Please visit the author's profile to read the fresh second-cycle version, Moonlight Over a Thousand Rivers!
This first-cycle version has completed its worldbuilding, and updates will stop as of today.
The second cycle improves the narrative pacing and characterization, aiming to provide a smoother reading experience. I also want to thank everyone who finished this story. Your company and comments have encouraged me immensely. The first cycle's awkward prose and insufficient buildup couldn't support the final battle, so I hope the second cycle can clear the story successfully.
In an ancient silk painting, the Creation Goddess has her eyes closed, blood tears at the corners of her mouth. Countless golden chains bind her entire body, and every vital point has been pinned shut.
"I'll find out who reinforced the seal, find a way to break their seals, and free the goddess Nuwa, no matter the cost!"
"Then I'll make them pay for their blood debt."
A fantasy adventure about girls, a story that loves its heroines, in an AG (All Girl) style. The protagonist has no romantic pairing.
The current serial is the first-cycle version. Most of my energy has gone into worldbuilding, defining the spheres of influence of the various factions, marking out several major events, and clearly presenting the theme of rescuing the goddess and the conflicts among the factions.
After the full story is complete, I'll begin the second-cycle revision. The focus will be on character relationships, deepening the emotional development, and fixing blind spots in the feminism, typos, holes in the setting, logical inconsistencies, and other bugs.
After the second cycle is complete, I'll begin the third-cycle revision. The focus will be on making the characters feel more well-rounded, laying out the mysteries, adjusting the narrative pacing, and increasing the dramatic tension, all to improve the reading experience through the craft of storytelling.
(If I grow quickly enough, I may be able to make all these improvements in one go during the second and third cycles.)
(Right now, I have the ambition but not the ability, so I can only focus on completing the first-cycle goals.)
If you enjoy seeing the process of struggling and growing, feel free to start reading now. If you're not very tolerant of rough edges, you can bookmark it and wait until the second-cycle revision is done.
Weibo: @San Ye Jin AmeliaGin
Theme: Recreate ancient civilization and celebrate love and peace.
This week's update is in "Yue Xiaozhuo's Fantasy Adventure", click on the author's column to see it.
"Yue Xiaozhuo's Fantasy Adventure" was originally positioned as an independent short series of fairy tales. Although it shares the same worldview with "Yue Yin Wan Chuan", the plot content is not much related.
But as the world view of "Moon Seal in Ten Thousand Rivers" gradually spread, when I revised "Yue Xiaozhuo's Fantasy Adventure", I increased its proportion as a prequel to "Moon Seal in Ten Thousand Rivers" and added a lot of story content that is closely related to "Moon Seal in Ten Thousand Rivers".
The story of six-year-old Yue Xiaozhuo and Su Xiaoyao in this episode is a story that serves more of the main plot of "Moon Seal and Ten Thousand Rivers". The characters that appear are all foreshadowing the main plot. During the revision process, I almost overturned the original version and rewrote it.
The original version of "Yue Xiaozhuo's Fantasy Adventure" was released on other platforms in 2021. At that time, the name was still called "Yue Xiaozhuo's Fantasy Adventure". At that time, "Yue Yin Wanchuan" had not yet been written and was still in the outline stage.
During the revision process of moving to Jinjiang this time, I made a lot of adjustments to the vocabulary expressions of love girls, and will add more content related to the main plot.
"Yue Xiaozhuo's Fantasy Adventure" is a fairy tale for girls. It is also the time and space where the six-year-old Yue Zhuo lives. In this timeline, some things that echo the later main plot will happen, and people who meet will meet in advance.
Do you want to change it? It's okay to change boys and girls to "boys and boys" or girls and boys. Boys don't deserve to be called boys.
What happened to "pregnant girl"? Why get pregnant while still a child?
Disapproval of early childbearing for women. First of all, it will greatly affect girls' careers, and then early childbearing will shorten life span, and will also lead to earlier menarche from generation to generation, which will further reduce the height of women from generation to generation.
I saw a saying: Men are not yang and women are not yin. The essence of women is the harmony of yin and yang, and the rhythm is balanced. The nature of men is an imbalance of yin and yang and dysfunction.
I saw recommendations under other i women's articles, so I came over to support them.
The demographic red line and demographic dividend are too male-centric, because only infertile men will be extremely panicked about this matter. Women can create life and death, so this problem does not exist at all.
My personal opinion: Some titles/names/titles are too special and seem cumbersome, which will affect the mood of reading. The eight major surnames in ancient times have female characters among them, so you can use them. I'm tired of looking at the names of this queen's family. The one in the academy was a good idea, but the apprentice didn't change it, so why not replace it with a student? Maybe it's because it hasn't been revised yet. Some words have been avoided, and some words have been used subconsciously. The part about "name" in the web settings should not be too complicated, as it will make you tired.
Just call me Shi Niang. Niang is a good word. The academy is dominated by women, but the founding of the country was ruled by the emperor and the empress. When the emperor died, the empress could not do it alone. This is wrong. This is not called co-governance. It is obvious that men are in charge independently, and women are worse than men. And then we have to rely on women for help, which is unreasonable. In a world where women are obviously strong, the emperor should also be a female emperor.
Queen can be changed to king, only the male king needs a special title
What a scourge for the clan... Actually, what kind of clan do the Otoid people have? The Y will subside and only the mitochondrial genes are inherited from the female.
This week's update is in "Yue Xiaozhuo's Fantasy Adventure", click on the author's column to see it. "Yue Xiaozhuo's Fantasy Adventure" was originally positioned as an independent short series of fairy tales. Although it shares the same worldview with "Yue Yin Wan Chuan", the plot content is not much related. But as the world view of "Moon Seal in Ten Thousand Rivers" gradually spread, when I revised "Yue Xiaozhuo's Fantasy Adventure", I increased its proportion as a prequel to "Moon Seal in Ten Thousand Rivers" and added a lot of story content that is closely related to "Moon Seal in Ten Thousand Rivers". The story of six-year-old Yue Xiaozhuo and Su Xiaoyao in this episode is a story that serves more of the main plot of "Moon Seal and Ten Thousand Rivers". The characters that appear are all foreshadowing the main plot. During the revision process, I almost overturned the original version and rewrote it. The original version of "Yue Xiaozhuo's Fantasy Adventure" was released on other platforms in 2021. At that time, the name was still called "Yue Xiaozhuo's Fantasy Adventure". At that time, "Yue Yin Wanchuan" had not yet been written and was still in the outline stage. During the revision process of moving to Jinjiang this time, I made a lot of adjustments to the vocabulary expressions of love girls, and will add more content related to the main plot. "Yue Xiaozhuo's Fantasy Adventure" is a fairy tale for girls. It is also the time and space where the six-year-old Yue Zhuo lives. In this timeline, some things that echo the later main plot will happen, and people who meet will meet in advance.
Do you want to change it? It's okay to change boys and girls to "boys and boys" or girls and boys. Boys don't deserve to be called boys.
What happened to "pregnant girl"? Why get pregnant while still a child? Disapproval of early childbearing for women. First of all, it will greatly affect girls' careers, and then early childbearing will shorten life span, and will also lead to earlier menarche from generation to generation, which will further reduce the height of women from generation to generation.
I saw a saying: Men are not yang and women are not yin. The essence of women is the harmony of yin and yang, and the rhythm is balanced. The nature of men is an imbalance of yin and yang and dysfunction.
I saw recommendations under other i women's articles, so I came over to support them.
The demographic red line and demographic dividend are too male-centric, because only infertile men will be extremely panicked about this matter. Women can create life and death, so this problem does not exist at all.
My personal opinion: Some titles/names/titles are too special and seem cumbersome, which will affect the mood of reading. The eight major surnames in ancient times have female characters among them, so you can use them. I'm tired of looking at the names of this queen's family. The one in the academy was a good idea, but the apprentice didn't change it, so why not replace it with a student? Maybe it's because it hasn't been revised yet. Some words have been avoided, and some words have been used subconsciously. The part about "name" in the web settings should not be too complicated, as it will make you tired.
Just call me Shi Niang. Niang is a good word. The academy is dominated by women, but the founding of the country was ruled by the emperor and the empress. When the emperor died, the empress could not do it alone. This is wrong. This is not called co-governance. It is obvious that men are in charge independently, and women are worse than men. And then we have to rely on women for help, which is unreasonable. In a world where women are obviously strong, the emperor should also be a female emperor.
Queen can be changed to king, only the male king needs a special title
What a scourge for the clan... Actually, what kind of clan do the Otoid people have? The Y will subside and only the mitochondrial genes are inherited from the female.