After reading the comments on the previous article, I kind of wanted to rewrite that bloody story, but did I delete it or put it in a corner somewhere (no, no, no, hold it back, it's too bloody, it ruins the image... Even though I don't have many readers)
I was very surprised to see it. The plot went from ancient times to fairy tales to future science fiction. It was amazing.
The writing is so in-depth that I can't understand it...
It means that the author's writing is good, but the ending is tasteless.
Although this is what the author wants to express, please forgive my harsh words: it would be better not to write if you write it. ——I refer to the paragraphs before the word "End" and the bunch of words after "Life"...
I think it would be better to delete it.
So that's it...
Damn, it's so classic…
This is a typical example of a time-traveling girl who takes too many handsome guys and doesn't know how she will die...
I always feel that girls with vicious minds would not be able to tolerate them in ancient times.
Alas, after giving birth to a child, someone still wants to... Not bad.
I read a story about a time-traveling girl who traveled to anime. She was hit by an electric car when she went out. She was hit and killed by a truck when she was resurrected. She was hit and killed by a train after being resurrected... The last time she was resurrected, she was hit and killed by a turkey... Hahaha.
I feel so ashamed that I don't understand OTL.
But pretty good
I think the previous ending was better, but I don't think it was a failure.
A very unique plot. The first half was okay, but the second half was embarrassing~
In the second half, the narrative is too confusing and confusing.
Short stories are short in length, so they should be short and concise, and the ending is particularly important.
But the end of this article, instead of being the highlight, actually became the failure of the entire article, which is really a pity.
After reading the whole article, I roughly understand the theme that the author wants to satirize, but this satire does not leave much impression on people~
The beginning was okay, but when I saw the end, I felt a lot bleak~
I was a little confused when I read the article at the beginning. I thought it was a sad article =v=. I actually laughed out loud at the end. It felt pretty good and I liked it.
First. You yourself said that this article is a science fiction satirical short story, but based on your own definition of the article - more than enough science fiction, not enough satire.
The short story itself is a subject that seeks to amaze. Often, in a few words, you can achieve a lasting shock that cannot be achieved by hundreds of thousands of long-form works. If your target is satire, it is easier to achieve this effect. But you set the target right, but hit it wrong.
First of all, I guess you haven't figured it out yet - what exactly are you trying to satirize? Are you satirizing the bloody and thunderous stories in today's time travel literature? However, as far as I know, time travel is indeed full of thunder and blood, but as the author wrote in the first half, it is full of literature, bitterness, pretentiousness, and self-pity, but it also contains beautiful and graceful writing (the key point is here). If I didn't read the following, I really wouldn't have realized that it was time travel. I really don't see any connection between this and the mainstream writing style of time travel today.
Satire needs to be pungent, targeted, and cruel, and it must be done exactly as you like. And the most important thing is that this strategy is often the easiest to slap people in the face. In the first half of the article, the author wrote a long section about Thunderous Thunder, but could not see the time-travel section, but in the second half, he easily dismissed it in a tone like a reviewer. What is the intensity of this irony? And the most important thing is... When I looked at the first half of the paragraph, I really didn't see it was the author's artificial mine. I thought it was natural... And then I saw the second half of the paragraph where he slapped his entire previous article - the effect was not "Oh, this is so damn spicy" but "Author... You hit yourself, does it hurt?"
Well, because LZ is very interested in short stories recently, I will talk a little more here. Please forgive LZ for being such a talkative person...
After reading the comments on the previous article, I kind of wanted to rewrite that bloody story, but did I delete it or put it in a corner somewhere (no, no, no, hold it back, it's too bloody, it ruins the image... Even though I don't have many readers)
I was very surprised to see it. The plot went from ancient times to fairy tales to future science fiction. It was amazing.
The writing is so in-depth that I can't understand it...
It means that the author's writing is good, but the ending is tasteless. Although this is what the author wants to express, please forgive my harsh words: it would be better not to write if you write it. ——I refer to the paragraphs before the word "End" and the bunch of words after "Life"... I think it would be better to delete it. So that's it...
Damn, it's so classic… This is a typical example of a time-traveling girl who takes too many handsome guys and doesn't know how she will die... I always feel that girls with vicious minds would not be able to tolerate them in ancient times. Alas, after giving birth to a child, someone still wants to... Not bad. I read a story about a time-traveling girl who traveled to anime. She was hit by an electric car when she went out. She was hit and killed by a truck when she was resurrected. She was hit and killed by a train after being resurrected... The last time she was resurrected, she was hit and killed by a turkey... Hahaha.
I feel so ashamed that I don't understand OTL. But pretty good
I think the previous ending was better, but I don't think it was a failure.
A very unique plot. The first half was okay, but the second half was embarrassing~ In the second half, the narrative is too confusing and confusing. Short stories are short in length, so they should be short and concise, and the ending is particularly important. But the end of this article, instead of being the highlight, actually became the failure of the entire article, which is really a pity. After reading the whole article, I roughly understand the theme that the author wants to satirize, but this satire does not leave much impression on people~ The beginning was okay, but when I saw the end, I felt a lot bleak~
I was a little confused when I read the article at the beginning. I thought it was a sad article =v=. I actually laughed out loud at the end. It felt pretty good and I liked it.
First. You yourself said that this article is a science fiction satirical short story, but based on your own definition of the article - more than enough science fiction, not enough satire. The short story itself is a subject that seeks to amaze. Often, in a few words, you can achieve a lasting shock that cannot be achieved by hundreds of thousands of long-form works. If your target is satire, it is easier to achieve this effect. But you set the target right, but hit it wrong. First of all, I guess you haven't figured it out yet - what exactly are you trying to satirize? Are you satirizing the bloody and thunderous stories in today's time travel literature? However, as far as I know, time travel is indeed full of thunder and blood, but as the author wrote in the first half, it is full of literature, bitterness, pretentiousness, and self-pity, but it also contains beautiful and graceful writing (the key point is here). If I didn't read the following, I really wouldn't have realized that it was time travel. I really don't see any connection between this and the mainstream writing style of time travel today. Satire needs to be pungent, targeted, and cruel, and it must be done exactly as you like. And the most important thing is that this strategy is often the easiest to slap people in the face. In the first half of the article, the author wrote a long section about Thunderous Thunder, but could not see the time-travel section, but in the second half, he easily dismissed it in a tone like a reviewer. What is the intensity of this irony? And the most important thing is... When I looked at the first half of the paragraph, I really didn't see it was the author's artificial mine. I thought it was natural... And then I saw the second half of the paragraph where he slapped his entire previous article - the effect was not "Oh, this is so damn spicy" but "Author... You hit yourself, does it hurt?" Well, because LZ is very interested in short stories recently, I will talk a little more here. Please forgive LZ for being such a talkative person...