She wanted to know how he would react when he found out she was carrying his baby. Would he simply be happy, overjoyed, or ask her to marry him?
She wanted to know how he would react when the baby was born. Would he shout with joy, cry, or remain calm?
She wanted to see him happy and surprised. She wanted to see how having a baby would change him, to see him as a father, to see him worry, to see him carefully hold the baby, to see how he would grow from an immature man into a mature one for the sake of their child and her.
She just wanted to see that side of him. That was all.
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It is difficult for people with this kind of personality to be happy.
It's quite plain, but it's real enough. There are many people like this in life. The writing is very good. This is a writing practice. It's not bad, haha! No more practice!
There are too many scenes and little sense of refinement. It feels more like the author wrote it to express his own views on marriage.
I am a little flower who receives posts from BS, so please forgive me for speaking here. I have also written short stories, so I also love short stories. Compared with long stories, short stories pay more attention to the presentation and compactness of the plot, and they also need to let readers know the meaning of the short story. I guess the author originally wrote a novel, right? Because this article is not like a short story, but like an essay or a short fragment of a long story. The writing style is very good, and the skill of depicting emotions is also very good. In my opinion, the shortcoming of this article is probably the plot arrangement. Bai Mufei received a call from her friend Su Qing and attended her full-moon banquet. Then she recalled that she had gotten pregnant for "him" in the past, but they broke up due to poor communication. She went to have an abortion without saying anything, so she is very melancholy now──The above is the outline of the plot. In fact, it's not that I didn't write well, it just feels like I haven't finished it yet. This short story expresses an emotion, but most of this emotion is set off by Bai Mufei's inner thoughts, so it is easier to turn it into an essay. Compared with the inner drama, the proportion of scenes and dialogues used to establish the plot is much less, so it gives people a faint melancholy, but it is impossible to remember the plot. However, as a way for the author to express his emotions, this article is well written. I personally think that the author should be very good at creating emotions when writing long novels written in modern words, right? But if a short story is to be exciting, it will use scenes and plots to tell the story, and the inner drama will fall apart once the rhythm becomes too much. This is probably the reason for the cold... Basically, short stories are inherently cold, so the author doesn't need to panic. Thank you to the author for being willing to comment, keep up the good work!
Let's take a look at the new article about Rang Yueda who gave up "The Wife" regardless of the consequences... After reading it, I just felt full of bitterness and helplessness. Maybe this is reality, the ambivalence of not believing in love, but subconsciously expecting love to come. As I looked at it, I found that the heroine was very similar to me. She also looked a little cold and lacked emotion, but she couldn't escape the fact that she was born a woman and her emotions always outweighed her rational nature.
How to say it. I feel like the heroine is pretty good at talking. . If you are poor when talking to your friends, why can't you talk to your boyfriend? Tell me this about you. . There won't be a male protagonist. Just a story about a woman and her men? Worrying about whether you are suitable to be a mother means that you want to be a mother, but you are just denying yourself. How can you know that you are not suitable psychologically if you have never given birth?
Many people have heard it, but few have seen it. . . . . . . . Classic