Happy Farm, My Way

... I read the article all night long and wrote all the words on my waistcoat wrong. My heroic name is OTL.

Finally I couldn't help but shoot bricks Overall, the idea of this article is very novel, and the story structure is also good. Unfortunately, the author does not seem to have enough writing style and ideas to control these structures, resulting in what should have been a very good article turning into this. I have little knowledge, and I will read it without wasting my money on buying V. Let me summarize the shortcomings of this article. First: running account In fact, the descriptions in many places are not necessary at all. Most of the cooking parts are just like the recipes that can be seen everywhere on the Internet. They are rigid and have no spirit. Put XXX at XXX time, and then add XXX and XXX... The recipes take up too much space in one article. Another part is that there is too much descriptive content. In fact, if unnecessary recipes, descriptions and attraction introductions are removed, this article will be more concise. Second: Dialect An article, regardless of whether the author is from Shandong or Northeast China, Cantonese or Fujian, must consider the readers when writing the article. Dialects are not impossible to appear. Sometimes the appearance of dialects can even make the article more interesting, but this article obviously does not belong to This type - there are too many dialects that make non-Cantonese readers confused. Although it can be seen from the writing that the author has worked hard to overcome the influence of spoken Cantonese, such as adding comments or half-Cantonese dialogue, it must be said that the author's Mandarin writing ability needs to be improved. Third: Anticlimactic Most of the articles are not as good at the beginning as they are at the end, because the author is constantly honing his writing style intentionally or unintentionally while updating, or correcting his shortcomings through readers' comments. Unfortunately, this article is not included in this list - the first three chapters are very good and even attractive, integrating the conflicts of a family. The scene where the heroine is excluded and isolated is well described and enough foreshadowing is laid. Unfortunately, in the later chapters, especially in the V chapter, these foreshadowings are not well used and even abandoned. This has to be disappointing. The open ending has been slightly modified, but the effect is still too little. Fourth: Character creation is not vivid After reading the full text, my impression of the heroine is that she was initially cowardly, but later became determined and good at cooking. However, except for the heroine's image creation, which is acceptable, there is not much written about the other supporting characters. The characters of several important characters are still not shaped, which is a pity. In short, if an article can be included in V, it must have its merits. The plot structure is very good, but the grasp of details needs to be strengthened. The above comments are purely personal opinions, but I still hope that the author can seriously think about the flaws I mentioned, and hope to see better works from the author. PS: Some people may say that if you don't like reading, just click the red cross. I have to say that I never leave long comments or even read Bawang articles most of the time. However, when faced with such a semi-finished article with ideal structure and novel ideas but insufficient grasp of details, I can't help but criticize it. It can be regarded as a kind of encouragement to the author. After all, I have paid to read the article, and I have the right to speak and complain. This review was written in a hurry and is also very long. Thank you to those who can read it. It's better to be embarrassed than to be shocked, 06/10/2010

What is this? . . . I was completely devastated. . . I strongly demand a refund

This plot is too out of the ordinary... I'm speechless~~ I can only ask for a sequel~~

I really want to give you a meal!!!!!

That's it. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . The message was swallowed

I saw this in one breath. It was so enjoyable. I can speak dialect so smoothly. I looked a little confused with my fingers.

╮(╯▽╰)╭. . I thought this wasn't serialized. . I was so excited that I didn't even sleep. . Sad. . Why. . Please keep updating. .

I really like to use Cantonese when I write, but I'm so tired from reading. Please translate it in Mandarin.

The cockroach hasn't come out for a long time.