A Season of Pale Flight

I found the conversion between first person and third person that you mentioned. I didn't find it when I was writing it. Thank you very much!

There is no connection between this chapter and the previous chapter, which makes people feel very abrupt. The previous heroines always switch between first person and third person, which makes people dazzled.

Well, your writing is okay, but I always feel that it is not very coherent. There is not much connection between the previous chapter and the next chapter. I suggest you write some transitional sentences. Also, the story is a bit simple and bland, and it is difficult to arouse her interest in reading it. The above is just my personal opinion, hehe!

Okay, I like this kind of heroine, let me confess, haha! There is still a bit of storytelling in the previous one, but their dialogue is well written.

This chapter is a little better. I don't know if the heroine and Ji Bai got together smoothly, or if something went wrong after some ups and downs.

The storytelling element is serious!!

It's a bit like telling a story. The novel is definitely not telling a story, but writing a story. Some plots are suggested to be expanded and written. Although most of "Eternal Love" does not have dialogue, at least the details should be detailed. Personally, I would like to make the story of Zhou Xiaojia and Ji Bai more concrete!!