A Shattered Reality

The beginning of your writing is very good, Xiaobaozi. It's a bit surprising to me. At first, I just thought that Gao Ma had something wrong, but I didn't expect that Gao Ma was going to take the blame. This is what I think from a pure reader's point of view. If you turn it around later, then I will think it is so amazing. The future is promising, Baozi.

Update, my little baby

The overall story is great. Xiaobaozi, I feel like I want to read on. The opening chapter has a good suspense, and I am very talented in writing. However, the narration uses my God's perspective as little as possible to describe, such as the part about their mother, which will reduce the sense of substitution.