The Starting Point Sect Master Wants to Jump Ship to Jinjiang

I had mixed feelings while following it all the way. At first I was attracted by the setting (omg The Rebirth of Immortal World ABO Master and Disciple Human Dragon was dancing on my xp), then gradually I didn't care if it was 1v1, and then I didn't care if it was ABO, and then I didn't even care if it was a human (proving once again that the lower limit of human beings is flexible). Then, I want to shout here, again, with a decaying voice from the coffin - why did you appear in JJ?!! It can be said that the group portraits are so good that I don't care about the NPCs. You know, I have never looked at NPCs before, but here I wish everyone would have an affair with the Master. What's wrong? I just want every good girl to be happy. What's my crime? (Arrogantly akimbo) Let me talk about the overall feeling. The description of the characters is great. It can be said that it shows the charm of each important supporting role (the strength shows how good the NPC is). The characters are not flattened. Each character is flesh and blood and has its own thoughts. To be honest, you told me that this is the author's first book in this regard. I was surprised, because the complexity of the characters can easily lead to flattening of the characters. However, there are no particularly abrupt facial characters in this article, and they are all very practical. The only shortcoming is the control of the overall nodes and rhythm of the plot. A node is a key point when an event or a relationship changes from quantitative to qualitative, but the treatment in the article is a bit stiff. For example, when the key point is reached, the next chapter jumps to a period of time from another perspective, and then flashbacks to the important events in the previous chapter. This narrative technique is okay, but it is not suitable for multiple uses. The continuity of the article is best for mobilizing the reader's emotions. Consistent, this makes it easier for readers to better achieve emotional resonance with the people in the book, and jumping the perspective after some events will cause this empathy to be forced to interrupt, and the emotions will be adjusted to a position that is neither high nor low. It is great in a question and answer situation, such as placing it at the end to whet everyone's appetite and give answers at the end, but it is still easy to cause a break in the rhythm in the early and middle stages. Then there is the control of the emotional line. When the conflict did not completely break out in the early stage, the main plot line revolved around the master picking up children and killing scum, and the hidden plot revolved around Xiaolong recovering his memory and finding his body to kill scum. Then, emotional exchanges and interactions were carried out at the intersection of the itinerary, interspersed with other emotional lines to assist reconciliation. This section is better, but in the mid-term, because there are too many characters, the emotional lines are scattered. Many chapters are not on the other side, which will lead to insufficient sugar for the main CP, and then in the event After the end, there was no corresponding big one (referring to further emotional communication and inner pulling) to bridge this gap, which caused the 170 car to be a little abrupt in the emotional line. In fact, this can be achieved by one or two character monologues interspersed in the main line to achieve emotional traction. It mainly needs to create a sticky atmosphere when the relationship between the two heats up, and then after the relationship is revealed, the relationship changes from sticky to honeypot, completing the qualitative change of the emotional line, and the two people's relationship with each other takes a further step. Unfortunately, there are some gaps in the two-person perspective that have not been filled in this relationship progression. As a result, the reader was unable to keep up with the speed of the two people getting into the car, but at least we held the door open and got in. Then comes the honeypot period... My honeypot period, ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooong, you really look like the former male protagonist, they haven't been to the temple fair yet, oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo, and then the two of them are tit for tat, with revenge and obstruction flying together, misunderstandings and contradictions, they dipped directly from the honeypot and threw it into the bitter melon juice! (I didn't mean to say this was bad, I just felt very painful.) Then the conflict broke out, and the two people completely broke up. To be honest, I am really looking forward to the two of us doing our own thing here, you revenge yours, I block mine, and then in my heart I feel pain for you and mine. We obviously hurt the same thing, but the pain point is completely different. And due to the difference in information and purpose between the two parties, the two people have no communication at all, causing the rift to gradually become rigid. This is the warmth of the crematorium. Then I discovered that the crematorium had only burned me to death. I had given up on burning it in the crematorium, but then I found that neither Xiaolong nor Master had such intention in their hearts. Xiaolong is such a tsundere. She got married and divorced but still managed to raise three children by herself. She only has a mouth that can talk, but she doesn't want to admit that you love her. I guess if you throw the entire Yucang Mountain to her, she will have to keep up, and then work exhaustingly for a long time, and then say to you, "I did it just for fun because I had nothing to do. Don't think it's because of someone else." Ha, you are so arrogant. As for the Master, through the gradual self-digestion and the influence of Gu insects during the decades of disappearance, she completely realized that falling in love was falling in love, and she could even hit a straight ball in the Tianjimen Cemetery. Then this led to them constantly adding firewood under the stove, and I lay down on it, and the crematorium burned me to death. Back to the topic, the crematorium burned me to death, but the relationship between the two is still not clear. I think this is a problem of length. In the early stage of this article, when it should be advanced, there was too much emphasis on some details, but in the later period, when the conflict broke out and it needed to be elaborated, it was too short. In fact, there are only 54 chapters from the time 170 drivers drive to the end of 224, but these 54 chapters are actually the chapters that this article should describe in a certain sense. In this chapter, all conflicts break out one by one, all characters appear one after another, and all The foreshadowing was revealed one after another, and all the truth came to light. In fact, when I was reading Chapter 170, I was prepared to read Chapter 170 again, because there was too much to write later, but in the end there were only Chapter 54. Having to accomplish so many things in Chapter 54 would definitely lead to something. The events and characters could not be fully developed. They just came on stage in a hurry and ended in a hurry. Then the appearance of such a close secondary character will make the connection of the already precarious main emotional line even less obvious. But fortunately, there is the ancestor of the Nine Tails who saved my cp in danger. Thank you ancestor. In general, the writing is very good and the characters are well created, but the rhythm control and emotional description need more exploration. In fact, I think if the author has time to polish the whole article in the future, it may not be able to make the gold list. But promise me, don't waste this kind of good thing on JJ. It doesn't even give me broth, it doesn't deserve it. (The above is my humble opinion. If there is anything inappropriate, please forgive me) But when it comes to meat, I have to mention the plug-in system in this article. Its presence is generally most useful when recognizing people - which little goblin did Master come into contact with today? It can be said that he is the most shameless abo, but who cares about JJ? Damn it. Finally, congratulations on the completion and thank you for meeting me. I hope that the author can continue to open up new paths in writing articles in the future and gain the joy of creation from words.

So sad. [Senior Sister Gongning is known as the Heavenly Vegetable in the Jiquan of Yucang Mountain. ] [Master, you have no heart, what a scumbag you have cultivated. ] [This book tells us that if we don't get close to men, we will become unhappy. ] [The position of [Master] is hereby established as one of the most dangerous professions in cultivating immortality] [A master who is not cared about by his disciples is not a good lesbian. ] [I originally thought that Xiaolong's behavior of being a talkative and silent arrogant person would lead to the crematorium, but it turned out that the crematorium only burned me to death. Master and Xiaolong had long since merged and become sticky, and I became the biggest loser. ] The master is so miserable. He failed to clear the level when he woke up. He foresaw the tragic fate in the future. He tried to change it but found that he couldn't escape. He gave up on himself and jumped into the crack thinking that he would die but was picked up by someone. He thought it was his fate and met a little village girl who was not part of the plan. At this time, the little village girl basically carried the master's last expectation for the world - you see, she has never appeared before. So no matter how hard I work, is there really hope to change everything? So when Master learned that the one he picked up was not a village girl but a big villain, and she had never met any non-staff personnel before, to be honest, Master didn't collapse on the spot. I admired Master's mental toughness. In addition, she was facing a second betrayal at the same time—— He was deceived by his sweetheart from beginning to end, and then he learned that he was suspected to be the "Wan Wan Lei Qing" of his sweetheart, and then he learned that the Zhu sisters who he had worked so hard to rescue who were afraid of being harmed by the black dragon had actually been involved with the black dragon behind his back early in the morning. At that time, the master was in a state where her master was unreliable, her senior brother could not tell her, her senior sister was in love, and her nephew was autistic. This situation was no less than a situation of betrayal and separation. She could not tell anyone about her pain, and she could not find any place in the world for her to rest. Harbor, she didn't even have much time to heal her wounds, because the black dragon's rage of revenge kept burning. If she remained silent, she would undoubtedly sit back and watch her relatives, friends, and all living beings in the world die in front of her eyes again. She couldn't stand by and watch, so she had to force herself to cheer up. I was really worried about the state of Master's soul countless times after the master-disciple conflict broke out. If the human soul must find a place to live, so that it can walk freely in the world, then how did Master spend that time? Ah, I also found out how she survived later - she used Gu. This woman is really cruel to herself. If you have to force yourself through the previous pain because you have to cheer up and face it, what will you do after everything is over? I really feel sorry for you, even in the end, you were making plans for the Black Dragon. Ten reincarnations can certainly offset the injustice she has done, but what about you? Did you do something wrong? Ten lives are not long or short. You have not ascended to immortality. You do not have that endless longevity. Even if Xiaolong only has half a hundred lifespan in each reincarnation, it is still five hundred years. But you are already more than three hundred years old. Everyone in the immortal sect knows that even the previous generation Master Tianji, who is famous for his longevity, only has a lifespan of just over eight hundred years... Do you want to spend your whole life waiting? I declare that Xiang Shiyan has become the most heart-wrenching master among the immortal cultivation novels I have ever read. Of course, I don't mean that Xiaolong is not miserable, but her misfortune and Master's misfortune are almost evenly distributed in the two categories of body and soul, but they are both equally helpless, and the fault is in this world. So, Don't you think about making a sweet follow-up episode? What happened to the Immortal Sect and the Demon Realm after the Human-Dragon War? Are Senior Sister Long and Master Yuming still at odds? Can Zhu Yun and Zhu Yu completely get rid of the dark past and achieve what they want? What happened to the two poor "outsiders" Huaiye and Du Ruo? Has Master taken good care of the hidden injuries in his body? Xiaolong's seal cultivation will still remember the master after ten lives? How is Master doing during the hundred years of waiting? Please, at least tell me whether she will pamper the Master properly in ten lifetimes (beating the ground and crying)

I feel a little bit at a loss, I can only forcefully say that it was worth it for the master... Even these bad guys did not suffer any punishment from God, they died easily and were reincarnated. Xiaolong was even worse. He had to be punished for ten lives before he could reconnect with the master. Old man, they were skinned and eaten, why don't you punish these bastards? You have to say that there are no innocent people in this world. In the end, In the end, Xiaolong had to suffer miserably to wash away his sins. Although the master himself had been lonely for so long, he was still a bit short-changed. Xiaolong had to repay his sin debt, but could Xiaolong's debt be repaid in this way? There was also the unlucky dragon mother who had been burned for hundreds of years. After the master knew the system, he didn't understand that justice and fairness in this world were so false.

. . The ending was so uncomfortable that it was both breathless and breathless. I really regret staying up late to watch the foggy ending.

I don't understand Master very well. Although it was only Gu Fubai and the other three who openly chopped off Xiaolong and took away the secret treasure from her body, the whole Taixu Sect was also a vested interest, and the disciples of the sect also enjoyed more resources for cultivating immortals brought by the expansion of the sect with the dragon's secret treasure. Don't encourage others to do good unless they have suffered. The master asked Xiaolong to let go of people she thought were innocent. It was too painful to stand and talk. How could she be qualified to judge Xiaolong? It seems that fate has changed, but it seems that it has not changed. In the end, he is still coerced by the law of heaven and stands on the opposite side of Xiaolong, right?

Is Longlong hopeless? In that case, it's better for everyone to die. Perfect be (×)

Ending and spreading flowers, why is Senior Sister Gong Ning so miserable? Uh-huh, Master must have died in the end... Everyone is just as miserable. Does the master come to visit every reincarnation? It feels like watching a stray puppy...

After watching it, I feel so lost. The last scene is heart-breaking. I think of the heart-breaking scenes at the parental level. Is it true that someone who has lost his heart to his mother and lived for so many years has nothing but parenting responsibilities? It feels like this sect picks up kittens and puppies everywhere, and then doesn't teach much. Every time the little deer in Black Dragon looks at Master Zunran with tears streaming down his face. Master Hou wants to refuse but still moves, just like that "you know I left my mother when I was a child", so it is inevitable for the little animals to play the piano and hug their arms... The feeling of Senior Sister Long eating at three families reminds me of a bad cat that eats breakfast at the east house, snacks at the west house, and stays overnight at the north house...

Okay, so far I can have a bite of widow's rice, and I can satisfy a variety of xp with one article.

The setting of abo is indeed redundant. How can I put it? Although abo is popular on the Jinjiang list, there are still many readers who stopped reading after seeing the first few chapters saying that they had abo. After all, we are here to see Lily, right? However, the author did not actually write about the abo plot in subsequent chapters. Even if he wrote relevant content, he could have written it within the framework of pure lily, so readers who come for abo will not see what they want to see, which is a bit unfair. Although the author has reflected a lot on himself, I feel along the way that it is quite good that the first novel has been received to this level, and the next one that learns from the experience will definitely be even better! I hope the author can work harder, and please, stop writing abo. What you write is much better than abo.