This is a very cruel yet beautiful story about youth and growing up.
He was fourteen that year, and she was thirteen. He proudly swore to her, "I'm going to become really powerful someday, even stronger than Dad, and make everyone do what I say." She laughed happily and tilted her head with a sly look. "Not everyone. Except me. I'm the only one who's allowed to be mean to you."
He was eighteen that year, and she was seventeen. A dainty silver ring sat on the middle finger of her left hand, and applause surged like a tide below the stage. Her features were noble and gentle; his were sharp and elegant. They had long since grown up, yet drifted farther and farther apart. That bright, passionate girl became an eternal distance between them.
He was twenty-three that year, and she was twenty-two. At a lavish wedding by the sea, he sang a heartfelt song as everyone looked on with envy at the perfect couple. But only she knew that the greatest distance in the world wasn't loving each other but being unable to be together. It was standing so close to him, yet finding no trace of herself in his eyes.
Can she find happiness? Is this a beautiful, unattainable dream, or the joy of finally seeing the light after struggling for so long?
She smiled faintly, just as she had at the beginning.
Come and see Ijo. Very good. Keep up the good work. If you have time, go to my place and give me some advice. Haha. A box of Ijo has a friendly link. Haha. Following.
The title of this article happens to be Nostril's favorite two-word title. It is concise and powerful. However, looking at the copy again, the first sentence made Nostril a little embarrassed - [This is a very cruel and beautiful story about youth and growth]. This sentence made Nostril feel the breath of Loli rushing towards my face... Then After studying the text carefully, I found out that I started writing it when I was thirteen or fourteen years old, so I calmed down. After all, I had a time when I was young, bright and sad, so I went on talking about the article. This time, I adopted the method of reading and commenting at the same time. It may be a little messy. Please forgive me for the author. After clicking on the first chapter, the dialogue in the first paragraph was a bit confusing. When I read it for the first time, I didn't understand it very clearly. There were too many short sentences, such as "Hula, the door opened, and Zheng Hui's gentle smiling face appeared at the door." "What are you doing? Slowly."] A punctuation error in such a sentence makes it difficult for people to know who is speaking. It is recommended that the author consider carefully considering the dialogue. The second chapter begins with the heroine's memories, but after reading the first chapter, Nostril always felt that this paragraph was a bit abrupt. It read as if the heroine suddenly ran out of the house to be with friends. However, after the first paragraph, the heroine's childhood memories were written. The time and space changed too quickly and the transition was not natural. The subsequent description also jumps too fast, and people still don't understand what happened after reading two chapters. However, the paragraph about Su Su when she was five years old is very good, and it is quite warm to read, and it captures the innocent feeling of a child. After three chapters, Nostrils was able to roughly grasp the main thread of the article, so Nostrils had a suggestion. Judging from the first three chapters, the writing style of this article is fresh, but too bland and a bit wordy in some places. After all, many readers of online articles decide whether to continue reading after reading the first three chapters. The author may consider revising the first three chapters to make them more eye-catching, especially the first chapter. Nostril read the next chapter in one breath. It was late at night, and the lights were not turned on in the room. I was alone in front of the computer, playing my favorite music, and suddenly I felt that this article should be read calmly. Starting from the third chapter, the article is actually getting better and better. Whether it is the author's skill in controlling words or the fresh feeling in the writing, it makes people feel very comfortable to read. The clean words paired with the cup of literary coffee in Nostril's hand still reminds Nostril of his own green years... What should I say? Although this article is very comfortable to read, it still has the problem of being too bland. Without some ups and downs in the article, it is difficult to attract people's attention. However, the good thing is that when I read Chapter 20, I still waited for Hong Guoguo's JQ. It is so cute, orz, I digress again... Generally speaking, I still feel that some of the previous chapters need major revision, and it is actually very good for the author to continue to maintain the writing style at the end. However, I feel that it would be better to pay attention to writing a compact plot, because the overall feeling of this article is a bit scattered. The above is just a personal opinion of Nostril. If there is anything wrong, I hope the author will forgive me. PS In the first few chapters, "someone is so and so charming" is used in several places. I personally feel that the word "Jiao" is inappropriate for some people.
Why. . . Luya is always someone she can rely on! I think if she calls her, the lure will come.
Review of "Obsession" Commentator: Xiaoyuan It is said that among multiple orders, the first thing I liked about my order was not because of the good writing or the attractive name. It was your persistence in not giving up that attracted me. To be honest, I admire people who don't give up. I'm also writing a novel, but I almost want to give up, haha! So I decided to take a look. Your copywriting is very good and very eye-catching. So I decided to read the text and learn more about this girl - Su Su. In the first chapter, Su Su's thoughts are undoubtedly revealed. She loves this man very much, and she is destined to marry him. Moreover, an Asian girl is specially introduced, so that people can already guess the plot. The man loves that girl. Some people may think that the author's special introduction is a missing point, but it also attracts us and makes us want to know whether there will be a reversal in the plot below. So I think most people will choose to continue reading the article, at least I will. The following article did not disappoint me. It wrote that the people she longed for came back, but they gradually became strangers. It reminded her of what he said when she was a child: I will become very powerful in the future, more powerful than my father, so that no one dares to resist me and must listen to my words. For a child to say that such a life was inevitably scary, she felt that they had been strangers since then. The younger brother also caught my attention. Why does he hate Susu so much? I believe you will understand if you continue to follow the article. As the plot develops, the girl in front appears. Her kindness to Su Su makes Su Su think that she has a friend. However, in a car accident, this girl's fox tail is exposed, and she tells Su Su that there is no real friendship in this world. After saying this, I had to overturn it, because Luya is indeed true to Susu! In fact, when I saw this, I also had a feeling: this article is also telling the helplessness and boring life of rich people. Take the marriage between Susu and the male protagonist as an example, because they are a perfect match. Brother Su Su finally married a woman he didn't love for this reason. Even Su Su has no friends because she is a rich person. Everything also revolves around money. The reason why the Asian girl approached Su Su was because she wanted to be with the male protagonist, but there was Su Su in the middle. She had to get close to Su Su and then find a way to separate Su Su and the male protagonist. Is she doing it for love? I can't see it, and it's not because of money. Even the so-called "stealing his daughter's happiness" by the girl's father did not mean that he wanted to marry a rich man and live a good life. Why. . . Generally speaking, it's just for money, and the simple Susu is just for love, but if you are too naive, you will be easily deceived. Sometimes the flowers in the greenhouse are annoying! Because sometimes simplicity is stupid! But time will make Susu mature! After seeing this chapter, I think Susu should be changing. And when you get married, a married woman should be more attractive. Besides, the male protagonist has already begun to have feelings for Su Su. After getting married, I believe it will get better! Come on Susu! Speaking of the love between the two, it is really smooth, with no ups and downs at all, but true love can only be seen when it is flat, right? So long live plainness! Seeing this has made me feel a lot, and I don't know if it's right! Since this is my first review, I apologize for any shortcomings! This article is well written, keep up the good work, Yiqiao! I will always pay attention!
The heroine's name is the same as her best friend, haha I'll accept it
It's a bit confusing. Doesn't the male protagonist have a girlfriend? Why are you engaged to the heroine again? . . .
Send flowers, send flowers, send flowers. . .
I'll just say... Why is there a button for the next chapter when I clearly selected the last chapter... It turns out it was updated... So I came to grab a sofa and have fun...
In fact, when I saw the cruel story, I decided to read a few chapters... However, the adult plot is very attractive, so I plan to read it carefully again after finishing the review. Leaving aside the content, can the adult's copywriting adjust the size of the character? It's so big that it steals the spotlight from the cover. In fact, I really like the occasional sad articles, which make people get into the situation. The articles written by adults are quite good. Sorry for the late review. Sincerely. PS: I will watch it again...
Any more? So looking forward to it. . .