This story will go on an all-text reverse sale on the 13th, the day after tomorrow. Thank you all for your support and company along the way.
Jian Ci stood in Mondstadt, watching the sky fill with dark clouds as the wind howled.
The enormous form of Dvalin swept over the city, leaving a shadow on Jian Ci's retinas that seemed impossible to erase.
A tattered newspaper was swept down the street by the gale, then vanished somewhere on a rooftop.
The NPCs in the road, indistinguishable from one another, stood motionless in the wind like wax figures, arms raised as if to resist the gale.
Jian Ci tugged at her fancy but hardly warm formal gown, skirted around the NPCs she couldn't interact with, and headed for the Good Hunter.
The Good Hunter was now just an empty shell. Sara, who should have been tending the shop, had disappeared as well... But even if Sara were there, Jian Ci might not have had enough money to pay for a meal.
At Teyvat prices, a single fried egg cost a full 200 Mora.
Yes, she was short of money. Very short.
Reader's Guide:
1. There aren't many Genshin Impact characters in this story.
2. Most likely, it just borrows the setting of Genshin Impact.
3. ...
Theme: Life is hard, so keep your spirits up!
I feel like the writing is pretty good, but there is one question that is not a problem, that is, will it be too depressing? For example, when reading an article, in addition to pain and sadness, readers also need to read about refreshment and happiness. This article reads very smoothly and naturally, and there is no plot where the protagonist's friend dies and the protagonist cannot be saved/the protagonist is tortured after being imprisoned. However, there is a slight sense of depression throughout the whole process, and there is no outlet for these negative emotions. There is no problem that the main tone is relatively heavy/serious, but because it is an online novel rather than serious literature, it does not have to make the protagonist kill Long Aotian immediately and kill the abyss and destroy the laws of heaven. Instead, the writing style and small details can be used to make it relaxed at some times (even if it is first uplifting and then suppressed), for example, the protagonist makes a friend who is a Genshin Impact character, or the protagonist occasionally complains about it. And if you want to build the protagonist into a five-star character, you can also add some contrasting personalities. For example, a serious and righteous police character like Sano, mhy will label him with characteristics such as telling cold jokes, playing cards, and being good at playing tricks to prevent his character from appearing too heavy and no one will take it. So far, this article gives me the impression that it's like taking the postgraduate entrance examination (I'm a dog for the postgraduate entrance examination). It's like you are forced to escape and row on the sea. The only place you can reach is Inazuma (you can only become a five-star character/become stronger), but you have a long road ahead and no way back (you can't go home). The boat is small and broken. It's slow (the protagonist's strength is low and it's slow to improve), there's no Inazuma License (five-star license), and you have to be careful about being struck to death by Thor's thunder (discovered by real-life players). In such a long journey, there are no life-saving supplies, no other passing ships, and no noisy Paimon. The protagonist persists, but I can't persist. Hei Ni Dao Zi's articles will all put on a sweet shell to trick readers into coming in and kill you. Madam, you are unabashed, you have no intention (crying) (pumping fists) (shocked) (starting to run away)... The above is my humble opinion. I don't mean to provide writing guidance. I'm sorry if it offended me. It would be great if I provided my wife with good ideas (showing my heart) (kissing my wife) (waving flowers and flying away)
I think it's great. I like to see the light of ordinary people trying to survive in Teyvat. I'm tired of watching Yishui's popular strategy or force max, as long as it's not too sadistic.
After the change, it feels much more reasonable. Before, I felt like I was somehow getting involved in a fight between gods... Feel like travelers might not be surprised? As for me, I am just a passerby, and there is no need to engage in industry. I and Paimon can have enough food and clothing. After all, there is no need to drag teammates to collect holy relics and weapons. Players are simply restricted by the system. Mondstadt's favorability mission can still be completed and delivered. If there is a real free world, someone should do this.
Really. I agree with the one above. This one is a little more relaxed. I really like this kind of ordinary, true story. There are too many single arrows. I feel like I have let down these favorite characters. Come on! I'm a person who can't guess the plot. I can only say that I really enjoyed reading this article. The capitalization is not bad. There are some articles that I can't stand, but they are not written in capitalization. You have to have confidence! Come on!
Stay true to your original intention, don't write about heartthrobs and maximal strength, write about real QAQ that would make me cry, I'm really tired of reading more, your writing is pure and clear
Yuhu Bingxin feels like a game
This article is really depressing... When you travel to a game world, you are not the protagonist. There is an inexplicable god above you who can control life and death. The NPCs around you have their own thoughts that can make you uncanny valley. There is also a real heroine beside you who always reminds you that you are just a cannon fodder... No matter what, I still like to watch and pamper the protagonist.
Actually, I don't like Max Max and Heartthrob. It's too cliche. I think the current direction is good... But just write what you like.
Laughing to death, this is Mora, not RMB. Speaking of which, sometimes looking at Mora feels like looking at Japanese currency.
It's great. Many people who write about female costumes always have a condescending feeling. The supporting characters are not just templates, they are also templates.