such, and Fang's company also has strength, and tens of millions, which seems not too difficult for Fang's company, cannot be guaranteed?? (From the situation in Chapter 1, it is obvious that Fang's company has the ability to compete with Yi, and the sales of new products are very good, and it is still a fast-moving industry such as cosmetics with a relatively fast capital flow turnover rate) Why is it that such a promising start-up with technology, which is supposed to be snatched up by big players in the industry, has to be so miserably acquired by an outsider with such pressure? Why is it that a high-tech enterprise with a road show that can lure several rounds of venture capital and even go public has such a negative result??? All in all, the logic here is very weak. . . Although this is indeed a method to create conflict and involve all three parties, the rationality is almost gone. . . Attached are comments on Chapter 1 The beginning of the article is brisk, and the narrative style is relatively concise, with nothing sloppy. But some sentences are a bit long, and it would be better to break them up. In addition, the switching of perspectives and scenes is a bit too confusing, giving people a clear sense of jumping. Although the writing is basically smooth, it still feels "stumbling". Especially some scenes are very short, just a few lines, and they jump a bit frequently. There are some logic/world situation issues in the narrative. Since it is a more realistic style, the logic is weak in some places. For example, Mr. Fang was made drunk by one of his employees. In an ordinary enterprise, I am afraid that few employees would dare to drink from their bosses. This is one reason. Secondly, Mr. Yi's assistant knew that the boss was sick and got in the way. Mr. Fang's assistant disappeared after seeing that the boss was drunk? Isn't that unreasonable? The assistant's responsibility cannot be so in this situation, right? Thirdly, since it is a hotel, and it is a very high-end hotel, the care for the guests cannot be careless, right? If someone is drunk, the waiter will not take care of him? The hotel lobby is also a crowded place, so a drunk woman staying alone will not attract attention? In this case, is it unreasonable to be "picked up"? Not to mention that since they are all prominent figures, there must be no strangers in the hotel, right? Don't you know someone like the manager on duty or the foreman in the hall? If a boss of this level appears, he won't be left alone and embarrassed, right? In short, the logic of this section is too weak. In addition, there is a character issue, Wu Xinye/Ye. After reading the next few chapters, it seems that they are not consistent. Typos?

The beginning of the article is relatively brisk, and the narrative style is relatively concise, with nothing sloppy. But some sentences are a bit long, and it might be better to break them up. In addition, the perspective and scene switching are a bit too montage, which will give people a relatively obvious sense of jumping. Although the writing is basically smooth, it still makes people feel "stuck". Especially some scenes are very short, just a few lines, and they jump a bit frequently. There are some logic/situation issues in the narrative. Since it is a more realistic style, the logic is weaker in some places. For example, Mr. Fang was made drunk by one of his employees. In an ordinary enterprise, I am afraid that few employees would dare to drink from their boss. This is one and the other. Mr. Yi's assistant knew that his boss was sick and stopped him. Mr. Fang's assistant saw that his boss was drunk and disappeared? Not very reasonable, right? The assistant's responsibility cannot be the same in this situation, right? Thirdly, since it is a hotel, and it is a very high-end hotel, the care for the guests cannot be careless, right? If someone is drunk, won't the waiter take care of him? The hotel lobby is also a crowded place, right? A drunk woman staying alone will not attract attention? Is it unreasonable to be "picked up" in this situation? Not to mention that since they are all prominent figures, they must not be strangers in the hotel, right? Don't you know someone like the manager on duty or the foreman in the hall? If a boss of this level appears, he won't be so alone, right? In short, the logic of this segment is too weak. In addition, there is a character issue, Wu Xinye/Ye. After reading the next few chapters, it seems that they are not consistent. Typos?