I'm here to find fault again~
Hmm... I think this punctuation mark should not be used indiscriminately. For example: you use too many "~", almost in every sentence. I think it is better to use periods for general declarative sentences. It is also advisable to use them interchangeably.
I think the heroine's personality should be more distinct, and she shouldn't be so severely hit by the "cold treatment by her adoptive mother". Even if she has experienced some huge changes, she should learn to be patient after so many years. After all, her life after time travel may not be better than her current living situation.
I find it a bit ridiculous that in this day and age, there would still be such a vicious foster mother.
But if the plot requires it, then this chapter is generally good~
I'm here to find fault again~ Hmm... I think this punctuation mark should not be used indiscriminately. For example: you use too many "~", almost in every sentence. I think it is better to use periods for general declarative sentences. It is also advisable to use them interchangeably. I think the heroine's personality should be more distinct, and she shouldn't be so severely hit by the "cold treatment by her adoptive mother". Even if she has experienced some huge changes, she should learn to be patient after so many years. After all, her life after time travel may not be better than her current living situation.
I find it a bit ridiculous that in this day and age, there would still be such a vicious foster mother. But if the plot requires it, then this chapter is generally good~