To her dying day, Hua Nian never understood how picking up some random person had turned them into fellow disciples, or how her own mother had even taken him in as her godson! After the two of them had lived together in an unremarkable way for three years... Hua Nian died because of the person she had picked up...
In the Celestial Realm:
Hua Nian: "Wait, what did I do wrong?!"
Bai Pu: "You didn't do anything wrong."
Hua Nian: "Then why am I still not dead?!"
Bai Pu: "Because you still have an unfinished bond of fate."
Hua Nian: "What bond of fate? To hell with that! I'm going to..."
Before he could finish, Bai Pu gave him a light push through the sea of mist leading to the human world...
And so began his ceaseless entanglement, across heaven and earth, with the person he had picked up...
One morning, several years later, in Ye Mu's room,
Hua Nian hid his face under the covers and sobbed uncontrollably. "So, never pick up random things!"
Content warnings:
1. The whole book is written in first person. Please don't read if you can't accept that.
2. A beginner's first novel, with elementary-school-level writing. (Please be gentle with the criticism, everyone! [Covers face, sobbing and begging on my knees])
3. The beginning may be a little dull due to some necessary setup. If you're not interested, you can start from Chapter Eight.
This is my first time writing a novel, so please show this newbie a little kindness! [Begging on my knees]
Theme: Even if you've died, hurt someone, or been condemned by everyone, life will still go on.
For beginners, it's best not to delve into grand worldviews. It's easy to lose control. Also, focus on writing more.
First-person narratives are difficult to write in a long format, so I can understand if the perspective and timeline aren't well-arranged. Speaking of which, why include Ye Xiao and Xiao Die in a male-male storyline? Will A Mu and Hua Nian end up together? After all, their destiny began in childhood. It's just that the first-person perspective always revolves around the master and mother—it gets a bit tedious. In special circumstances, the titles could be changed, or the protagonist's inner monologues could be altered to make it more interesting. As for the fight scenes, well, maybe they lacked the subtlety and nuance of rough-and-ready combat; they didn't quite capture that feeling. Overall, it's still pretty good. Please update soon, Hua Nian's path to immortality! 666
Not enough! Ah Xun, you have to go faster!
Ah Xun, I'm rooting for you!?????
Are they getting married?
Hhhhhhh, interesting
What Ye Sheng said... Probably isn't true...
What a fantastic entrance! Sheng Sheng's performance was amazing! I'll always support you, the best Ye Sheng!!
Ah Xun, not bad! Keep updating! I support you!
Ugh, I can't compare to this writing style anyway. Update now, quick!