As the Years Go By, I Won't Speak of Parting's Pain

Reviewed by: ketchup Title: It's been years since I passed away, but I don't complain about separation. Article type: Ancient Chinese fantasy Copywriter: What stories must be told in the palace? Mix it in; The evil and terrifying demon sect leader in the world? Try it now; A peerless witch who brings disaster to the country and the people? Well, unexpected surprise. Cute sentence: Demi-god, half-vampire girl disrupts ancient times Comments: Copywriting There are a lot of laughs in the copywriting, but the last sentence is a little melancholy. There is no cover, and the layout is very neat, but it looks a bit bald, maybe because I am used to seeing colorful copywriting (sweat). Article The first sentence at the beginning made me feel ashamed. What kind of situation and background does the author want to express? "Heavy snow was flying, and the thick and endless white seemed to cover everything in despair. In a natural valley surrounded by several snow-capped mountains, a loud cry of a baby entered the darkness with the last ray of sunlight." These two sentences are very illogical in terms of sentence structure and language. Please modify it. After reading two sentences, I suddenly felt that the author was not very good at describing the scenery. There were some basic mistakes in the scenery that was to be highlighted. The scenery and background described were all omissions due to flaws in the text, and the desired atmosphere was not written as expected. In the scene of life and death at the beginning of the article, the author did not grasp the mood and emotions that should be included in the article. In addition, the use of words was appropriate, resulting in more sensationalism and less real feeling. He wrote something that is empty and has no substance, which looks a bit numb. It is not very good to use separators to divide scenes in the wedge part of the first chapter. In fact, making good use of words is much better than any symbols, especially since the author is not very successful in scene transitions. In the first chapter, the author changed his writing style from heavy sorrow to light narrative. Although the description of the girl is not perfect, it is much better than the wedge part. Starting from the third chapter, I feel that the author is getting better and better, each chapter is better than the next, and the minor flaws in the writing are gradually becoming less and less. But in terms of layout, the author should be careful. If possible, please break sentences appropriately. Do not use large sentences or large paragraphs, which will look tired easily. The comments seem to have too many bricks. I hope the author will not be BLX because of this. If there are any shortcomings, please forgive me. I wish the author will get better and better as he writes more, and may his wish come true soon! Ps: There are requirements in the store. Regardless of whether the review is long or short, it will be given 0 points. Thank you for your praise.

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Blue flower shadow. . . I hid this name when I saw it~ Keep up the great work

No matter how good the writing is about the female protagonist, when the female protagonist appears, the male protagonist will eventually change his heart, so I want to write a story about love that will never change. Qing Liang can be considered a female supporting character, but in order to highlight the good qualities of the female protagonist, the female supporting character must be made bad so that the male character will change his mind. It seems to go against the author's original intention

The writing style is not my favorite. I am picky about reading. I hope Xiaoxin can meet many readers who like this article.

We are also 18~ Come on -0- Waiting to be fattened I'm afraid of jumping into a pit 0.-

Is this martial arts or fantasy? The idea is pretty good Hope the following plot is more attractive