A powerful new force called K has emerged in the East and the West, balancing the conflict between them. Countless people speculate about who is pulling the strings behind the scenes.
The person Anya fears, the second son wants to catch up to, and Yor and Twilight keep a wary eye on...
Are Cook and his older brother.
"Anya, do you know what I'm thinking?" The first person Anya couldn't read was her classmate.
"Anya thinks Papa and Mama seem really dangerous..." Cook clutches his brother Sketch's hand and carefully hides behind him. Before them, the Forgers wear menacing expressions.
"The person I want to catch up to is an Imperial Scholar like Lord Kuchi!" The second son gazes starry-eyed at Kuchi, who holds a high position, and makes this vow.
Kuchi is a remarkable child. He seems to know everything.
The original story is unfinished, and this is very out of character. Read at your own risk.
Theme: Staying positive and optimistic
Hmm... The plot is a bit awkward, but the idea is interesting, and overall it's worth looking forward to. I have some suggestions. If your wife feels uncomfortable watching it, you can stop and delete the comment. First of all, the character design is not established. I have read four chapters so far, and only the protagonist has a vague character of "playing in the world, retribution, and cleverness". Others didn't describe it at all. Wouldn't it be too background-y? For example, new world parents, such as the white coats in the laboratory. To give a simple example, the protagonist proposed to form a club, and his father carefully asked if he would like his help or arrange a few capable subordinates. Adding more of this dialogue will show that the father is kind, thoughtful, and has a certain amount of power. He also patiently accompanies the protagonist's child when he thinks he is playing around. Secondly, some behaviors were unreasonable and were not handled well. What I'm talking about here is not plot arrangements, but psychological activities and the like. In other words, when a character does something unreasonable, you have to explain why the character did it, otherwise the reader will be confused. For example, when the protagonist proposed to go to the orphanage, why did the brother hide behind the curtain and eavesdrop? Does the protagonist consciously want to avoid his brother's request? The behavior of hiding behind the curtains is quite unreasonable here. But if you add some explanations... For example, the elder brother discovered that the younger brother had been secretly making some preparations recently, so he planned to investigate on his own. Or for example, my elder brother is usually neurotic, often stalking his younger brother, and refuses to change despite repeated admonitions. The elder brother doesn't want to be discovered by his younger brother, so it makes sense to hide behind the curtains. That's it for now, a bit long-winded, sorry. I'm not a professional, just some suggestions, trying to be as objective as possible. If you feel uncomfortable, just delete the comment~ I hope this article will get better and better!
Parents. Miserable He died so simply and hastily.
Ah, the content of the male protagonist's time travel seems a little embarrassing. . Just, even his life experience seems a bit out of place. . (What am I talking about) If you feel bad about it, you can delete it (?????????????)
I like it very much, please update it!