Not bad, keep up the good work. . . Looking forward to a better breakthrough, the first time is not easy, eh. . . The plot should be more mysterious and make people want to continue watching... Come on!!
It seems that the vocabulary is not fluent enough. Well, how should I put it? It is to give people a hearty feeling. I think the smooth vocabulary should be more engaging. Read more works by your predecessors. It will be very helpful to you. The storyline should be more gorgeous and suspenseful. It is crucial to shape the appearance of the characters. You seem to have overlooked this aspect. Also, the names of the ancients are quite different from those of us modern people. I need to put more effort into this aspect. Come on, good guy. I will always support you. The process of creation is difficult. You have to put in a lot of effort, but you have to firmly believe that behind the hard work is happiness. I support you!
There is progress, come on!!!
Not bad, keep up the good work. . . Looking forward to a better breakthrough, the first time is not easy, eh. . . The plot should be more mysterious and make people want to continue watching... Come on!!
It seems that the vocabulary is not fluent enough. Well, how should I put it? It is to give people a hearty feeling. I think the smooth vocabulary should be more engaging. Read more works by your predecessors. It will be very helpful to you. The storyline should be more gorgeous and suspenseful. It is crucial to shape the appearance of the characters. You seem to have overlooked this aspect. Also, the names of the ancients are quite different from those of us modern people. I need to put more effort into this aspect. Come on, good guy. I will always support you. The process of creation is difficult. You have to put in a lot of effort, but you have to firmly believe that behind the hard work is happiness. I support you!