[Harry Potter] This Is Not a Fanfiction

Li Ming has a tendency to be a scumbag... This chapter is so broken

Damn it, who is the attacker?

Although it feels a bit pity that the protagonist did not get together with Snape in the end, but after all, he liked him, so he feels more relieved than sad, right?

Pack it up and take it away. Please continue to work hard.

So handsome! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Scream! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! My favorite handsome guy! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

I put off reading this article by Ning Ning for a long time. I have always been quite picky about fans, especially those who have never read the original work and basically don't read it. Therefore, I read this article entirely as an original article. Except for a few very famous characters, I don't know any of them by name, let alone cute or anything else. Even if I deliberately chose to read it on my mobile phone, I only lasted until Chapter 19 and then stopped reading. I remember I briefly reviewed an Infinite fanfic before. Fanfics are works based on the author's love for the original work or original characters, so it is inevitable that the author's subjective consciousness will affect the character's direction in the fanfic. I don't hate it. But I hate the arrangement where the protagonist inexplicably likes a certain character in the original work because the author prefers that character. However, it seems that the author of the original novel sometimes has too much love for the characters he wrote, and the protagonists are inexplicably together in the plot, but it is not as obvious as the fan fiction. This article gave me this feeling. The protagonist's feelings for the professor and Evan were too sudden. There was no foreshadowing at all and he suddenly felt that he fell in love with someone. This someone was a good friend who he had grown up with. Especially when you suddenly fell in love with your best friend, you actually played with art, which really made me have the urge to touch my forehead - - A childhood sweetheart, I knew that the other person liked someone else, and I didn't have any obvious affection for him beyond friendship before, but suddenly I felt that I fell in love with him because of his "vulnerable" look. What's even more speechless is that he also recalled his youthful first love in high school in his previous life in a very literary and artistic way - the first love was still a woman. I said, let's not mention whether there will be any discomfort in the sudden change of the protagonist's sexual orientation. It is barely acceptable to suddenly have a heartbeat because of a look. However, if you fall in love with a friend because of a look, is this love at first sight or love that lasts for a long time? If you can come around later, mention the interaction between the protagonist and the professor in the past, and explain that the relationship has been there for a long time, but it suddenly became clear or something, then forget it. But you just let the protagonist suddenly understand his feelings, and then continued with the plot after it was over - you didn't even specifically describe the scene where the protagonist got along with the professor. I know you wanted the cannon fodder professor, but such an arrangement would leave people speechless. As for Evan, well, I admit that I directly criticized it when I saw the plot where the protagonist was estranged from the professor, was sad after leaving, and was touched by Evan's tenderness, so he ran over to express his love... (Although it turned out to be for a reason later, I was already confused...) Emotional scenes need to be foreshadowed, and love at first sight also requires getting along to truly understand each other. Rather than being replaced by the author saying that the protagonist fell in love with someone because of something, for readers to feel the feelings between the protagonists, it still needs to be expressed through the interaction between them. Regarding the protagonist... I didn't want to shoot it originally because it was too repetitive with the content of the protagonist in the original article - but there are some things I still want to say. Maybe it's really the reason why I personally don't like emotional dramas. I really can't accept the behavior of the protagonist who travels into a world like HP and wants to "protect his family" while only choosing to get close to the original characters instead of working hard to improve his own strength. Although I don't like protagonists who act arbitrarily just because they know the plot of the original work, or who have some advantages and become omnipotent because of time travel, but I don't like protagonists who don't work hard at all and focus on romance! Therefore, Nai's two articles are basically stepping on my thunder, Mo... But for such a protagonist, when something happens, the thought "I'm here, I won't let anything happen to you!" Should I say he's too self-righteous or something? To say something like this, you must at least have great confidence in yourself, right? Maybe what you want to express is that he cares about the professor, then it can only be said that this text is not suitable for such expression. In addition, when I read the article, I kept silently guessing the age of the protagonist. According to the CET-6 examination, he was at least a college student, that is, in his twenties. He actually spit on people when he was a baby... After that, he pretended to be cute and there was no awkwardness at all, and he dealt with things in a completely child-like way. Can I say that his brain has degenerated due to insufficient brain capacity as a baby after time travel... I admit that I am vicious... As for the plot... Although I am not qualified to tell you, I still recommend writing an outline first next time. The main character settings and the main plot line should be determined first. Although I often say that outlines are used to distort, but without an outline, the main plot line cannot be determined, and it will only make the article more scattered and jumpy. The cuteness of an article mainly comes from the plot and the protagonist. The protagonist drives the plot, and the plot shapes the protagonist. I am a protagonist person, and a loving enough protagonist can allow me to relatively ignore the plot (well, I don't know about others), especially if you are writing a fanfic, it is perfectly fine to pick out some more exciting plot routes from the original work. Okay, now that we have taken the photo, we might as well take it to the end. Ning Ning's writing style is pretty good, but her rants are a complete failure. Complaining is not supported by writing alone. It is more caused by the character of the protagonist. The protagonist you set has no talent at all for complaining. Occasionally vomiting can adjust the atmosphere, but you have to vomit from beginning to end... Are you torturing yourself or your child? Phew, finally finished. I thought I wouldn't be able to write a long review after just reading a little bit, but it seems I'm getting better and better at making bricks... Mo. Okay, now that both reviews are out, go ahead and write a review for me... □□, I want bricks!

Sprinkle flowers Pack~~

Big abuse hurts the body, small abuse makes people happy.

Meow, full of love,

Halfway through, I saw someone saying it was a bad ending, so I hurried to the end to watch the ending. I found the sentence "Two Men in My Family". I was immediately satisfied and went back to continue reading. The result! ! Now when I saw the last thing I found out that the two men were Evan and Brace, I was so angry! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !