Older Sister [GL]

Sorry to throw out a little brick. First of all, the author is so passionate about it that all his works can be read. In fact, this kind of thing is really rare and valuable. I hope I can stick to it. Then, I would like to make some suggestions. I wonder if the author has discovered that the first protagonists in many of his novels are very similar. At least I have read a few books that are similar. He likes to wander and can think a lot, which is actually not bad, but each character should be unique. I always feel that their personalities are somewhat similar. Then let's look at the very uncomfortable aspects of the character's character, that is, they can't control their emotions, become angry or lose their mind and act like wild beasts, and then they have unstoppable incestuous relations with the people they like. Although the article sets them up to be together, if such people are put in reality, is it too much? Isn't this a bit like raping someone? Wasn't the other party still resisting at that time? In addition to this point, the protagonist sometimes gets too angry and hurts himself or the other party. If you really have such a suddenly violent person around you, you will probably avoid it. Generally speaking, you can see some not so good aspects in the character of the protagonist of the novel and there are many similarities between the protagonists of the various novels. If the author sees this comment, I hope it will be helpful to your future writing_(..) [And if you don't like it, don't comment. I'm just expressing some feelings and making some suggestions after reading several articles]

Why is it only chapter 40? It's so well written. It kills me. They said there are more than 60 chapters. Why can't I see it?

! I'm wondering if Ye Li'er has depression

Sister, I also write lily essays Coincidentally, I found it on my browser. I only read chapters 30-34. These chapters made me feel that the second heroine didn't dislike the heroine, but that she had been enduring it. I only read four chapters because the browser refreshed it. I don't understand either of them, but my intuition tells me that Liang Si loves Ye Li'er. This is my first feeling. While I understand Liang Si, I am also as sad as Ye Li'er. You obviously love me, but you restrain yourself for some reason I love you so much, but you keep saying I'm still young I traveled thousands of miles to find you, and saw you talking and laughing with others, and even kissed you. At that moment, my heart dropped. I have always been sure that Liang Si loves the heroine. Later, when I saw the heroine so sad, Liang Si hugged the heroine, which made me even more confident in my guess. Writing novels has been a headache lately, so I went out for a walk (?ω?) The writing is very good, better than me, much better, I like it very much I am a lesbian, so I only write about lilies, for the readers who like lilies, and for myself. I write novels because of my cleverness, this is the cause; I like women to fall in love, this is the effect I hope that readers can read the novel with sincerity: if you like this work, it is the greatest affirmation and the greatest encouragement to the author. I saw that the last chapter you updated was a long time ago, and I was thinking that if you don't update it, I will secretly find you and ask you how the follow-up plot is (#/.\#) This is the first comic book fanfic on my little site. I haven't updated it for a year. During this period, some fans urged me to update it. It's been a busy time. I've really lost my brain in writing. I can't write anymore and I want to hit a wall. I have started to fill in the gaps recently, which makes it difficult for readers. I have been waiting for a year (づど) I happen to be short of someone. If you don't mind, you can contact me. If nothing goes wrong, I may submit my two original articles next year. If I can't catch up on time, I will most likely have to submit modern articles first. Jinjiang, that is my goal I write novels for no other reason than for my interest and because I love it.

? Be, I don't understand, damn it, why is there no tail?

I have read Chapter 64 so far. From Chapter 41 to Chapter 64, it is all swordsmanship. Young readers think that Liang Si's road to redemption is too long (I don't know why I always think it is IELTS? (???)). It covers and exceeds the sweetness of this article, which makes me reluctant to read it anymore for the time being. Then Ye Li developed from depression and self-mutilation to severe depression. Xiao Xiao thought that more connections were needed. In episode 64, I felt that Ye Li's reaction to Ye Li's mother's repeated stimulation was a little too calm. Ye Li's mother ignorantly and angrily told her to cut her wrists and mutilate in front of her. Coupled with the previous harsh words about their sexual orientation, it was enough to make Ye Li, who was already full of negative energy, burst into violent waves. He hit the wall crazily and screamed to give up everything. It should be more appropriate to deal with it calmly.

It makes me feel sour, like eating a sour radish. The short sweetness is followed by a long bitterness, which makes people silent and makes them think deeply. I can't sleep and continue reading, hey (?`⊿?)?

Compared with the previous novels, last year's work is more mature in terms of language expression and has a relatively stable style of expression. The structure is more refined and complex; the narrative mode is richer, no longer a simple chronological order, or a simple perspective change. There have also been significant changes in technique. It can be seen that such changes are not only the accumulation of quantity, but also the result of your own careful conception and speculation. I rather like these changes. In the work I've read so far, I've found some interesting elements that keep recurring. They mainly include: memories of campus life and love; the two heroines growing up together; childhood sweetheart male classmates/affectionate student boyfriends; highly insulting and hurtful rumors; the anger and violent obstruction faced when confessing sexual orientation to relatives and friends; the lament that lesbianism is "a pity" for heterosexual men. In terms of scene selection, you seem to like to use gay bars, some southern tourist attractions, etc. In scenes like this, the protagonists' relationships sometimes progress a lot. The perspective/focus of the narrative is generally placed on the dominant/stronger party in the love relationship (aggression). Sometimes the protagonist is younger in age, experience or wealth, and is prone to emotions. I will continue to read "Sister" to the end and will leave you a comment if I find any new interesting discoveries. Looking forward to news about your new work this year. Also: It is inconvenient that the author's gzh cannot leave a message to comment. I hope you can consider enabling the chapter comment function. Eugene

Why is my sister gone? I want to finish reading it.

Ah, author, where can I read the remaining 20 chapters? I always feel uncomfortable before seeing the ending.