One Lifetime of Love, Two Lifetimes of Debt

Little Silver Sable, you were born to defeat her, right?

. . . My sister is going to cry... This feeling is a nuisance.

Oh my god, little Silver Sable, sister, please, please stop making trouble, okay? Go ahead and play by yourself, be good!

The first chapter is very good, but the last chapter seems to be full of writing. It's a pity that the writing is obviously good. . .

What I fear most is the kind of child who falls in love with someone and is unlucky...

I want to ask what is the background music?

The boy calls himself Luo Chen, [is it right for the boy to call himself Luo Chen] Only then (?) Discovered their house. I passed out [like that] on the road not long ago. Take him and his young master in for one night, just one night! [The following sentence is unnecessary, it makes the whole perspective of the article very strange] "Um... I let them stay in the guest room..." Touching her head, Yin Ye secretly glanced at her still leisurely profile and reported calmly. [Well... Even though the heroine is a monster, this sentence is a bit abrupt. Maybe some transitional sentences can be added to explain it to the readers and make the writing more natural. For example: "Um... I let them stay in the guest room..." After rubbing her head and trying her best to convey the visitor's plight, Yinye glanced at her leisurely side face and reported calmly. [The author has a bit of a catchphrase or something. I found that MS you are very used to inserting unnecessary words such as "just like that" and "like that" into your articles. Although it is a bit unreasonable, there is nothing wrong with it] [The author definitely needs to improve on one thing. Please note that most sentences are already one paragraph. I often look at it and think: "Is this sentence finished?"] Like: The boy claimed that his name was Luo Chen, and he was a school boy named Luo. He happened to pass by this place because he accompanied the young master to Beijing for the exam. Unexpectedly, it happened to be a heavy rain. The master and the servant walked around in the mountains for a long time to avoid the rain, and then they discovered their house. [In addition, the author uses too many unnecessary ",". Although sometimes it may help the writing style look more "mysterious" or "profound", if too many words are used, readers will feel tired and embarrassed. . . Just like if I write like this: She, gently, gently, bent down and picked up that one, small, sweet, apple. Of course, the author did not exaggerate this, but I just exaggerated a little to make it easier to understand. Frankly speaking, this chapter did not successfully "catch" my eyes, but of course it is inevitable that the author is writing about ancient styles for the first time. I hope that the author and all Jinjiang authors can encourage each other and become great masters together one day!

Throw flowers, congratulations on the completion~~o(≧v≦)o~~

= =The following chapters are locked, and you can only see them here. Come on, I will definitely come back to read them after the overhaul. Ps: I am incompetent in commenting, and I have no appreciation for ancient Chinese proverbs. I can only say, come on... Wipe away tears. In fact, I really like the big writing style, but I just don't know how to describe this feeling.

When I came back to read the food, I found that the article was under overhaul. Is the revised version I see now? I like it very much, spread the flowers ~ cheers up